Hey everyone! So, this is my very first story on FanFiction. I would say 'be nice', but all I want is for you to be truthful. Say what you want to say. I want harsh criticism. I'll accept compliments too, of course, but this is my first story as I said, and I want it to be good. And I can't progress if you don't tell me how I need to. After all, I'm not expecting to be all that great off the bat. I wouldn't be surprised if I sucked. So I need your help by telling me how to improve. As you can see, this is a pretty short chapter, just as a sample to see if you think it's any good.

"You'll be back!" Rory called cheerfully after the beautiful blonde cheerleader.

"Pathetic."

Rory turned to face the voice. The owner was leaning against the lockers. She was wearing bright teal skinny jeans and a ripped black shirt with a layer of camo fabric underneath. A neon yellow-green fingerless glove covered her right hand, while several bangles and bracelets adorned her left arm. On her feet were purple hi-top Converse knockoffs, with various silver buckles instead of laces. She was a bit pudgy, but with nice curves. But to Rory, this was all put to waste, because the girl wasn't particularly attractive. Her skin was tan, but obviously paling. There seemed to be a slight shadow above her upper lip. Her nose was slightly large, nothing special about it; it just sat in the middle of her face like all noses do. Her cheekbones were high, which was nice, but her chin wasn't quite square but also not quite round. She was medium height, but he had more of an eye for tall girls. There were large purplish-gray rings under her eyes, which were such a dark brown that they were almost black, and might've been pretty if it didn't look like she hadn't slept in ages. But the thing that really struck him was her hair. It was black and poofy and unruly and thick and frizzy, straight in some places and wavy in others, with random curls and strands of hair sticking our in random places. It almost seemed as if she hadn't brushed it in a very long time.

Rory scratched his blonde head. "Huh?"

The girl rolled her eyes and examined her blackened fingernails.

"You're the kind of guy that falls for every pretty face. You don't understand what it is to really like someone. To love them. You should like a person for who they are, not what. You couldn't fall in love with someone ugly. Someone like me, perhaps."

"That's not true!" Rory protested. "I totally like people for who they are."

The girl shook her head. "No, you don't. You're a thoughtless skirt-chaser. Once a pretty face isn't pretty anymore, you don't want it around. Come back and talk to me when you can call someone beautiful and mean it, about more than just their looks. Beautiful. Not hot, or sexy, or pretty, or even gorgeous. Beautiful, Rory."

"How do you know my name?"

"Because that guy over there is calling for you."

Rory turned and saw Ethan and Benny walking toward him.

"Hey, Rory. Who's this?"

"I have no idea."

"Oh."

"Yeah."

"Well… bye. C'mon Benny, let's get to class."

Ethan held out his hand to the girl. "Nice meeting you."

She shook his hand and watched as he froze, expressionless, his eyes white.

The girl pulled away her hand and grabbed Rory's arm. He felt a tingling sensation all across his body. She whispered in his ear.

"You have six months to fall in love. Until the end of February. Actual love. And they have to love you back."

"Or what?" he said belligerently, trying to seem brave and not the tiniest bit frightened by this freak.

"Consequences."

She let go and took off down the hall.

Benny stared after her. "Well, that was weird."

Ethan nodded. "I had a vision. Rory… stay away from her."

Rory's eyes widened. "Why? I'm a vampire. I'm nearly invincible. What's she going to do to me, Ethan?"

Ethan hesitated. "It's not what she's going to do to you. It's what you might do to her."

"You mean…?"

He didn't have to finish the sentence. He didn't need to. All of them already knew where it was leading. And none of them liked it one bit.

Thanks to everyone who read! I hope you enjoyed it. Please review and tell me how to get better.