This is my first fan fiction for Spyro. Help me with ConstructiveCriticism please.

"Where am I?" A groggy voice said as his face slowly rose from the cold floor. His eyes slowly focused to the area. He saw some dark lines that seem to be in a pattern. The captive looked a little more closely at the seemly harmless lines. He got up and slowly took a step and causing the floor to shake a little. It was a lot harder to see but the shaking woke him up a lot more. He looked harder and saw steel bars connected the floor. He did a complete three sixty to confirm his thoughts then shook his head.

"Its just a cage." he said with a little disappointment. He then walk over the seemly bland trap to feel the bars for no reason whatsoever besides 'captive curiosity'. However instead of a regular cold metallic feel he got a energizing electric shock that went though every part of scaly body. However he could not let go because his nerves was at the merry of the blitzing pole. But what made it worse was the second feature of this deceiving cage,a knock back strong enough to match a supercharge flame

The cage itself was descent walking size for his size and durable so when he was knocked back to the other side they didn't so much as filch to the impact, Due to his years of adventuring however it only the shock itself was only one but combined with the cell mash made it two hits.

"AwWwWw crap."

"Buzz! buzz buzzzz." s A sudden voice came to his left side.

"Sparx ,sparx is that you?"

"Buzz."

"Where are you?"

"Buzz buzz." said the dragonfly,causing spyro to look up. At the left side of the window was his dragon fly companion/ life indicator he was also in a cage but the bars was more closer together.

'Sparx are you okay?"

"Buzz buzz buz buzz buzz buzz buz bbuzz."

"Okay, okay I'm sorry for that." Spyro said as he got as close he can get to is friend but the shock causes by the bars made it a little iffy. "I didn't mean for you to be at green but when you saw bars surrounding you what is the first to near first thing that come to mind?"

"Buzz buz." said Sparx a little more calmly

"Hey! Spyro, Sparx Are you guys ok?"

"Hunter where are you?" spyro said as he looked around. Are you hurt? Did you see who did this to us, and and finally just how long were you awake?

"Ummm to your right but look down, no I'm okay, no and a few hours before you."

"Then why didn't you say anything right after I was shocked?" Said the young dragon walking up to the the other side to see his second best friend.

"I couldn't here anything."

"Why is that?"

"I was listening to my mp3 player and thinking of a proposal to say to Bianca while I was awake." said Hunter as he was walking to his side of the cell touching two bars with each hand.

Wait, a proposal, at a time like this why? Spyro said shocked and looking at his friend with disbelief.

"Because she means more than thinking about my escape."

"Awww that romance crap again Hunter?" Spyro said a little irritated as he though back to the false end of their third journey. " It's not going to do any good if you are dead or imprisoned forever in here you know."

"I know..I was just waiting until you or some one like Agent 9 or Byrd saves us because I don't have my bow or arrows on me."

"Did you can get try to pick the locks with your claws?"

"There's no lock."

"Shoot". Spyro said a little dishearten but was far from quitting

"I know little dude, How I'm going tell her her how much I love he-"

"Hunter not that." The multbreather said already a little sick of the deceleration of love fest. He then lay down in the place he was standing. As he sat he then tried to think back to see how this happen in the first place. Frustrated he felt like he was getting nothing done by thinking and frankly nothing would come up for this predicament... well almost nothing but we'll leave his faun out of this for now.

He then look back to sparx to see if he had anything. Asking but not moving from his current he then said. "Got anything?"

"Buzz buzz."

"Double crap."

"Who ever this or they are going to get a Very special thanks for their hospitably." Said the young beast getting more mad by the second.

"Wait, I got it...well I think." said hunter getting up suddenly with a finger in the air and a light bulb next to it.

Hunter your sure?

"Year but I have to start from the beginning, is that okay?"

"Seeing where we are right now I don't have a problem."

"Sparx what about you?" Sad the archer while looking up a little more to his place.

"Buzz"

"Ok." He then completely turned around and start to tell both of then the start and reason of the quest. His memories started at his house...

okay that's chapter one, reviews are appreciated.