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The last thing she remembered was Ursula aiming the triton at her. She was stuck in a whirlpool and she thought she was going to die. She wondered was it all worth it? She abanded her kingdom and broke several of her kingdom's laws and now a crazy sea witch was ruling her father's kingdom. Then she thought of Eric and how he jumped into the ocean to save her not knowing what was going happen and that she was a mermaid. It was all worth it, he was her one true love and he loved her equally back even though she is not human. Suddenly she heard a loud chilling scream, the whirlpool started to collapse onto itself and her world went black.
She woke up in her room, tucked in her soft seashell bed. She tried to sit up but she suddenly felt light-headed. She then remembered what happened last night. "Eric! Is he safe?" she quickly thought. She immediately sprang out of her bed and quickly swam through the hallway outside her room. She suddenly bumped into something, it was her eldest sister Aquata. Her usually neat high ponytail was low and messy. She looked tired as if she hadn't sleep in days and she also looked shocked. Ariel wondered why she looked that way but, Ariel remembered her father looked the same way last night. She suddenly felt guilty, they must have been so worried for her while she was on land.
"Ariel! Your home! Where were you? Wait come with me." she exclaimed. She grabbed Ariel's wrist and dragged her to the dressing room that her sisters and she shared. They all had the same shocked look on their face that Aquata had. Andrina was the first to swim up to Ariel.
"Ariel? Is that really you?" she asked. Ariel nodded my head.
"Where in the Seven Seas were you?" Attina shouted.
Alana shot her a nasty look then again asked 'Where were you? We've been worried about you for three days."
"Do you know what happened last night? The ocean was upset." Arista asked.
"Well..." Ariel started. "I ran away from home and made a deal with our aunt, Ursula."
"What?" Andrina asked in disbelief.
"Was it a boy?" Adella asked with a slight smirk on her face.
"Adella! Where were you Ariel for the past three days?" Aquata shouted sternly
"I was... I was... It was a boy." Ariel finally said. How could she tell them her wish, that she wanted to be one of the creatures that killed their mother and that she broke the law which forbids them to go to the surface?
"Ohh! So it was a boy, Alana you owe me five coins. Ariel, is he handsome? What is he like? What is his name?" Adella questioned with a hint of excitement in her voice.
"He is very handsome. He also very kind and sweet. His name is Eric." Ariel answered.
"Enough of this! Ariel where were you?" Aquata finally shouted.
"I was..." Ariel whispered.
"You were where?" She yelled.
"At a castle... A castle on land with other humans." Ariel finally answered.
"With other humans? Were you a human? No, you couldn't possibly..." She questioned with disbelief.
"Yes. I was human." Ariel replied.
"Ariel, are you in love with a human?" Adella asked.
"Yes! Okay, I saved a human from drowning and I fell in love with him. I just had to see him again but daddy would not allow it so I traded my voice for a pair of legs. I know I was stupid for believing the sea witch but this human is not evil. He is sweet and caring and he will do anything for me. I love him and I have to see him again." Ariel exclaimed.
They all looked at her with their mouths wide open. In the corner of her eye, she saw Sebastian swim into the room.
"If you do not believe me just ask Sebastian." she pointed out.
"Sebastian?" Andrina asked and all of them swam over to Sebastian. Ariel quickly swam out of the room and down the hallway. She had to see if Eric was alright. She had to if he did not... No, he could not be. She swam as fast as she could but something grabbed her wrist and pulled her back. It was Aquata with a stern look.
"Where do you think you're going?" she questioned.
"I'm going to see Eric. I have to see if he is alright." Ariel answered.
"No, you are not. I forbid you to."
"What?"
"You just broke so many laws and almost risked the entire existence of the kingdom. And worst of all you fell in love with a human."
"I do not care what you think. I'm going to see Eric" Ariel shouted and pulled her arm away from Aquata's grasp. Ariel started to swim away and she saw Aquata swimming towards the throne room but Ariel did not care, she had to see if Eric was okay.