Heya! I thought hell – lets look back at this first ever chapter and so I have now decided that I shall rewrite it – I'll keep most things the same, I just wanted to improve. Hope you like! Please review! (If you've already reviewed then leave me one under 'anonymous' with your usual penname, ta!)
Summary; can a single person change the minds and lives of four of the most stubborn girls known to mutant kind? Rogue, Kitty, Lexa and Wanda have been captured and are being trained to be weapons of evil. But when a chance arises for them to escape and return to the lives they previously had will they accept? Or is the offer of evil too tempting to resist? ROMY, LANCITTY, X-IETRO and JONDA!
Key:
"…" Speech
'…' Thoughts
(…) Extra information
Songs are in bold
Written letters or notes are underlined
"Telepathic thoughts and the other line of the phone is in Italics and speech marks "
The Temptations of Evil
Chapter 1
VvV the Untouchable; Rogue VvV
Darkness. Enshrouding the girl in it's complete emptiness, she found herself alone…helpless…defenceless even. Everything was not as it seemed though – even though Rogue heard nothing, saw nothing, felt nothing even, deep down she knew that – in a way – she wasn't alone. Cameras were situated in every corner of this…place? Was that what you could call a cell?
Jail? Was that where she was? The questions poured through Rogue's mind like unsolved mysterious are filed in police headquarters…would her strange disappearance become one of them?
Surely by now the Xmen would notice the fact that they were missing one of their own…although there were so many at the Mansion now that Rogue doubted anybody would notice her disappearance for a while. Yet it was difficult to miss two Xmen.
Because Rogue knew she was not the only one to have been taken.
The proof was in the painting as a pair of doors swung open, held so by two guards that soon accompanied a third down the dark and dismal hallway: lit only by the light spilling in. From this abysmal amount of light though, Rogue could make out the girl that one man was carrying – lifted over a single shoulder, lifeless, limp; her eyes shut. Frail and delicate, Kitty swung slightly as she was marched down the corridor, unconscious. Using flashlights when the doors snapped shut behind the men was so they could find their way to a cell not far down from Rogue's. Lightly dropping their cargo onto a bed, ignoring the thud, the men then turned around and backed out of the barred cage.
Yet before the guards could pass Rogue's own 'room' she composed herself, pulling a blank face, emotionless, one that had been practised many a time. And as a flashlight was swung at the girl the guards saw only a dull, lifeless look in Rogue's eyes that they frowned at.
Looking down at the girl, one leant over to the other whilst Rogue watched them, giving both an unnerving, bland stare that neither could return. One of the guard's whispered quietly, yet it was easy to overhear her; "that's the untouchable, you know…" and obviously by the guard's nod, he did know of her. "We had difficulty with her…you should have heard Mike; he can't stop going on about it…the devil in disguise she is…"
Rogue lay back onto her solid bed, shaking her platinum locks out of her eyes that began slowly to drift shut, whilst sleep claimed her tired body into dreams of the prison cell and the memories surrounding it.
VvV Flashback VvV
Owls hooted. The wind whispered sweet nothings into the still night air, quiet and sublime in the peaceful nature of the area…the peaceful presence.
All too soon it changed.
Joyfully chatting away, a girl rounded the corner, pausing to turn back on the spot as her eyes found her companion again, waiting for the older girl to catch up – quiet and resolute in her dissimilar calmness. Rogue's silence was contrasted by the non-stop babble seeming to spill endlessly from Kitty's mouth as the young girl chatted away, entertaining her bored friend with talk of nothingness and her endless information of the unimportant things in life.
Upon rounding the corner however, Rogue halted in her tracks and froze; head poised in a direction she could not make out: north? South? East? West? What did it matter…something was wrong and Rogue could tell that from every direction she looked – from behind herself she felt chills creeping up on her as the paranoia of a stalker entranced her mind. Whilst in front…in front she felt the fear of walking on.
Unnerving silence. It spread over the once noisy, flooded spot – flooded by lights, street lamps…that mysteriously, suddenly switched off. Something was wrong.
It wasn't hard to tell – even Kitty noticed and in her absence of chatter Rogue heard the sound of almost silent footsteps drawing closer. "Stay where you are Kitty…it's alright…" comforted the normally fear-free girl in a whisper, whilst feeling fright pricking her as Goosebumps erupted everywhere. The one thought comforting Rogue's mind; if she stayed where she was they wouldn't be able to find her…in her silence whom ever 'they' were could not sense her out. But Kitty…it was only so long that she could stay silenced in a panicked situation and already the young girl's breathing was becoming deafening, her heartbeat racing like runners' in the finale of a race.
Because whatever this was…it would soon be over. And not in a good way, Rogue predicted.
Kicking in, in Rogue's alertness, Logan's enhanced senses picked up footsteps and the clink of metal, the switch of the weight of a gun from one arm to the other. Superb smelling taught Rogue that there were numerous of the men…for she could smell man…almost hear concentration…taste fear.
Or was that her own fear? Fright was inescapable as Katherine Pryde made the worst mistake of her life; she backed straight into Rogue. In a blinding fight the two girls fell to the ground in a heap, Kitty's squealing deafening the sound of her scrabbling to gain control of the situation. Whilst all Rogue could care about was what she was wearing.
Was the outfit enough…was there protection enough?
Kitty's gasp signalled the answer when Rogue felt skin brush against her own as the smaller girl collapsed, Kitty's eyes closing to the light that blinded Rogue as a torchlight shone in their direction.
Driving her to unknowingly activate her new power, the terror filling Rogue caused the girl to stand, allowing her fellow mutant, Kitty, to slip through her body as numerous strange bullets slipped straight through Rogue.
"Hold your fire!" Yelled a voice nearby, and it caused Rogue to halt too, freezing the girl in place as her eyes sought out the people surrounding her. If she were clever, Rogue would have ran – nobody could stop the corporally intangible apart from herself – but nerves shut down all reasoning within the girl and she could only stand there.
Taking what seemed hours, Rogue's courage suddenly surfaced and she took a step backwards, meaning to run, to leave, but tripped slightly on Kitty who simply turned unwillingly, unconsciously over onto her face, unaware of the current danger. And now Rogue knew she couldn't leave: a coward would leave her friend, per contra Rogue was no coward; she would fight till the death.
Meaning to do just that…the girl jumped, foot swung out in an attempt to hit the first thing it came into contact with…but a dart-like bullet hit her now tangible leg first. Collapsing in a less than ladylike manner on the ground, Rogue's faced twisted in a vicious snarl and she raised herself again, swaying drowsily as another dart hit the girl in the arm. Yet the Goth wrenched it out, uncaring for this equipment…healing would kick in soon…soon…she hoped.
But Rogue was too tired…her abilities were failing her. Giving in though; that was not an option and Rogue proved she meant business as her foot landed squarely in the chest of a different man…at the exact time a dart hit the girl in the neck.
Overpowering her, the sleeping draft intoxicated Rogue like a venom and she succumbed to unnatural sleep…
VvV End of Flashback VvV
The thought of this end; a weak and suffering Rogue pulled the present Rogue from her dream, panting, delirious and unsure as to her surroundings. Only the lack of light held any recognition and Rogue took it in, feeling as lonely…helpless…and defenceless as before…
End of ChapterWell, I so hope that you liked the new chapter 1 – new and improved (I think, lol!) What do you think? Like? No/Yes? Why? Tell me, i.e. REVIEW! .x.thriller.x.