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Hello! This is my second Harry potter fic! I'm just starting in the business, so please be kind enough to tell me what you think about this fic. Any suggestions, comments, flames are welcome!
Looking up at Hogwarts, lit against the dark night, her heart raced in excitement in the year to come. It was their seventh year in Hogwarts and she was given the privilege to serve as Head Girl. Thoughts raced through her mind as to what she could do with the power she had.
Since first year she'd done everything to prove herself worthy of the position, gained the trust of her teachers, scored highest in almost all exams and competed with the best. And there was only one other best in school... James Potter... the arrogant bastard competed with her in everything, bested her sometimes, and equaled her in the rest... challenged her in almost everything even Quidditch, which she had to learn how to play just to beat him... unfortunately, he was good. The fool would go out of his way to irritate her, abuse her, and pull her down... Now here enters the bad thing about her position right now... she had to work with a Head Boy... and you might be guessing correctly who the Head Boy is... James Potter...
The carriage stopped, all students got off and headed up for the sorting ceremony... she smiled at some friends, then walked towards her friend Rose who was at that moment looking for her as well, when they spotted each other they met, each one with a warm hug to give.
"How was your summer?" she asked
"It was fun, we flew to France then to Rome. About you?" we walked towards our usual seat by the table, our chatter endless as we waited for the ceremony to begin.
"Any boys this summer?" her eyes gleamed mischievously
"No! Of course not, but I bet you had" I teased
"Act..." she begun before someone butted in
"Didn't catch yourself any fish this summer? How lousy can you get?" I recognized the source, and a scowl darkened my features as I turned to the boy that said it, he was seated beside me, and I was surprised not to have noticed.
"Like its any of your business" I retorted
He smirked, then turned towards Rose
"Hey!" he greeted
"Hello James" she returned, "Had fun this summer?" she asked him
"Yup! Loads of it! Girls couldn't seem to get their hands off me" he bragged, looking as smug as ever
"Poor girls, didn't know what they were in for" I drawled, my eyes looking away from his face, I searched the table for the boy I wanted to see most... and spotted him at the far end, reading a book.
"Hey, Evans! Heard you're the new Head Girl!" I turned to look up
"Hey Sirius!" James greeted his best friend, patted the space beside him
"Yah! I did hear about that little detail," I returned sarcastically...
"Cool it! As Head Girl shouldn't you be friendly to all students" Black returned
"Too bad I don't want to include you in the list of "All students""
I looked away from the two most annoying men in school; I just wished they would sit elsewhere... but Rose wouldn't like that... she had the longest crush on James, and this was one sacrifice she would grant her.
The sorting ceremony ended hours earlier, and they were all sent off to their dorms... she was lying on her queen-sized bed, staring out the window, and about to drift asleep when the door to their shared bathroom opened.
"I can see your enjoying the luxury of being Head Girl"
"Arrg! Don't you know how to knock, Potter? Or is simple courtesy unknown to your puny brain?"
He smiled at the irritated response, drifting over to her table, surveying the laptop there
"Cool it, Evans! I just wanted to see what your room is like"
"Now you've seen it, could you leave!" she ordered, but again it was not heard as he sat down on one of the chairs, staring at her...
"What are you doing?!"
"Looking at you" the answer was bold as it was intended to tease
She huffed; she wasn't intimidated that easy, standing up from the bed she started over to him until she stood in front of his seated form
"What do you want, Potter? A late night squabble?"
"Maybe! I was too bored earlier to start one, so here I am. It's too early to sleep, anyway"
"Well not for me! Now could you please go and irritate some other girl!"
"But I don't want other girls, I want you!" with that he wrapped an arm around her waist, pulling her towards him, then sat her on his lap...
"What the hell are you doing?!" she struggled from the firm hold, her face begun to flush red from the contact of his firm body
"Holding you..." he said, his lips neared her ears as he whispered, "You know, you looked so delicious on that bed... made me want to do something else than just look at you"
"Let me go!" she was panicking... she felt strange in his arms, and she didn't want to feel strange...
