Author's note
Once again thank you all for your advice. I would like to start over with this story so i am going to rewrite the first chapter. And if anyone who would like to beta read my fiction please let me know. I am also taking soras thought out and changing to structure of this chapter.
Thanks
Hidden Grave
Prologue
Sora wanders slowly through the cemetery searching for a paticular grave site. As he rounds the corner a red headed girl in a dark hoodie strides past with tears running down her face. Sora notices there are some yellow roses on the tomb stone beside the one he had been seaching for. As he aproaches the stones he reads the inscription.
Takuki Swanda
Loving Father and Husband
1979 2004
"This was probably her father" Sora mutters confidently as he continues onward to his real reason for coming to the cemetary. The next grave was fairly new but already had vines growing up the face of it. The vines covered some of the writing but Sora could recite what is said from memory.
Haruko Hurahara
Loving Mother
19762000
"Hi mom, I think I will call you that, even if i am just adopted. Father is cruel to me and I don't know what I should to do anymore. I started cutting a couple of months ago to help ease the pain. Today in gym my sweat bands got ripped of while fighting with my sparring partner and now the whole school knows. The Sakura-sensai and Syaoran-sensai siad they were going to inform father about it. The group is also worried about me allot. I know this is not what i should be doing but i feel the need to repent and pay for my sins. In order to do so, I have become a sweeper. (A bounty hunter that is registered with the police) My main purpose is to pervent suffering. The group supports me and signed up aswell. We are called organization 13 by the news and the townspeople. We are the elite sweepers, that is what Saki calles us at least. Well i better get home before dad gets angry. Here are the roses i picked out for you. Sora sets a small vase filled with black and red roses beside the Grave and tur4ns and strides home.
ok, i am hoping that is a lot better and if not please tell me and I will Work even harder then i did on this chapter in the future.
Note i am still in japan so i do not know when the next update will be but it will be way better than this one.
Thank you all
The hidden grave