This is just a preview of what I have and is my first attempt at writing and wanted to get some feedback on what i have so far more will be added to this so this isnt the final draft but only part of what i have written. Also everything belongs to Bioware except for my Femshep. you guys now how the rant goes.
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Ch. 1 Foolish pride
Normandy, "ETA time to Sol system four hours and counting."Joker out. "Joker what's the hold up". "Nothing commander just some stupid traffic that is holding us up". Joker thought to himself 'Ha now with the hold up finally some time to watch my beloved porn wonder what Fornax finally released'
Edi could not fathom as to why Joker would find so much solidarity in porn when there is nothing truly great since they were dating. "Joker may I ask as to why your still gawking at the material that your currently so engrossed in". Joker knew Edi was there but to question his actions. "Uhm Edi I was just getting some ideas for us so I can improve my impressive skills" turning his seat towards Edi he put on the most innocent look he could but was met with Edi's stoic face. "Joker yours actions still leave me to process but if that helps you then I will not bother you, please continue." Edi just smirked the whole while she spoke to Joker and he got the creepiest twitch down his spine from that smile.
The whole while this event was taking place Shepard was relaxing on her leather couch trying to take a nap after finally getting a moment of peace. "Edi, please rely to the crew that I'm unavailable for at least two hours." Edi replied "yes, commander". Shepard had the perfect idea what she was going to do. 'get myself caught up on the Blasto campaigns on the extranet, maybe get my profile updated'. However, though down in the cockpit Edi and Joker had finally gotten into their first fight while being in a relationship. Joker was in deep trouble he didn't understand but somehow whatever he did made the unshackle AI who was coming to terms with emotions finally realize what anger was like. "Edi, would you stop shouting everyone is going to hear" "let them because from what I understand you just like to mock women in general and then try to copy the actions seen on me, no and don't get me started even further". Everyone on CIC was confused and afraid of what was going on.
Traynor was worried not only for the Joker but Edi as well because she thought of her as a sister and did not want her actions to affect her personally. 'Uhm Commander I believe you should come down to the CIC quickly' While in the middle of her game Shepard was suddenly very irked because with the events going down this was her time to herself which she never gets and she was pulled for something. 'What's wrong Traynor there better be a good excuse.' Traynor knew she was in trouble not from just bothering Shepard, but because no one was to bother Shepard the poor women was being run ragged as it was and this was finally some time she got to herself. "Uhm well apparently Edi and Joker are fighting and people in the CIC are being to worry and no one can get them to calm down" Shepard was really pissed now, whatever happened they were going to be in some deep shit.