Hello!
I'm 96Neko69, a new author on this website. This is my first fanfiction "Masked", I hope this story is any good.
Since I'm new in writing, I would really appreciate it if someone could criticize me in my writing skills (since this story in my opinion seems crappy.)
Thank you for your time in reading this crap! ^-^
"What!"
The short blonde held up the letter in her shaking fist, golden eyes re-reading the words You have been enrolled to Viridian Academy printed in bold.
"Blue! The blonde yelled again, "what the hell is this? I don't remember enrolling into Viridian Academy, much less as another person!" She pointed to the name Yuki Satou on the letter to the older brunette, who was sitting uncomfortably on the sofa.
The said woman tried to look anywhere else besides the fuming girl's face, "I don't need to tell you the reason Yellow, you should already know.." Yellow noticed the way the brunette's hands were slightly shaking when she said her response.
"Blue, that was a whole year ago, I can protect myself you kno-"
Blue raised her head up violently to look up up at the blonde, causing Yellow to flinch. "Protect yourself? PROTECT YOURSELF? How the fucking hell can you say that when you-" Yellow's eyes widened when she heard the woman swear. Blue never swore, and if she did, it was never to the blonde. "You...You were in so much pain.." The taller woman started to sob quietly.
Blue's quiet sobbing gradually turned into full on crying, and the shorter girl tried to comfort the older woman by wrapping her arms around her shoulders, bringing Blue into a tight embrace. "Don't cry Blue, d-don't cry.." Yellow could feel her own tears now, she hated it when one of her guardians were in pain. "You're the one who's supposed to be comforting me... Right?"
"Yes.. I'm a terrible guardian." Blue wiped the tears from the younger girl's and her own face. "First you get hurt, now I'm the one who's being comforted by the victim."
Yellow shook her head, smiling. "No Blue, you and Crystal are the best guardians a child could ask for." Her smiling face soon turned into a frown, "but.. Why didn't you tell me about this?"
"Crystal and I were going to tell you, but we didn't think you were ready." Blue gave a sad smile to the blonde. "I guess we were beaten by the mail."
This still didn't answer everything the blonde was thinking of, "why should I be disguised as someone else then?" She gazed up at the brunette, "you still don't trust me.."
Blue gave a quiet sigh, "no Yellow, I do trust you." She looked down angrily at the floor, "we just believe that... If someone from the academy is one of your ex-boyfriend's acquaintances." The older woman saw Yellow give a small shiver, "if they recognize you..." Blue hesitated for a moment, closed her eyes and shook her head slightly. "No, let's not think about that."
The blonde gave a shaky sigh of relief, "All right."
"Now go to bed, you're going to have a long day tomorrow."
Yellow hesitated for a moment, she wanted to ask Blue a few more questions until she saw the older woman's face. Her eyes had dark circles surrounding them and were swollen from crying so much. The brunette's irises showed a mix of pain and worry. How long has she been up for? Yellow thought, it looks like she hasn't been sleeping at all.
"Yes ma'am," Yellow gave a soft kiss on the forehead of her guardian, "you should go to sleep too, you look like death."
Blue gave a giggle at the blonde's concern, "I will after you go to sleep." She gave a quiet yawn of her own, "I need a long rest.."
The younger girl gave a soft smile before walking slowly upstairs to her bedroom. When she was out of sight, Blue gave a tired sigh and turned to the door on her left. "Alright Crystal, she's gone."
The said woman opened the door quietly, "was I really that loud?" She asked softly.
"No you weren't," Blue rested her head on the sofa cushion, "I just have good hearing, it comes with age.."
Crystal stuck out her tongue childishly, "Blue! Twenty-six is not old."
Blue rubbed her temple, "I feel like I'm forty."
Crystal gave a teasing smile, "is that so?"
"Teasing me wasn't the reason you were eavesdropping me and Yellow, so why are you here?" Blue's voice was muffled from squishing her face on the cushion.
"I was just going to tell you about just how brilliant Yellow's disguise will look."
Blue took her head off the couch to stare at the bluenette, "Oh? How about trying to make Yellow wear the disguise. That's when I'll be interested in your little schemes."
Crystal gave a smirk which made the older woman shiver slightly. "Just watch Blue, you will be interested."
The brunette glared at the younger woman, "I don't want you hurting Yellow."
Crystal gave a look of fake hurt, "I would never hurt poor Yuki."
"Alright, whatever you say. I'll kick your butt tomorrow if you do anything stupid."
The bluenette gave a big smile, "Thank you Blue! You will not be disappointed!"
"Ok, ok whatever. Let me go to sleep!"
Crystal sighed, the smile still not leaving her face, "good night Blue."
"Good night Crystal."
Edited on: 11/28/12
Original: 3/10/12
I'm soon going to edit chapter 2.