Hey guys! I wrote this song and it sounded just like Bella and Jacob in New Moon. I just wanna know what people think of it. I need feedback!
Magical Brown Eyes
[Verse 1]
Oh, when I close my eyes, I see your face,
My heart starts beating fast.
When you talk to me with soothing words,
It makes me forget my past.
[Bridge]
Before I knew you,
My heart was aching,
Trying to make my life right.
And then you came,
Into my life,
You helped me win the fight.
[Chorus]
Oh, I was running from my past life,
From the hurtful memories.
Then you came along,
And made me strong enough.
Yeah, you cleared my cloudy mind,
Made the perfect blue skies.
You wonderful and magical brown eyes.
[Verse 2]
Oh, take my hand right now,
For tonight we dance.
Keep your smouldering eyes locked on myne,
They'll never have a chance.
[Bridge]
Before I knew you,
My heart was aching,
Trying to figure you our.
And then you came,
Into my life,
You helped me win the fight.
[Chorus]
Oh, I was running from my past life,
From the hurtful memories.
Then you came along,
And made me strong enough.
Yeah, you cleared my cloudy mind,
Made the perfect blue skies.
Your wonderful and magical brown eyes.
[Verse 3]
In the past, I have liked blue eyes, green eyes, golden eyes,
But now the butterscotch betrayed me, only brown lies,
Trustworthy.
You fixed the hole that was inside my broken heart,
I had never really felt so torn apart,
Do I love you?, I do not know where to start.
[Chorus]
Oh, I was running from my past life,
From the hurtful memories.
Then you came along,
And made me strong enough.
You cleared my cloudy mind,
And made the perfect blue skies.
Your wonderful and magical,
(Wonderful and magical),
Brown eyes.
Can you please review? I haven't had much feedback since i started writing songs and I really wanna know what people think of me as a lyricist.
Oh, and would it be a good idea to write a songfic about it? Please Review..
Thanks!
Love Alice-May xx