Starkit's Prophecy Review

by sumwantin777

Starkit's Prophecy, a fan fiction of Warriors, is famous. Today, I would like to review this with you. Note: Credit xdarkrosesx, the author. I will never write this, if she didn't write Starkit's Prophecy.

1. Part 1

Disclaimer: I don't own Warriors and Starkit's Prophecy. I only want to review it. The bold words are my review. Let's start.

ALLIANCES
ok so like i said this iks my first story be nice plz (Well what is iks?)

btw its set afte rsunset so (Never heard of Rsunset)

ThunderClan

Leader: Firestar - ginger tom with a flame-colored pelt

Deputy: Brambleclaw - dark brown tabby tom with amber eyes

Medicine Cat: JayFeather-gray tom (What about tabby and the blind, blue eyes?)

Warriors:

Squirrelflight - dark ginger she-cat with green eyes

Apprentice, Foxpaw

Dustpelt - dark brown tabby tom

Sandstorm - pale ginger she-ca (You forget the t.)

Cloudtail - long-haired white tom

Apprentice DaisyPaw - cream long-furred cat from the horseplace (Daisy never be a warrior. She is an all-day queen.)

Brackenfur - golden brown tabby tom

Sorreltail - tortoiseshell-and-white she-cat with amber eyes

Thornclaw - golden brown tabby tom

Brightheart - white she-cat with ginger patches

Spiderleg - long-limbed black tom with brown underbelly and amber eyes

Whitewing - white she-cat with green eyes

Apprentice, Icepaw

Birchfall - light brown tabby tom

Graystripe - long-haired gray tom

Berrynose - cream-colored tom

Hazeltail - small gray-and-white she-cat

Mousewhisker - gray-and-white tom

Cinderheart - gray tabby she-cat

Poppyfrost - tortoiseshell she-cat

Honeyfern- light brown tabby she-cat

Lionblaze - golden tabby tom

Hollyleaf - black she-cat

FoxHeart-reddish tabby tom (Are they apprentices, or warriors? Also, you meanFoxheart of ShadowClan reincartated into this cat? Is he evil?)

IceFire-white she cat (Cool name.)

ToadRibbit-black—and-white tom (Never heard of a cat that have RIBBIT suffix.)

RoseFlame-dark cream she cat (Cool name.)

BriarStorm-dark brown she cat (Cool name.)

BumbleFlower-very pale gray tom with black stipes (Funny.)

BlossomWind-pale brown she cat iwth a dark stripe along her spine (Cool name.)

Apprentices:

Fox DaisyPaw - cream long-furred cat from the horseplace (Only heard DAISYPAW, not FOX DAISYPAW.)

FlamePaw-firecolored she cat with one grnee eye one blue eye (Grnee?)

LakePaw-bright blue gray she cat with blue eyes

The last 2 r starKits siters

JazzPaw-red she cat with blue eyes and a black tail (You mean feddish brown, not bright red? If it's red, how scary it is!)

Queens:

Ferncloud - pale gray (with darker flecks) she-cat with green eyes mother of Dustpelts kits

Dawnsparkle-bright tortishell she cat with garguntan blue eye's mother of Jayfeathers' ktis, formaly of Shadowclan

Kits:

StarKit-graysh-blue-and purple she cat with molting orange eyes and a white star on her forhaed (Purple cat, molting and forhaed found.)

Elders:

Longtail - pale tabby tom with dark black stripes, retired early due to failing sight

Mousefur - small dusky brown she-cat

Weaslepelt-big red tabby he cat with bight yellow eyes (hes Rowanclaw's dad, he came to Thunderclan when Dawn- did0 (How he come here?)

LeafPool-brown tabby she cat (Isn't she become a warrior?)

ShadowClan

Leader: Blackstar - large white tom with huge jet-black paws

Deputy: Russetfur - dark ginger she-cat

Medicine Cat: Littlecloud - very small tabby tom

Apprentice, Flamepaw (ginger tom)

Warriors:

Oakfur - small brown tom

Apprentice, Tigerpaw (dark brown tabby tom)

Rowanclaw - ginger tom

Smokefoot - black tom

Apprentice, Owlpaw (light brown tabby tom)

Ivytail - black, white and tortoiseshell she-cat

Apprentice, Dawnpaw (cream-furred she-cat)

Toadfoot - dark brown tom

Crowfrost - black-and-white tom

Apprentice, Olivepaw (tortoiseshell she-cat)

Kinkfur - tabby she-cat, with long fur that sticks out at all angles

Ratscar - brown tom with long scar across his back

Apprentice, Shrewpaw (gray she-cat with black feet)

Snaketail - dark brown tabby tom with striped tail

Apprentice, Scorchpaw (dark gray tom)

Whitewater - white she-cat with long fur, blind in one eye

Apprentice, Redpaw (mottled brown and ginger tom)

Tawnypelt - tortoiseshell she-cat with green eyes

Flamewind- flame color tabby tom with green eye's (Same as Foxleap and Icecloud's case.)

