constructive criticism are always welcome i wish to improve
for the most part i wouldn't use names in dialogues but if conversation is between more than three characters i would use the names to define dialogues.
The story is from Ran's perspective and she is bit more observant than usual.
"Conan-kun food is ready!"
well better set the table "hurry up or food will get cold!"
huh that's odd, no response, usually he gives response , may be he didn't hear it "Conan-kun food is ready, Conan-kun" room is empty, where did he go mo
'Megure-kebu i have explained everything to Conan-kun, he will tell you what to do' ...that was, Shinichi voice ? it came from stairs.
'Shi-Conan-kun' what is he doing in the stair way
"ahh, Megure-kebu before he gets their better prepare few things that we will need"
it just Shinichi's voice and Conan-kun, but how, must be one of hakase's weird invention, but what does it suppose to mean, oh no, not that; could it be that Conan-kun...is...solving...cases in name of Shinichi!; but it can't be he is just a child, but also has a very sharp brain, and it still doesn't fits, he has too much experience for a kid, or could it be Shinichi and Conan-kun work hand to hand, that means Conan-kun tells all that stuff to Shinichi, no! that can't be it either
"Ran-neechan, i am going to police station"
"why? Aren't you going to eat"
"eh ammhhhumm Me-Megure-kebu told me to come over to the police station"
"is...that...so...? i better talk to Megure-kebu, calling a child to police station, and that also homicide division, his sense of appropriate age seems to be going of the track"
"N-No its fine; okay, i am going"
"don't be late"
"okay" he didn't mention Shinichi at all, something is fishy, better keep an eye on Conan-kun; but how i really am never able to keep an eye on him, No No Ran you got to work hard, but how should i stalk him; no, i am not much of a stalker then... yeah, i would visit the police station and see what he has to say, okay first call father :
"father when would be back home ? i had prepared lunch"
"i will be late today so leave the food in the fridge"
"okay i am going out it may take a while so don't worry"
"is it with that detective-brat!"
"mo father no of course not just nearby..."
"okay, be safe, bye"
"bye!"
good, now Sonoko uuummm what should i say to her bip-bip-bip bip-bip-bip
"moshi moshi Mori Ran here"
"Ran, it is me"
"Aaah Sonoko"
"Sorry Ran but today We can't go to shopping"
"huh ?"
"Actually, the thing is Makoto-san has just arrived so i wanted to go on a date with him so…"
"Its fine have fun, okay bye!"
"yes, again Sorry Ran, bye"
well that was easy good now better hurry up or i might not find him better take a note pad as well.
Oh boy he is nowhere to be seen then again he told me he was going to police station could it be that he lied to me ahhh Chiba-keji
"Chiba-keji Good afternoon"
"ooh Ran-san, Good afternoon what brings you here?"
"well have you seen Conan-kun "
"aahh Conan-kun, he is on a case with Megure-kebu"
"thank you"
"no problem and if you're going to wait then please wait in the waiting room i will send Conan-kun"
"aah no, just tell me when he comes okay"
"sure"
okay, that is done now i can think what that conversation meant, although it was Shinichi's voice he was nowhere to be found the only one around at that time was Conan-kun but it still didn't make sence how can a kid like him sound like Shinichi, can hakase real build device like that, no wait kaito kid can impersonate anyone sound and since Conan-kun is kid killer that means he also can do the same right nope can't see Conan-kun impersonating anyone
(in the meantime... "Go baby go run faster make daddy ri-aachoo-ch" ;
"aah Makoto-san should we go-aachoo there ?" "are you all right Sonoko-san" ;
"aachoo""hakase did you caught flu again ?";
"we should be clear in the next aacho" "are you okay Kisaki-sense ?i";
"aaho why would i go there alone aacho" "are you okay Heji ?";
"aacho" "Yamamura-kebu there is a robery at the jewllery store." )
but then how did he sound like Shinichi, hhhhhmmmmmmuuu it has to be one of the hakase's accidental failed inventions.
"Good evening Ran-san"
"Good evening Sato-keji so how are you ?"
"UP and Running, and Mori-san, you ?"
