Hello! This is my edited version of chapter one since it was just awful. Jonny2b gave me permission to write an alternative Lion King story. Chapter one was not put well together because this is my first time writing.. Kovu01 and Kiara 01 gave me permission to use the name Starlight. Without further a due here is the fixed version of chapter 1 enjoy and please review
Disclaimer I own nothing expect for my own characters.
Nala's P.O.V
10 months have gone bye with Simba taking his rightful place as king. An hour ago I gave birth to my two daughters. I was exhausted and I didn't want to go through that pain ever again. Simba and I are about to introduce are twin girls. Kiara and Dynissa. Kiara has Simba's dark golden pelt and red ruby eyes. Dynissa has my tan pelt and my aqua eyes.
Scar is now gone but unfortunately his followers are still here. Zira, Draxin, Zana, Zina, Reena, and Nera. They are complete idiots to be loyal to him after what he did to us.
Why do I need to worry about them right now today is a big.
They were still sleeping in my lap. I couldn't take my eyes off of cubs. They entered this world as a blessing and a blessing that I would die for them just to make sure they are safe. "Are you ready for today?" Simba's voice interrupted my thoughts. "Yes." I said. Simba took Kiara by the scruff of her neck while I carried Dynissa outside. Outside all of the animals were waiting for the presentation of our cubs.
When Rafiki saw us with our daughters he cracked open a fruit to put the juice on each of their foreheads. Sprinkle a little bit of a dust he gathered over Kiara's and Dynissa's head. They both sneezed which was adorable. I couldn't help but smile from cheek to cheek. I nuzzled my mate while his smile was bright.
The sun was a golden color with Mufasa looking down on his granddaughters. Rafiki was already waiting for us at the ledge of Priderock. We slowly walked over to Rafiki. He carried Kiara high up in the sky first since she is the oldest. All of the animals cheered underneath us. The elephants bellowing in the air and the monkeys screeching. Even the smallest ant to the leaping gazelle joined us. Every bird flying high up in the sky and the zebras cheering.
Once Rafiki was done with Kiara he handed her back to Simba and took Dynissa. Once again the animals cheered for the second heir. Rafiki gave Dynissa back to me. Rafiki bowed down to us and we returned the gesture. "I wish de two of you de best of luck." Rafiki said before he walked away.
I nuzzled Simba and he returned the gesture. I walked inside the of the cave to feed my little girls. Simba came in with Kiara and he sat down next to me. I couldn't keep my eyes off of my cubs. "Nala, they both look like you." Simba sweetly said. "Kiara, has your fur." I started to feed them and Simba looked at me. "Simba, don't you want to carry at least one of them?" I asked. "They're so innocent and fragile." Simba said "I could suffocate them with my size." I chuckled "Simba you won't hurt either one of them." My mate might be a big lion but deep down he is so sweet. Once Kiara and Dynissa were fed they fell asleep again. Before I feel asleep I handed both of them to Simba. He took them out of my arms so much care that he flinched every time they moved.
When the next morning came I something woke me up. It was Kiara looking for warmth and comfort. Dynissa on the other hand was in the same position. Now which one is going to be the little trouble maker? "Good morning Nala." Simba whispered to me. "Good morning my king." I whispered back. "How are my girls?" he asked me. "They are great." I said sofly. "I'm sorry I have to leave for some morning rounds but I will be back by lunch." Simba whispered in my ear. He nuzzled me before he left and I returned the nuzzle. I watched him leave the den and most of the lioness were awake by now.
My mom walked over to my side and sat down next to me. "Good morning Nala." she said as she nuzzled me. "Good morning Mom." I returned the nuzzle. "Do mind if I hold one?" Mom asked. "Of course Mom and you choose." I replied back. She grabbed Kiara and she said "Kiara and Dynissa are going to have your attitude with a temper." my mother stated. I laughed a little agreeing with her and I do hope they have that part of me. It will be good in self defense.