Tigerclaw-huge dark brown tabby tom with long claw's and amber eys (Tigerclaw's return?!)

DawnFeather-cream tabby she cat (shes a different cant then the one in tC ok?) (tC?)

OlivePaw-bright brown she cat

Queens:

Snowbird - pure white she-cat

Elders:

Cedarheart - dark gray tom

Tallpoppy - long-legged light brown she-cat

WindClan

Leader: Onestar - brown tabby tom

Deputy: Ashfoot - gray she-cat

Medicine Cat: Barkface - short-tailed brown tom

Apprentice, Kestrelpaw (mottled gray tom)

Warriors:

Tornear - tabby tom

Crowfeather - dark gray tom

Owlwhisker - light brown tabby tom

Whitetail - small white she-cat

Nightcloud - black she-cat

Gorsetail - very pale gray-and-white cat with blue eyes

Weaselfur - ginger tom with white paws

Harespring - brown-and-white tom

Leaftail - dark tabby tom, amber eyes

Apprentice, Thistlepaw (long-haired white tom)

Dewspots - spotted gray she-cat

Apprentice, Sedgepaw (light brown tabby she-cat)

Willowclaw - gray she-cat

Apprentice, Swallowpaw (dark gray she-cat)

Antpelt - brown tom with one black ear

Emberfoot - gray tom with two dark paws

Apprentice, Sunpaw (tortoiseshell she-cat with large white mark on her forehead)

Heathertail - light brown tabby she-cat with blue eyes

Breezepelt - black tom with amber eyes

Elders:

Morningflower - very old tortoiseshell queen

Webfoot - dark gray tabby tom

RiverClan

Leader: Leopardstar - unusually spotted golden tabby she-cat

Deputy: Mistyfoot - gray she-cat with blue eyes

Medicine Cat: Mothwing - dappled golden she-cat

Apprentice, Willowshine (gray tabby she-cat)

Warriors:

Blackclaw - smoky-black tom

Voletooth - small brown tabby tom

Apprentice, Minnowpaw (dark gray she-cat)

Reedwhisker - black tom

Mosspelt - tortoiseshell she-cat with blue eyes

Apprentice, Pebblepaw (mottled gray tom)

Beechfur - light brown tom

Rippletail - dark gray tabby tom

Apprentice, Mallowpaw (light brown tabby tom)

Graymist - pale gray tabby

Dawnflower - pale gray she-cat

Dapplenose - mottled gray she-cat

Pouncetail - ginger-and-white tom

Mintfur - light gray tabby tom

Apprentice, Nettlepaw (dark brown tabby tom)

Otterheart - dark brown she-cat

Apprentice, Sneezepaw (gray-and-white tom)

Pinefur - very short-haired tabby she-cat

Apprentice, Robinpaw (tortoiseshell-and-white tom)

Rainstorm - mottled gray-blue tom

Duskfur - brown tabby she-cat

Apprentice, Copperpaw (dark ginger she-cat)

Queens:

Icewing - white cat with green eyes, mother of Beetlekit, Pricklekit, Petalkit, and Grasskit

Elders:

Heavystep - thickset tabby tom

Swallowtail - dark tabby she-cat

Stonestream - gray tom

Chpater oen prouloge (Chapter one or Prologue? Also, spell check please.)
The cats gathered around a pool.(Moonpool? Or random pool?) They all looked into it eagerly. A dark shape appeared on the surface. A blue she cat looked up. Her eyes were bright. (That mean StarClan is dark?)

"There is a prophecy!" She said. "out of the darkness, stars will come and get rid of the evil tiger and holly." (Tigerheart and Hollyleaf are going to be killed? Tigerheart only loves Dovewing and Hollyleaf died saving Ivypool! No reason to be killed!)

