Now:
I struggled to take a breath. What did I do to deserve this? Everything was perfect maybe that was the problem. Fate thought 'Oh look Wanderer is happy! Now we can't have that!'
"Stay with me," Ian whispered gently. Oh Ian! Ian, no words can describe my feelings for him, my Ian. I wish me could just escape this world and run away from everybody and everything but, most of all, the most inevitable tie that comes with life, death. Death, I could feel that word consuming me whole, gnawing at me and creating a huge black, empty whole in the middle. Abruptly I started coughing. Blood slowly dripped from my dry lips onto the clean white sheets of the bed. The red against the white suddenly opened a wave of flooding memories, each one vivid, each one painful, each one leading to my current state and surely the end.
One week ago:
I let a moan escape my lips. It had been a week now and the pain in my chest was getting worst. I was gardening with the others and Ian by my side I put my hand on his shoulder for help.
"What's wrong?" Ian asked concerned.
Suddenly everything was beginning to seem like a blur. "Nothing, I'm going to my room to get something." I looked at the ground, trying not to make it obvious I was lying.
"Do you want me to come with you?"
"No, I'll be fine." In my heart I knew I wouldn't.
I walked to my room and tried to stumble to my bed but couldn't. My legs gave way leaving me to collapse to the floor. There was a sharp burning in my lungs and I could feel a liquid dripping from my mouth onto the white carpet, blood, red on white.
Now:
"Here drink some water." It was Melanie, the sister destiny forgot to give me. Ian turned his face away but not fast enough to hide tears slowly sliding down his cheek. He swiftly wiped them on his sleeve, trying his best to be strong. I know I looked pretty bad right now and was sad that everyone I loved had to see me like this.
My first fanfic. Could you guys tell me what you think and if I should continue the story. Out of curiosity what do you think is wrong with wanderer?