"well fine, by the way have you seen Conan-kun"
"yes, Chiba-kun told me you were looking for Conan-kun, well he is with Megure-kebu at the main office, you know today he was a real help in catching the criminal, right could you say him 'thank you' from me"
"okay"
"thanks, bye"
"bye" a real help yes of course a kid solving a criminal case is just a normal thing isn't it am i the only one who thinks that Conan-kun is hiding something, come to think of it, may be Hattori-kun know something, should i ask him; nope, since he is his big brother like person he might not tell me at all rather than he might tell Conan-kun something about it then how about Kazuha-chan yes a perfect candidate ring-ring-ring "Moshi moshi"
"Kazuha-chan it Ran"
"aah Ran-chan what is it you don't sound good ? is everything okay ?"
"yes everything is fine i just wanted to ask you something do you think that Conan-kun is a bit odd"
"well i did thought that but after finding out that a little girl like her can be a scientist i think Conan-kun is just fine"
"little girl like her ?"
"yes, the one that is living with hakase"
"You mean Ai-chan ?"
"yes"
"And she is a scientist"
"yes hakase told me himself didn't you know?"
"No but how..."
"don't know; maybe her father and mother are scientist too and they involved her as one as well"
"maybe well thank you Kazuha-chan come visit Tokyo sometimes bye"
"sure bye"
Ai-chan...is...a...scientist is that's why Conan-kun always stick's around here too much anyway better meet Conan-kun and conform it my self in any case there is something that he is hiding and i will find it out
Knock knock "Come in"
"Good afternoon Megure-kebu"
"Good afternoon Ran-kun"
"Megure-kebu, is Conan-kun still here ?"
"yes he just gone to toilet, so how is mori-kun ?"
"yes he is fine (enjoying the race as always)"
" well that is-" ti-ti-ti ti-ti-ti
"Metropolice Department Division 2 Megure speaking"
"Shinichi speaking, Megure-kebu could you pls keep my involvement in the case a secret?"
"Shinichi-kun , okay but why are you staying so low profile ?" Shinichi is on the phone
"Megure-kebu, as i said before i have created many enemies due my line of work and wish not to increase the list okay bye Megure-kebu"
"aah Shinichi-kun huh"
"Megure-kebu was that Shinichi on that line ?"
"Yeah"
"So why did you called Conan-kun ?"
"Called Conan-kun? no no actually Shinichi-kun explained him the trick and method to catch the culprit" so Conan-kun did lie to me
"is that so, guess i will have to give him some knowledge to keep kids out of his case freakiness but by the way; What was it about being low profile ?"
"Well Ran-kun, he has been keep telling me to keep his involvement secret, which is unlike him, as you know he loves attention"
"True-"
Knock knock "come in"
"Okay Megure-kebu i a- Ran-neechan why are you here ?"
"Didn't i said i will be coming to give some pice of mind to call a child to police station but Conan-kun why did you lie to me that Megure-kebu called you"
{Megure Juzo}"huh"
{Conan Edogawa}"uuhhh Shinichi-nichan told me to.."
{Ran Mouri}"That detective freak what is he up to?"
{Megure Juzo} No idea what so ever.
{Shinichi Kudo} I am dead.
{Ran Mouri} "any way Conan-kun lets go home"
{Conan Edogawa} "Okay"
Now let begin our plane; first i would have to pretend that i have no suspicion that i am suspecting his communication and identity with Shinichi on him, but how ...well there is a way, but would it be okay; uuh well he just may be Conan-kun and i am just thinking it too much, okay, then lets go through it "Conan-kun wana have ice-cream?"
"Okay, Ran-neechan"
"Actually there is a new ice-cream parlor so i wanted to go"
"okay"
got you now let's see how you escape out of this little detective (At the ice-cream parlor)
"Ran-neechan it seems quite crowded"
"No worries i have a friend working here" Ow no you don't, you are not escaping from this one "Aya how are you ?"
"Fine but what brings you here?"
"Ice-cream"
"sorry the seats are full"
"no problem just one is fine"
"okay follow me"
"thank you"
"Ran-neechan where am i suppose to sit ?"