All I wish is that they have a wonderful life that I didn't during Scar's Reign. I will die for Kiara and Dynissa for them to live. No matter the cost. I fell asleep again to enjoy the moments I will have with my cubs since they are young.
They all grow up fast and soon I would be old.
` 6 months later
Kiara's P.O.V
I had a pleasant dream until something landed on my back. "Oooffff" I choked out. "Come on Sis get up I want to see the sunset." Dynissa whispered.""Fine."I grumbled. So much for my beauty sleep. We slowly walked out avoiding all of the lioness around our den. We walked over the edge of home. The sun rise was beautiful. The small orb of light was slowly rising. Turning the dark sky into a bright yellow with little shades of pink forming.
"Beautiful isn't." a voice called out from behind us. I jumped a little I hate it when people talk behind my back. We turned around to find Dad talking to us. "Good morning Dad." D and I said at the same time. "Come on you two we I'm going to show you the kingdom." Dad said. I was thrilled I could finally see our kingdom. I ran up to the top of Priderock.
The view of our kingdom was beautiful. A new day rising shining on our home. "A rulers time rises and falls like the sun." Dad started "One day my time will fall and rise on your time Kiara." Dad said directed to me. I wanted to tell Dad I don't want to be queen. I rather hand down my title to Dynissa. She would be a better ruler than me.
Dad went on and on about the balance of all living things. It is important we make sure that every animal is satisfied. From the tiny ant to the elephants. Blah blah blah I know we have to do this. "Kiara," Dad asked me "are you paying attention?" "Of course Dad." I said in an annoying tone. The borderlands of our kingdom were huge. I saw the elephant graveyard and I remember Mom and Dad telling us the story of their adventure. No wonder they are protective over us. "Come on we have more to discuss." Dad insisted.
I didn't want to leave but I had to follow my sis and Dad since it is rare if he is not busy. We walked 30 yards away from home. "It is very important that Zazu tells one of you the morning report." Dad continued. I got it the morning report is very important.
Right at the minute Zazu landed on Dad's shoulder giving him the morning report. In his British accent. I have to admit I love his accent it makes him sound sophisticated. "Sire, there is a situation with the leopards." Zazu stated. Dad bent down next to us "I want the two of you to run along now and come home by the lunch call." Dad ordered. Alright now I can hang with our friends. "Bye Dad and I promised we will be home by the time lunch is called." I said quickly. I ran off the to the waterhole with Dynissa trailing behind me. "Wait up for me!" she yelled. "Come on slow poke," I hollered back "you have to keep up with me!"
We made it to the waterhole with Starlight Vitani, Bomani, Asani, and Kovu sitting around. I have a crush on Kovu and Dynissa knows it very well. She does have a crush on Asani and she has good taste for the him. Asani has a dark, chocolate brown pelt and brown eyes that change to a gold color when the sun angles just right. My best friend Starlight golden fur is darker than mine, golden bangs that cover for her right eye, and she has the darkest purple eyes. Bomani has a tan pelt, and dark blue eyes that change to silver when the sun is angled at his eyes.
"What are you guys sitting here doing nothing?" I asked. "We were waiting for the two of you." Starlight said. "Well since we are here do you guys want to play hide and seek." Dynissa asked. Everybody said yes, "I'll be it and I'll count to hundred." I volunteered myself. I started to count to hundred while everybody ran away. I'll go find Dynissa first since she normally hides by the river. It took me forever to count to hundred but I finally finished.
I headed towards the river trying to find Dynissa. I heard some movement and I pounced. "Gotcha!" I yelled. It wasn't my sis it was a strange lioness missing part of her ear and blood red eyes. "Oh no princess I have you now." she hissed. I tried to run away but she caught my tail and she smacked me in the head. I went out like a light.
45 minutes later
When I woke up I realized I was somewhere else. The ground was nothing but dirt. There were hardly any rocks. "I'm glad to see you are awake." a voice called. It was the some lioness that hit me. Wait she looked familiar skinny, missing part of her ear, blood red eyes, and a long muzzle. Then it dawned on me it was Zira.
