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This is just a re-written beginning to the story I posted before, Screaming. I didn't really like the way it started out, so I decided to try it again, with some help.
Elia jumped and fell off her bed, waking with a start. "Stupid alarm clock…" she muttered, switching off the infernal contraption. She looked at the clock's face, which read 7:45 A.M. in purple block letters. "Oh, crap! I'm gonna be late!" She ran out of her room and into the bathroom, but not without slipping on the wooden floors a couple times. Elia, well, she wasn't so great on her feet in the mornings.
About ten minutes later, a drippy, more awake Elia stepped back into her bedroom. "Now, what to wear…" She strode over to her closet and began browsing. "AHA! Perfect!" She pulled out a plain purple t-shirt and black skinny jeans. She donned her favorite, ripped-to-shreds black Chucks. "Hair…hair…OH!" She ran back to the bathroom and pulled the towel off her head. She grabbed her brush and set to work, parting and fixing her hair just the way she liked it. She smiled at the reflection.
She ran back to her room to grab her cell phone and her book bag, which she lazily slung over her shoulder. She trotted down the stairs, almost tripping and falling, and said a quick good-bye to her mother before walking out the door. It was only about a ten-minute walk to school, so she didn't mind it. It was a nice day, anyway.
When she got to school, she was tackle-hugged by her best friend, Ari. "ELI! I missed you, girlie!" her friend squealed.
"Hey, Ari! Haha, I missed ya, too. Now, could you get off me?" Elia laughed.
"Oh, right. Sorry!" Ari replied, standing up. She gave Elia her very best 'you can't be mad at me because I'm your best friend and you love me' look, and it worked. "So, how was your weekend?"
"Eh, it was alright. I didn't do anything too spectacular. You?" Elia answered.
"I didn't really do much either, but it was still fun!" the bubbly girl replied.
"You always have fun, don't ya Ari?" Elia mused.
"Mhm!" Ari nodded. Then, the bell rang and the two girls walked to their first class together, chatting about nothing in particular.
After school, Elia started home on her usual route. About halfway to her house, she saw a group of people who appeared to be very drunk. Knowing better than to go near, she took a detour down an alleyway. Whilst walking down the alley, a loud noise made the presence of something else apparent. Elia wheeled around, ready to face whatever it was. All she saw was an empty bottle, so she turned around and kept walking.
Suddenly, she felt a painful slash across her back. She jumped forward, turning toward the back in the process. She saw a strange, black little creature with bright yellow eyes. She screamed and ran the other way, desperately hoping to escape the thing. When she got to the end of the alley, there were two more of the little black things. She figured she'd have to fight her way past, so she grabbed the nearest available weapon—a piece of re-bar. Weapon in hand, she swung at the creatures, catching one in the side. It was tossed aside, and she swung again. The second blocking her path flew to the other side, and she ran for it, tossing her weapon aside. She didn't stop to check if the attackers were following her, she just ran to her house. Once inside, she locked the door and ran up to her room. She tossed her bag down in the corner and plopped down on her bed. "What a weird experience… I wonder what those things were…" She slowly closed her eyes and drifted off to sleep.
She was in a dark city. The sky was dark, the buildings and roads dark, the very air itself seemed dark. She looked up at the moon, which was a giant, bright heart. Partially blocking the moon was a large castle. She felt some strange, urgent need to go to the castle. She started off in what she thought was the correct direction to land her at its doors.
Elia woke, once again, by falling off her bed. However, the alarm wasn't going off. She looked at the clock, whose face read 6:38 P.M. "I guess I fell asleep…" She stood up and walked down the hallway to the stairs. Her mother was cooking pizza for dinner. "Hey, Mom, that smells amazing!" she called as she walked down the stairs.
"Thank you, honey! It'll be ready in just a few minutes," her mother responded. Elia sat down at the table, anxiously awaiting the deliciously-scented food. "Oh, Eli, I almost forgot! I need you to run out and check the mail for me, hon. I'm expecting a very important letter. Could you do that really quickly?"
"Sure! No problem, Mom!" Elia jumped up out of her seat and jogged to the community's mailbox. It was rather dark outside, and she couldn't find the right key to get the mail. She was fumbling with the keyring when she heard a noise behind her, which startled her, causing her to drop the keys on the ground.
"Who's there?" she asked nervously while reaching down to retrieve her keys. A burning sensation slashed itself across her leg and she jumped. She left the keys on the ground and took off toward home for the second time that day. However, she cursed the fates as more of the little black creatures appeared in her path. This time, however, there weren't just the plain black creatures. There were several different kinds of the black-thing-with-yellow-eyes, and they all seemed to be closing in on her. "Oh, why didn't I bring that re-bar with me?" she yelled at herself, desperately trying to outrun the attackers.
She made it to her driveway before tripping on a ledge in the concrete. "Really? Now, of all times? MOM! HELP ME!" she screamed. She heard her mother's voice screaming something she couldn't make out, and the door flew open.
"ELIA! Hold on, honey, I'm coming!" her mother shouted, running towards the girl. More slashing sensations made themselves known, and she screamed. The demonic, or so she had begun to think of them, things were swarming over her, clawing and lashing at her. One of them leaned over her torso, slashing at her rib-cage. She yelled in pain, but the thing didn't stop. It kept ripping and tearing at her, and she felt a claw jab between her ribs, probably puncturing something. She kept screaming, no matter how much it hurt. She suddenly made the realization that after they were done with her, they would go after her mother, too.
"Mom! Go inside! I don't want them to hurt you!" she yelled.
"I won't leave you!" her mother cried, frozen to the spot.
"Just go, please!" Elia cried. Her mother nodded and ran inside, locking the door. She stayed at the window, sobbing visibly. The creature hit something incredibly painful, and Elia screamed again in pain. She started coughing and spewed up blood. She could feel the warm, sticky liquid gushing out of her, and things started to go fuzzy. Elia screamed in pain one last time when she felt the little demon-creature's claws grasp her heart. Everything faded to black.
So, that was a bit longer than I thought it'd be. Please, review and tell me what you thought! I'd love to read your comments, and some constructive criticism is welcomed as well. I think I'm off to start the next chapter! Thanks for reading:D
UPDATE- March 6, 2010: So I made some slight changes in the text, and broke the really long paragraphs into pieces. Enjoy. :]
Update..again..-March 25, 2011: Sooooo….I'm not promising anything. I've just kinda had an urge to work on this the last couple days, and I've had free time. Once again I'm going to read through and see what has happened so far. And I changed her name to Elia instead of Dexia. Not diggin that one. Anyway, I'll continue on this and see where we get! C: [Also, thank you to any faithful readers who still have interest in this story, and welcome to any newcomers. C: ]