"on my lap"
"no its fine i will stand"
"come on Conan-kun"
"i am fine stan- aaaah"[ picks up Conan and makes him sit on her lap]
"sit"
{Aya} "what would you like ?"
{Ran}"Blueberry ice-cream with berry toppings"
{Aya}"and Conan-kun ?"
{Conan}"Strawberry milk-shake with vanilla scope"
{Aya}"okay please wait"
{Conan Ran}"okay"
Now let's see how you get out of this one [takes out her phone and types a mail to Shinichi] 'Shinichi i forgot to tell you while cleaning your house your bottle of ink brocked so make sure to take a new bottle kept in the left drawer of the study table if you need'
buzz-buzz-buzzz "ahh ran-neechan i need to go to toilet"
"okay be careful"
what was that buzz and at exactly at the same time when i send the email to Shinichi what is going on or maybe he-he is Shinichi well that was a possibility no that can't be i checked that last time they both are different person with similar traits or was is just an...illusion but that can't be i saw both of him at the same time how can that be illusion but Conan-kun was acting very different because he had cold no it was still too different that means that was not Conan-kun then who can that be aah could it be that it was kid no if kid was in Shinichi's disguise then there won't have been any personality changes in Conan-kun then how
[back ground a conversation of girl and father girl "father can we watch Cinderella after this"
father" but we don't have time for that we are going Osaka to meet you grandma remember"
girl "can't i watch Cinderella any other way"
father "hhuumm well there is a way but you will have to promise to behave"
girl "yeaaaa" ]
Cinderella, the story where an abused girl gets to be a princess till 12:00 clock to meet her prince-charming; wait a second, what if Shinichi could do the same then, but it seems impractical, will he change into Shinichi every time we need to talk on phone, no no no wait he doesn't need to change he could just use voice changer that Conan-kun was using earlier then that would mean that Conan-kun is Shinichi, which would explain that night's dinner where he left and never came back as Shinichi, but as Conan-kun; that means he can turn into to Shinichi for a limited amount of time, but how did he know the amount of time he has as Shinichi hmmm ("Ran[while holding hand over his chest]", "Ran i have a case- aah[while holding hand over his chest]", "The ") wait a second, almost every time he has his hand on chest he left, means may be pain in the chest is the mark of time end "Ran-neechan what are you thinking ?"
"Conan-kun! nothing when did you came back"
"it has been sometime, you didn't notice?"
"guess i was too deep in thought "[picks up Conan n makes him sit on lap which makes him blush] although this is embracing if he is Shinichi but i can't let him be suspicious now part two of the plane "Sorry for the wait here is your order"
"Thank you"[both Conan and ran said in union]
"by the way Conan-kun, what exactly did Shinichi told you not to tell me ?"[Conan took a sip before choking on it ]
"are you okay Conan-kun ?"
"almost fine"
"guess i should scold him, right now! "[takes out her phone]
"no, it is fine ran-neechan"
"no, it is not, what if you got hurt, then i will have to answer to your mother if anything happened"[Ran dials Shinichi's number]
"Ran-neechan, i am going to toilet"
"again ?, you just went to toilet after this i am taking you to Araide-sensei for check" is he really Shinichi- "no i am fine"
"okay, this time i will go with you as well"
"you don't need to"
"no i am coming"
As i thought he is taking calls as Shinichi [After eating the ice-cream and exiting the parlor]
"Ran-neechan i just remembered something so i am going to hakase's house "
"wait, why ?"
"bye! bye!"
"mo" run mst. detective!, get some help from your private inventor, an i will prepare to catch you red handed. Let's see what we have got so far, it weird using his knowledge against him, although, i should be glad that he keeps repeating his investing process over and over persistently .
we know Haibara-chan is a scientist, and that Conan-kun may be Shinichi based on the fact that he has a voice changer and also had personality change when Shinichi is around, getting embarrassed when i express my love for Shinichi *blush*, also how he gets protective when some boy try's to flirt with me , should i really blow his cover [then remembers the time at hot bath with Conan and also all the embarrassing time she had with Conan] no, he will be getting a kick after i catch him red handed
Thank you for reading
Please do tell in comments how did i do and it may take a while before i upload next chapter.