Hey every one tell me what you think about the story idea. First mermaid fan fiction.
-Danni
Tris POV
I swim into the coral and around all the fishes. And when I mean Swim into I mean Into. Sometime I even get head aches from smashing into them to much. I'm always happy when I'm racing my brother, Caleb.
1) Because I love the coral and all the sights. The fish are friendly and colorful.
And 2) because I win. Like all the time. I mean ALL the time.
I race him to catch/collect as many sea shells or pearls as possible. Sometimes even if we're lucky we find moon rock. But that's only when you go into the moon pool. If you dive deep enough. The moon pool is petty big. And moon rock is pretty hard to find. Because, every mermaid has them. Some Mermen have them one other things. Like my dad. He's the king of the ocean so he has his on his trident. Other mermen put them other places like on a bracelet or a wedding ring.
When you pass the test and everything like school and stuff you get one. It gives you powers to control water. I'm 16 so I already can control water but the moon ring lets you control more water. I have no moon ring. Yet. But when I get one I'll be able to do so much more. I can already move water in air but that's it. And you can only go up to the surface once every 6 months. It gets boring having to go by these rules all the time. But you get used to it.
"Hey slow poke!" Caleb says from in front of me. "Hurry up I'm winning by a thousand"
"Oh really? I got like 20. How much you got?" I ask.
"Maybe just maybe 16"
"Ha I win again!"
"I said maybe" He wines. "You didn't even count yours, you just guessed!"
"Fine I'll count them then" As I count I can't believe the face Caleb is making. "19, 20, 21" I laugh at Caleb's face. First of all he's just plan weird, And what is with the face. It's like a mix of disgust and disbelief. "Ha! I win! and even more that I expected!"
"Fine" He says and he starts to pout. He keeps pouting until he has an Idea. And when he has and idea he makes another face. One that's normal though. Not a mix of a Clown-fish and a Sword-fish. "How about We make a bet?"
"I'm listening" I say with one eye brow raised.
"We race this time from here to the castle. And who ever wins gets to use the other as a servant for a week. The loser not only has to be the servant for the other but also has to clean the others room for a week to without the other servants help. Okay?"
"It's a bet" I say and we shake hands. "Better get your gloves on because my room is really messy"
"No it's not." He says "Your the king's daughter you have servants, they clean your room for you. Why do you think I said with no help"
"Ug, you know I'm just trying to- You know what why don't we just go already?"
"Fine! I'll count" He gets in his racing position and so do I "1...2...3!" and with that I'm already going as fast as I can. Racing under coral and over fishes. I think Caleb is behind me. I don't see him in front of me to ya I think he's behind. I swim faster every time I think of Caleb betting me. I reach the castle first and sit on my chair. The chair is sitting in mid-air only held by water. Since my dad is the king We have these big chairs. My chair is right beside my mother's. Mom's is bigger then mine and Caleb's. Caleb's is a bit bigger then mine but only when you look at it from afar you see the difference.
Caleb comes Swimming in. He has a smile on his face, but once he sees me his smile disappears. He looks mad now. I won. I get of the chair and swim over to him.
"Oh don't worry! This will only be the worst week of your life." I say with a smirk on my face. "I want lily-pad tea. Go fetch me some" I say waving my hand. He swims out of the room really mad. I just laugh this is so funny. I get to use my brother as my personal servant! Oh this is the best day ever!
Dad comes in the room with mom right by his side.
"Hey mom. I was wondering if I could go up to the surface today. Can I?" I say with hope in my eyes.
"Have you went this 6 months?" Mom asks.
"I would be lying if I said no. So... yes" I say as I look down.
"Okay honey-"
"Really?" I look up "Oh thank you, thank you, thank you!" I say more like scream. "I'll be home by dinner!"
"You better or you'll never go up there again! And don't go near the sand!" Dad says.
"I promise!" I say as I swim out of the room. Caleb comes swimming into the room with my tea. I swim back into the room and snatch the tea from his hands then swim out of the room. I'm just so weird!
I sip my tea and swim to the moon pool. The moon pool entrance is in the water. Deep down in the water is the tunnel. That way no humans can find the entrance.
If any human falls into the moon pool on a full moon they will turn into a mermaid or a merman that's why we don't want for the people to find it.
I swim into the tunnel and find myself in the moon pool. Only me and Caleb come in here. Everyone's allowed to come in here but there scared that something will happen to them. Like they'll get kicked out but I think It's like 1% out of 100% that that will happen. They're to scared. All mermaids and mermen are scared.
I sit on the ledge made of rock and take my brush and brush my hair. Mom said that I could go up to the top but I need to get ready first. My brush is made of shells and coral. I take my clips (clams)and put them beside me. A lot of mermaids use so much stuff in their hair. I don't like that kind of stuff. I would only use it on occasions like if someone died or a wedding. I usually just put a one clip in to hold my hair from falling on my face. Other then that there is usually nothing in my hair.
As I'm brushing my hair I sing:
Flashing lights and we, took a wrong turn and we
Fell down the rabbit hole
You held on tight to me
'Cause nothing's as it seems
Spinning out of control
Didn't they tell us don't rush into things
Didn't you flash your green eyes at me
Haven't you heard what becomes of curious minds
Ooh didn't it all seem new and exciting
I felt your arms twisting around me
I should've slept with one eye opened at night oh
We found wonderland
You and I got lost in it
And we pretended it could last forever, eh
We found wonderland
You and I got lost in it
And life was never worse but never better, eh eh
In wonderland, eh eh
In wonderland, eh eh
In wonderland, eh eh
In wonderland
(The song is called 'Wonderland' by: Taylor swift if you didn't already know. Plus It's the only song she knows. Poor girl. LOL)
Mom would sing it to me when I was little. She knows so many songs but I only need to know that song. She told me that she went up to people and has a friend up there named Hana. She told me all the things she would do with Hana. She would do so many crazy things. I would always dream of doing the same things but never did. I quickly finish brushing my hair and I put the clip (clam) in my hair to keep it out of my face and swim out of the moon pool. I look around at all the coral and swim up to the surface. Once I pop my head from under the water, I see the most beautiful thing I have ever seen. The beach is all empty everything there looks pretty. The chairs and all the people are gone and just, this is the best day ever! I swim closer to the beach. mom and dad made a line in the ground only mermaids and mermen can see. It tells us how close we are allowed to the beach. It sucks because It's just ruining the view. It's a big blue line in the ocean. It's very visible because the humans made the water green-ish. I swim closer to the blue line. The line doesn't affect you if you cross it. It's just a warning that is you cross it you will get in really big trouble. I swim around jumping out of the water and diving down. I'm just playing around. I really want to go on land. Do what mom did. I want to make a friend and do crazy things.
I swim around until my tail hurts. I find a tall round rock and sit on it. Most of my tail is in the water and I'm splashing around. I'm not that close to the beach I'm far away a bit though.
I swim closer to the line. Nothing bad will happen if I go over it right? Wait mom and dad can take away my privileges of going to the surface.I sit on the rock waiting. My tail doesn't hurt anymore. I dive down and keep swimming.
"What in the world a-a mer-maid!" A human yells from the beach. Oh god I'm dead.
Hoped you liked it. Tell me what you think about the story idea.
-Danni