So… hello. This is my first potter fanfic, my 2nd ever, so please don't flame and hurt my feelings. Okay, so I came up with this story by listening to the potter stories, and I think it's a good idea. Please R&R. This starts just as Hermione and Harry walk into the great hall for their first apparition lesson.
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Lesson Gone Wrong
OAPOV
When Harry and Hermione arrived in the Hall (Ron had come with Lavender), they found that the tables had been disappeared. Rain lashed against the high windows and the enchanted ceiling swirled darkly above them as they assembled in front of Professors McGonagall, Snape, Flitwick, and Sprout-the Heads of Houses-and a small wizard whom Harry took to be the Apparition instructor from the Ministry. He was oddly colorless, with transparent eyelashes, wispy hair, and am insubstantial air, as though a single gust of wind might blow him away*.
"Good morning," said the ministry wizard. "My name is Wilkie Twycross and I shall be your Ministry Apparition instructor for the next twelve weeks. I hope to be able to prepare you for your Apparition Tests in this time-"^
"Malfoy, be quit and pay attention!" barked Professor McGonagall.
"-by which time, many of you may be ready to take your tests," Twycross continued, as though there had been no interruption.
"As you may know, it is usually impossible to Apparate or Disapparate within Hogwarts. The headmaster has lifted this enchantment, purely within the Great Hall, for one hour, so as to enable you to practice. May I emphasize that you will not be able to Apparate outside the walls of this Hall, and you would be unwise to try."
MPOV
Hah! Those fools! They think they can outsmart Draco Malfoy and the Dark Lord! I Have done it, I have found the way to kill Harry Potter! All I need to do is let him know!
I pull up my sleeve just enough to be able to see the bottom of my dark mark. I touch it lightly with my forefinger and it burns, letting the dark lord know I've touched it. I am victorious. I manage to smile, just before I faint from the agony of the burning on my arm.
VPOV
My mark burns, telling me that some one has touched it. I Stand up from my throne and turn on the spot, Apparating to wherever it is that the one who touched the mark is located.
I find my self in a large hall, one that I remember from my child hood. The Great Hall. I am surrounded by children. It's then I realize I have done it, I have found a way into Hogwarts.
I start spinning around, shooting killing curse after killing curse, killing everybody in sight. I spy Potter. I aim my wand at him, and just before I killed him, my back explodes in agony. I spin around and see Snape his wand pointing at me, anger in his eyes. I raise my wand so fast it's a blur, and with pin point accuracy, I kill him. I spin back around to see Potter, who was mid-jinx, and killed him with no remorse.
Screams filled the hall as I walk through the crowd, searching for Draco. He will be heavily rewarded. When I find him, I grab his arm, and turn on the spot, disappearing from the Great Hall in Hogwarts, victorious after killing my one true enemy, Harry Potter.
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So how'd you like it? I thought it was decent. Please R&R! Now for references! =)
*= My first paragraph I borrowed straight form the book, word for word
^= I Borrowed the dialogue from the book, word for word
BYE!!!!!!!!!!!! Until my next Ch.
Jrfess ;)
P.S I might not update as quick as usual because I'm writing another book based on the Eragon books called Mangai Read it if you want.