So this is my first story. I would like constructive criticism but not insults about my story. If you don´t like it don´t read it! And English is not my first language but I hope there won´t be a lot of mistakes.
I hope you want to read yet another Uriel´s story. I think there is so much not discovered about him so I wanted to dig deep and try to bring out other sides of him too.
And I Do Not Own the Soulfinder Series. Joss Stirling has that honor.
Maria´s Point Of View
"Seriously you got in trouble with the shopkeeper again? Come on! That´s like the third time this week and it isn´t even Friday yet!"
Argh my stupid brother always knows how to get in trouble, but out of it, well that was a new and undiscovered land for him. I had to get him from the shop security guard third time this week. I went after him and there was a new guard. He seemed familiar somehow but also this is a small village. Who knows maybe I´ve seen him on the street or something?
As we were walking home Brian just ignored me and started to listen to his IPod. I let him be just for now because hearing dad deal with him is bad enough for me so I won´t put him through any yelling before that. Yeah dad is a real nervous wreck but I think it´s because his job is so stressful. Luckily mum can calm him down a bit but it´s hard enough to concentrate in a house full of people and then keep it peaceful so everybody could be happy.
It is better now because Agnes and Tom moved out and got their own apartment but mum needs me here so yeah I got to help her with the others. It seems that boys are very hard to handle, especially when she has to raise five of them. Well at least I and Agnes are peaceful. All of us should move out! I´m the youngest and I´ve already graduated! Seriously they have got to find themselves some jobs! Well of course it hasn´t been long since moving to America but they are educated and they should be able to get jobs!
When we finally reached the door I was exhausted. But I had hope that I could gather the strength to interrogate Brian before dad has a chance to yell at him so the whole neighborhood will hear.
"So what exactly happened there? Why did I have to come to pick you up from the guard again?"
"Will you believe me if I tell you the truth, even if it is very weird?"
"When haven´t I believed you and have you totally forgotten that I understand when you lie?"
"Yeah, sorry anyway it was like this: I was just walking through the third aisle when this dude comes to me and bumps into me and then runs away. He seemed normal and I didn´t even feel the little piece of jewelry in my pocket until I wanted to walk out. That kid dropped a silver ring in my pocket! Then the guard came and you know what happened next."
"Okay maybe dad doesn´t need to know about this."
"Well I should tell mum and since dad´s away on his business trip maybe he won´t know this ever happened. But that will only happen if you help me! Please."
Well he was a pain in the ass but he was my brother and it was easier for all of us with a little less screaming in this house.
"Okay I´ll help, but only on one condition. You will not get in trouble for the next four months! It´ll be like a birthday gift to me.
We stepped inside and there was mum waiting for us with a tired face.
"Where were you?"
We explained it all to mum and she understood. It was our luck that she was tired from the day because otherwise she would have wanted to give us another lecture about how we should be more careful and that stuff.
Well that´s it for now but I want to know if I should continue story so please if you are reading this then review. Oh and one more thing. Does anybody know when Uriel´s birthday is? I don´t remember it being in the book but if it was message me the date. If it wasn´t then…umm… people can review different dates and I´ll pick one?
And please if you have any ideas about this story, like where should Maria work or what should be her power, I would love to know them. Don´t think I don´t have any ideas of my own but I just want to know what you would prefer to read!
And I apologize for the short chapter!