AN/ This is my first time writing on FF so go nice on me but I was thinking of using this as part of my description coursework for English. It was only a page on Word so obv I'd make it longer but this will do for now :) If this gets at least 7 reviews I might write descriptions of other characters.
Damon Salvatore
Dark curly hair frames features so fine they could have been taken from an old roman coin or painted as an angel by his master. His eyes are fathomless and piercing blue with an evil glint and are framed by long, thick, black eyelashes. They have a strange sparkle in them that make you wonder what he's thinking. His nose is perfect and straight and he has a beautifully sculpted mouth that can only be seen on the airbrushed pages of magazines. When he smiles it is breath-taking but also cruel and sadistic. His perfectly straight teeth are white and sparkle in the dark room.
His long pale fingers are curled around a small, crystal glass filled with the finest scotch. A light shines through the window and catches the large, silver ring that dominates his middle finger and the blue and gold Lapis Lazuli stone glitters mysteriously in the brightness.
He starts towards you almost painfully slowly, taking small, lethal steps. As his smirk becomes more pronounced you see his canines peek out from under his lips, growing slowly into deadly sharp fangs that could tear flesh as easily as hands tear paper. Dark red veins slowly appear underneath his eyes as his pupils start to dilate and the whites of eyes go a sickening shade of red. His iris', once startling blue, become black and unforgiving. As he moves you notice his all black attire. His Black shirt, black Armani jeans and black leather jacket cling to him to show the thin, wiry muscles that he has gained from over century of chasing prey and drinking human blood.
His voice is sarcastic and harsh as he whispers threatening words in your ear causing frightened shivers to descend down your spine. He steps back slowly to take one last look at his ill-fated prey before devouring you. You know he will do it – you can see it in those strange eyes. An ear-splitting crack from behind him causes the hunter to whip his head round frantically. He must know what it is though, because suddenly he looks quite bored. He flashes you a quick smirk but in a blink of an eye, he disappears, leaving you wondering if that beautiful creature was just a figment of your imagination.
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