"Now if you behave very well princess I will guarantee you will survive." she spat out. "What do you want from me?" I growled. "You'll soon see." she laughed at me evilly. I looked around to find a way out of here and the only way I could get out of here is if I run straight under her body.
I waited until she wasn't looking and I ran for it. I was running around her legs to make her dizzy but that planned fail when she smacked my hind legs. I went rolling head first and she put a paw on my body. She sank her claws on my chest and stomach. The blood was slowly dripping out of my body.
I couldn't breathe and I gasped for air. I saw a little pile of dirt with some ants and I grabbed as much dirt with some ants as I could. I threw it at her ugly face and I ran out of the den. The ground burned my paws with the sun beaming over me. Zira caught up to and she grabbed my tail. She yanked my tail and she smacked me across my face. Leaving four bloody claw marks from my right ear to my left ear. My wounds from my chest and stomach kept dripping blood out of me. Zira used a single claw and she slashed on my back side. All the way down to my hip. I didn't want to scream out in pain because she couldn't scare or make me yell for mercy so easily.
I tried to wriggle myself out but she quickly released my tail to smack my entire body. I flew probably 5 feet away from my spot. I tried to catch myself and I put too much pressure on my right foreleg. I twisted my paw and I couldn't move it. I tried to get up I couldn't when Zira put her paw on my upper body. She sank her teeth into my hind leg. I felt every razor sharp tooth ripping through my outside flesh entering my inner my flesh.
My leg became cold and I couldn't feel. The flesh was sticking to Zira's teeth. I gritted my teeth in pain and I couldn't breathe again. I wanted this stop. I saw big black dot surrounding vision getting bigger and bigger until I saw nothing.
Dynissa's P.O.V
I was hiding up in tree when Kiara was taken away by Zira. I jumped out of the tree and I ran towards home. I had to keep my mind clear and I had to keep my emotions under control. I wasn't scared at all because Mom and Dad would kill that lioness. I know it for sure. I ran even harder with the point of Priderock coming into closer view. Come on your almost home. A little closer and I saw Mom running down the steps with all of the lioness in our pride along her side.
"Dynissa," she yelled "get in the den now!" "I know what happened Zazu witnessed it all and he told us." Mom added. Thank you Zazu! I ran inside of the den finding all of my friends sitting in a circle. Zazu was on top of his game by gathering everybody. I hoped that my sis would come home safely.
Nala's P.O.V
From a warm bright morning the clouds were over us. The thunder was roaring and it started to rain very hard. I organized each searching party by 3 members to cover more ground quickly. Kina was with me when I saw Simba running towards us. I couldn't believe Zira was taking out her revenge on my innocent daughter! "Nala, Zazu spotted Zira near the river." Simba panted. "Let's go." I growled out. I started running towards the river with two thoughts on my mind get Kiara and kill Zira.
I ran even harder until I reached the river and I spotted Zira with 4 members following her. "Drop her now!" I yelled and I came to a stop. "Now now, calm down that temper or else Kiara gets to go for a swim." Zira taunted. me. I looked at Kiara trying to get free of her grip Zira has on her. She looked at me with eyes filled with fear. "Zira, let her go and we settle this like adults." my mate growled. "Why should we settle this like adults if you killed Scar!" Zira spat. " A life for a life." she added. "How much is your daughter to your kingdom?" Zira laughed evilly. I looked at Simba and I could tell his mind was racing. "How dare you compare Kiara to the kingdom!" I yelled.
I growled at the bitch even more. "How can you sacrifice a cub's life for a murder's life." I replied in a deadly tone. "Just watch me." Zira laughed. At that moment she dropped Kiara in the river. The river was rising and dropping very quickly that no cub could easily swim in. I heard Kiara yell was she fell in the water trying her best to swim up the surface. We all tried to rescue her but they attacked us. The last thing I saw of my daughter was her paw in the surface. Simba went after Draxin while Kina and I were attacked by the other lioness.
