OMG HI. im new here soooooo, dis r mi first story... i give u and intro to Tai first. well, shes mi char and so is saber. theyre immortals so they cant die. they cant love anyone cuz, well, theyre immortal, DUH. cuz then theyd live forever and their love will die. they gots interesting powers. tai's true form is a 13-tailed wolf kitsune thing. saber in a nekomata. YEAH.
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Where am I? Am I dead? Why is it so cold? What is that? Such a beautiful face, is it an angel? Her hands are so soft and gentle. I can't seem to keep my eyes open. It's getting darker…
"Zelda!" Link jolted upright. Colored lights filled his vision as pain seared up through his body. He gasped painfully and wrapped an arm around his side. He bent over, waiting for the spasms that shook his body to stop. After a few minutes, the pain ebbed away to a constant throb. Now that he could think clearly, he thought, Who is Zelda? Was she the fair angel in my dream? Why can't I remember anything?
His memory was blank. Sighing in frustration, he looked up. He was in a bed facing the doorway of a house, which seemed a lot like what the inside of a tree should look like. Light filtered in through an open window on the second floor of the house. Various plants, potions, and manuscripts were placed neatly in piles on the countertops that lined each of the walls. Beside the bed on one side, was a desk with some sketches strewn all across its surface, the other side stood a counter. The entire room smelled faintly of vanilla. Feeling slightly nauseous and dizzy, Link laid his face in his hands and massaged his temples slowly. It was then that he noticed he was swathed in bandages.
"You really shouldn't be sitting up yet." Startled by the deep voice, Link looked up. The door was open and standing in the doorway was a large cat of some sort. It had sleek black fur and a muscular frame. Its tail was smooth with a rounded tip. Sharp, ivory-colored claws protruded from its large paws. Most peculiar of all however, was that on its head there was some sort of metallic plate that covered the area where his eyes should have been.
"Lie down, please," it addressed him formally. Not waiting for a response, it gave a magnificent leap and somehow managed to plant its paws on his shoulders and push him down onto the bed. Link groaned agonizingly as the sudden action caused the sharp, piercing pain in his side to reappear.
"Saber, I'd really prefer it if you refrained from damaging my patient more than he already is!" Though it was scolding, the new voice didn't sound truly angry. It was melodic and sweet, and had the tone of a mother chiding a naughty child. Even though he was curious to see who it was, the aching pain prevented him from moving. Link heard a growl of affirmative from Saber as soft footsteps padded towards him.
"Sorry about Saber," said the pleasant voice apologetically, "he can be a bit rough sometimes, but honestly, he has a heart of gold." Saber made a deep purring sound at that last statement. Link blinked slowly, trying to clear his foggy vision. As he slowly regained his sight, the face of a cute, young girl came into view. It was the blond-haired angel from his dream.
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can u find any mistakes i made?