"Its about StarKit!"(Can't be a random leader, Whitestorm?)A white tom said. "Shes going to save the forest," He looked at a gold tom by BlueStar. "she has powers nobody dreamed of."(Really scary powers, yeah? Let everybody blind?) Said the gold tom. "Should we tell JayFeather?" He asked. (What's the point of telling him?) "Yes." Said BlueStar. "he needs to know." (I said, WHAT'S THE POINT?)

She walked away from the pool to tell JayFeather about the prophcy.

Chapter to the rose of a Heroin (Did cats know what's a heroin?)
ok jazzie-kun pleas dont get mad at me cause your not in it yet. You'l apear soon dont worry. (Spell check.)

StarKit wock up (Wock up? Did it knows from the jabblewocky of Alice in Wonderland?) and sunlit was in the branches. (Branches shine?) She closed her eyes againstill tired. Butter mom wouldn't let her sleep not today. (Butter mom? Cat with full of butter? Did cats know what is butter?)

"Sweety its time to get up" said Dawnsparkle; her eys shinning. "Today is important today." (Double todays.)

"What is it Mom" said StarKit awake right away. Then the she cat rememembered what today was. Rememembered? Is it an evolution of remembered?)

"Ohmigosh its my serimony today!' she squelled excercisedly. Today was the day she was an apprentice! (Excercisedly? Did she think apprentices must do a bunch of homework?)

She flicked outside not even waiting for her Mom. But her Mom cot up to her quick.

"Sweety you know the clans don't except cat slike use sometimes." She said.

StarKit glared. She didn't lake beig told that. (Lake beig.) Just because her Mom was a usedto be Shadowclan cat and her dad was jayFeather the medicine Cat didn"t mean she ws different!

"StarPaw come here." Said FireStar from the leg. He jumped down. (Firestar became a cat sticks into a random cat's leg?)

"StarKit it s tome for you to become an apentice: he said. "Your a strong brave cat and because of that I will mentor with you." (Lionblaze is talented too. Why Firestar didn't be his mentor? And why Starpaw? Because she is the main character? Whoa.)

Ever body gasped. StarKit did too. Se herd hear mother say "Wow!".

Firehert (Hail Bramblestar!) liked her shoulder. He whispered in her ear "youll be the best their ever was StarPaw I know ti."

Surpised she walked away when they were done howling for her. (Wind wolves?)/ Then she went ofer to JayFeathern (Feathern?) and DawnSparkle who were very prod. (Prod? You mean Pod?)

"Daughetr where very happy but he have to say something said Jayfeather his chest puffed ouit. "You see there is this prophcy Starcaln gave me it said that out of the darkness, stars will come and get rid of the evil tiger and holly."

StarPaw gasped. What does it mean?

lol I update fast dont i. REVEIW or ill hit over the head with a frying pan! XDD jk (Check your spelling first, please.)

Chapter three the Battle 4 the caln

Here we go, continue!

thx jazzie-kun 4 th good review! and stop flmaing the stroy!1 i bet u cant right such a good story!1!1 (Not flmaing. Besides, I'm going to make a better one.)

StarPaw walkd over too the appentice's den. Insid she saw her sister's FlamePaw and lakePaw and hr frend JazzPaw (a.n: jazzie-kin ur my bff!) waz slepping on the mos. (Her sister's Flamepaw? Flamepaw is whose?)

"JazzPaw get up." She cried. JazzPaw opend her brlliaint blu eyes and looked at hr. (Brlliaint and blu found.)

"Do yo want 2 go on pattrol wit me?" she asked. (Starpaw the deputy!)

"Sure!" Said JazzPaw getten up from the moss. They leavt and went two the entrnse too camp. (Gotten, not getten.)

But then, a cat came in thru the entrnce! It was BlackStar!1!11

"Shadowclan are attaking!" She yelled. All the cats came out from there dens. She jumped on a cat and clawd him and he ran of. (You better ask him what's the matter, and take him to Firestar. He maybe asking for something. See through please.)

"Good job StarPaw!" FireStar called, (Firestar appeared from random place.) "The last cat i new that culd fiht lik that was SandStrom. Your a good fihter!" (Sandstrom is an experienced warrior, but Starpaw is only an apprentice. Also, fihter?)

StarPaw was happy. She wus a good fihgter! Maybey this was wat the prophcy meant.

thnkx and ples no more flams (No more flams?)

Chapter Three The Traning Under The Star
OMGOSH GUkys im so sorry but SOMEONE glares at rainy days FLAMED ME AND I GOT REALLY HURT. OKKAY IF you dont LIKE thestor y you dont have to readit u know.