Two of them bit me in the back while the other one tackled me to the ground. Right when the outsider was about to sink her teeth in my neck I tried to slit her throat. She made a choking sound and she fell to the ground with her body twitching. The other lioness sank her teeth in my upper stomach. I growled in frustration and I smacked her in the side of head. I pinned her and I sank my teeth in her neck. She gasped for air and the moment I was about to finish her off when Zira whacked me in the side of my head.
I steadied myself waiting for her to make her first move. She pounced at me and I ducked down making my claws slash at her side. Zira fell to the ground hard and I pinned. I slowly slit my claws across her ugly face. I went under her eye, across her muzzle to the other side of her eye.
I rammed my paw at the side of her face over and over. I managed to hit her in the face 5 times when a follower of hers attacked me from behind. I couldn't use my famous flip trick and she easily pinned me. I struggled trying to get out of under and Zira walked over to us. She bit down on my shoulder with blood falling outside of her teeth. My blood streamed down my shoulder. She slowly removed her teeth out of my shoulder and she positioned her paws.
Zira started to put her body weight on my shoulder. The nice thing about Zira is that she isn't fat at all so I don't see what damage this would bring. Another lioness walked right beside her and she positioned her paws on top of Zira's. Now I started to feel more pressure on shoulder. It started to ache in pain until I finally heard a crack. I roared out in pain, I couldn't move my shoulder.
Zira sank her claws in my flesh ripping out a huge chunk of my skin on my shoulder. I roared out in pain even more and the pain was excruciating. My blood splattered everywhere with more oozing out of me. The outlander queen wanted me to feel more pain when she twisted my hind leg. I heard a loud crack and she put her weight on my injured leg. I was done roaring in pain proving I was weak and put my name in shame. I started to feel a warm, bubbly, metallic, disgusting feeling rise up in my throat and I coughed up blood. The blood stained my teeth and muzzle.
She grabbed my head to have our eyes meet. "Anything else you liked to say?" She laughed. "Yea, I hope you go you to hell and burn in hell along side with your pride." I snarled. I gathered all of the saliva and blood I had in mouth to spit at Zira, Drops of of blood stained her face and she growled in anger. Her paw meet my head to give me a full knock out.
Simba's P.O.V
Everything happened so fast that I couldn't keep up what just happened. I lost Kiara thanks to Zira. The moment she dropped her in the river Nala went after her and I went after Draxin. Draxin was a small lion with an almond fur, gold eyes, cream colored toes, and a dark brown mane. "So Simba how does that feel?" he spat at me. "I'm going to make you wish you were never born when I'm through with you bastard!" I roared. I lounged at him and I successfully pinned him on the ground. I put all of my weight on his shoulder until I heard a loud crack!
I started slashing at his mane aiming for his throat so I could easily kill him. He tried his best to fight back but he couldn't do this alone until a lioness from his pride bit me on my back. I got off of him and I grabbed the lioness by her leg. I threw her off of me for her to crash into Draxin. Both of their bodies collided with each other and I went after Draxin. I smacked him across the face and I sank my teeth into his other shoulder. I started to taste his warm metallic blood in my mouth. "Kill him and I kill your precious mate!" Zira snarled at me. No I couldn't loose Nala too!
I pinned Draxin to ground, "leave her alone and you can have Draxin back." I growled. Zira walked away from Nala and started to walk towards me. Once she was near Draxin I raced over to where Nala was lying. Nala started to have a pool of blood around her body and I checked for her breathing. Thank you Father for keeping her alive!
"Kina take Nala to have Rafiki check on her." I ordered her. She did what she was told and I headed down the river. I had to find Kiara I couldn't lose her. I ran down the raging river and I scanned the area for any sign of her. The rain was clouding my vision and the lighting was raging.
I couldn't find a clue of where Kiara might be and I lost her. Kiara could be lying in front of me and I wouldn't know due to the weather. How am I suppose tell Nala I lost her? I can't imagine her face when I tell her that. The pain and agony I have. Father if you're listening please bring back Kiara alive. Please.
