Hello Everyone!

This is my very first fan fiction, so please review and tell me any mistakes I might have, and give me advice.

It will be very appreciated. :)

Thanks!

Once there was a brave warrior named Asterix, who was strong, fearless, and indomitable. There was also a druid named Getafix; he brew magic potions like the Super-human-strength potion.

One day, Getafix told Asterix., "I will be going to the forest to get the ingredients for a magic potion, and I'll be back soon."

When Getafix was walking to the forest, the legionaries caught him by putting a trap hole covered with leaves. When they arrived at the Roman camp, the leader-Crimus Bonus commanded Getafix "Tell me the recipe of the super-human-strength potion!"

"No!" Getafix replied, "I will never tell you the recipe of that magic potion!"

So the roman soldiers tortured Getafix by tickling him with a feather; meanwhile Asterix wondered, "Where is he? I'd better search for him."

Asterix searched everywhere in the forest until he saw a roman citizen, so he ran to the man and asked, "Did you see a druid come by?"

"Oh yes, I saw legionaries take him away in a string bag." replied the Roman.

Asterix was surprised so he ran all the way to the Roman camp. After he searched which tent Getafix was in, he whispered to himself, "It's got to be that tent! It's the only one that's guarded!"

He sneaked into the tent through the back, and when Getafix saw Asterix, he excitedly called his name.

"ASTERIX!"

"Shhh!" Asterix whispered back. He untied Getafix, but the guards had already heard Getafix yelling, so they came inside to invest when they saw Asterix, the indomitable Gaul. The guards quickly called Crimus Bonus to get all of the legionaries around the tent.

Meanwhile, Asterix whispered a plan to Getafix. Getafix came out of the tent and yelled, "I will make you the super-human-strength potion, but you have to free us afterwards!"

Crimus Bonus agreed, and so made the deal. The plan was working! Instead of making the super-human-strength potion, Getafix made the ancient magic potion which made the hair and beard grow very fast like lightning.

So when Crimus Bonus drank all of the magic potion, and he tested out his new strength. He couldn't carry a heavy log, nor a big boulder, or even a medium sized rock. When he got really tired, he picked up a pebble and excitedly said, "I have done it, I am a superman!"

"Amazing!" Asterix lied.

Asterix and Getafix started to walk away when Octopus Tullius said, "Er… Crimus Bonus, there's nothing amazing about lifting that pebble."As they noticed their hair growing faster

"True." Said Crimus Bonus as he scratched his head.

"You've folled me you beasts! There's no magic in that potion!" yelled Crimus Bonus.

Asterix smiled."Oh Yes, there is."

Suddenly Crimus Bonus and his army's hair and beard started to grow as fast as a viper. Asterix and Getafix giggled. The hair that grew from them was the magic. As they noticed their hair growing faster, each legionary complainted to eachother, "Stop stepping on my hair!" And others replied, "Well, pick it up then!".

So Crimus Bonus gets very angry and yells at them, "I will kill you! Give me the antidote!"

"Tut, tut tut, if you kill us, we cannot make the antidote." replied Asterix with a grin.

So Getafix lies again, "I will make the antidote for you." Once again, he makes an ancient magic potion that will make someone sleep for a day. After Getafix made the potion, the legionaries and Crimus Bonus drinks it all up, and falls down asleep.

Happy with their work, Asterix and Getafix walks back home, and has a huge feast.

I'm really new at this, so please give some comments.

please don't be mean!

thanks. :)