I didn't want to give up but I couldn't find her in this kind of weather. I headed home with my head hung low. It's all my fault, it's all my fault. The only thing I felt was the cold rain running down so deep that even my bones felt cold. My heart felt heavy and all of the happiness I had before was drained away from my life. The rain started to come down even harder but I didn't care. I couldn't feel anything anyway.
I looked up from the ground and I made it to home. My stomach started to twist it self in a night and I felt like I was choking. I wanted to crawl into a small to hide in there and just die. I ran up the stairs to tell Nala the horrible news as soon as possible. I saw Dynissa and her little friends barely outside the entrance.
"Dad Mom is going to be okay right and did you find Kiara?" she asked with fear in her eyes. "Of course kiddo your Mom is strong she will pull throw and I'll tell you about Kiara later." I said, "wait here until we call for you." I walked in the den. I saw my mom and Sarafina next to her with Rafiki attending to her wounds. "Simba, don't worry we will find her don't worry." Sarafina assured me and I prayed that she was right.
My mom nuzzled me but I sat still. Nala started to wake up and my heart dropped. "Simba, Nala can't walk for a de next 4 days with her legs dislocated and here is de medicine for all of her wounds." Rafiki said. "Thank you Rafiki." was the only thing I could. He left the den to head home.
Nala's P.O.V
My vision was blurry when I started to wake up. My legs that Zira damaged were throbbing and I didn't want to get up I wanted to stay were I was. My head was throbbing and I saw Simba stare at me. Most of the time his eyes are filled with love,passion,and happiness. My loving mate didn't have any of those emotions in his eyes. "Simba where is Kiara?" I asked. "Nala" he stuttered "I couldn't save h-er." he avoided my eyes. No please tell me it is a nightmare that I will soon wake up from the horrible nightmare.
Somebody please smack me and make me wake up. I couldn't say anything, and I needed comfort if not then I would breakdown. "Nala please say something." my mate begged me. "I want her dead now." I snapped "I want that psychotic bitch dead!" I felt hot tears dwelling in my eyes.
Kiara I'm sorry I let this happen to you. The tears started to stain my fur and I couldn't control them they fell down like rain drops. "I want her dead." I kept mumbling. "Nala right now is not the time to kill Zira!" My mother answered "Why not?" I cried out "she killed Kiarra so why can I not kill her?" "Answer me damn it!" I yelled. Everybody looked at me as if I was crazy"You will get yourself killed" Simba yelled at me "Dynissa needs the both of us right now!"
"Kiara needed us." I growled. My mother swung her paw at my head and she yelled "enough Nala, you're not certain if Kiara is completely deceased there is an opportunity that she is alive." I started to feel a little bit of pain in my left cheek. She is right Kiara might be alive. Might be alive I just have to think positively and wonderful things will happen, think positively.
Everybody saw how much pain I was in and I hate it when anyone sees me in pain. It made me feel weak when I couldn't hide my emotions. My mother saw how much pain I was in and she sat in front of me. She hugged trying to comfort me, "Nala, don't hold in your tears it's going to be okay we will find Kiara and bring her home." she comforted me and patted my back.
The rain started to calm down and I saw Dynissa staring right at me. Come on Nala you have to be strong for her. "Sweetie come here." I said trying to fight back my tears. She ran to me with small tears escaping her eyes. "Mom we are going to find Kiara right?" she asked. "Of course kiddo we are going to find her and bring her home." I licked her head and I pulled her in tighter. Simba sat down I front of me and he hugged the both of us. If I let go of Dynissa I might lose her as well and I couldn't lose. My heart will never mend properly I will always have a deep hole in my heart. What kind of mother I am?
This is another reason why I didn't update quickly I was fixing chapter 1 and I am going to fix 2 and 3 as well. For now bye everybody and I hoped you liked this chapter better. Tell me your thoughts. XD