"Why? I want you just where you are," he returned, she couldn't see the smirk that lit his lips...
"Because I said so!" she ordered once again, struggling even more as he started to plant kisses on her nape...
"No..." he whispered against the sensitive skin on her neck...
She felt his hot breathe blow against the hair on her nape, and it made her insides tingle... her mouth went dry she stopped struggling from the soft caress of his lips that traveled up her jaw...
"Evans..." he moaned near her ear... and that snapped her out of the spell, with all her strength she pulled herself free... got her wand and pointed it towards the boy that sat dazed on the chair...
"Get out of my room now!"
He didn't reply, as he stood staring at her... his fist clenched to control himself from jumping on her then... she was a tempting sight, and even the promise of death couldn't chase him away then... but he'd done enough for one night... he'd seen her respond, even for a short time... and he had a year to get her... he had plenty of time...
He stood up, headed towards the door, turned to her, giving her one of those smiles that broke thousands of hearts... then closed the door behind him...
Lily collapsed on the floor, staring at the closed door...
What do you think? Please tell me! Please review!!! I know its short but it is a start right! Thanks for reading! I'll be waiting for your reviews!
Hello! This is my second Harry potter fic! I'm just starting in the business, so please be kind enough to tell me what you think about this fic. Any suggestions, comments, flames are welcome!
Looking up at Hogwarts, lit against the dark night, her heart raced in excitement in the year to come. It was their seventh year in Hogwarts and she was given the privilege to serve as Head Girl. Thoughts raced through her mind as to what she could do with the power she had.
Since first year she'd done everything to prove herself worthy of the position, gained the trust of her teachers, scored highest in almost all exams and competed with the best. And there was only one other best in school... James Potter... the arrogant bastard competed with her in everything, bested her sometimes, and equaled her in the rest... challenged her in almost everything even Quidditch, which she had to learn how to play just to beat him... unfortunately, he was good. The fool would go out of his way to irritate her, abuse her, and pull her down... Now here enters the bad thing about her position right now... she had to work with a Head Boy... and you might be guessing correctly who the Head Boy is... James Potter...
The carriage stopped, all students got off and headed up for the sorting ceremony... she smiled at some friends, then walked towards her friend Rose who was at that moment looking for her as well, when they spotted each other they met, each one with a warm hug to give.
"How was your summer?" she asked
"It was fun, we flew to France then to Rome. About you?" we walked towards our usual seat by the table, our chatter endless as we waited for the ceremony to begin.
"Any boys this summer?" her eyes gleamed mischievously
"No! Of course not, but I bet you had" I teased
"Act..." she begun before someone butted in
"Didn't catch yourself any fish this summer? How lousy can you get?" I recognized the source, and a scowl darkened my features as I turned to the boy that said it, he was seated beside me, and I was surprised not to have noticed.
"Like its any of your business" I retorted
He smirked, then turned towards Rose
"Hey!" he greeted
"Hello James" she returned, "Had fun this summer?" she asked him
"Yup! Loads of it! Girls couldn't seem to get their hands off me" he bragged, looking as smug as ever
"Poor girls, didn't know what they were in for" I drawled, my eyes looking away from his face, I searched the table for the boy I wanted to see most... and spotted him at the far end, reading a book.
"Hey, Evans! Heard you're the new Head Girl!" I turned to look up
"Hey Sirius!" James greeted his best friend, patted the space beside him
"Yah! I did hear about that little detail," I returned sarcastically...
"Cool it! As Head Girl shouldn't you be friendly to all students" Black returned
"Too bad I don't want to include you in the list of "All students""
I looked away from the two most annoying men in school; I just wished they would sit elsewhere... but Rose wouldn't like that... she had the longest crush on James, and this was one sacrifice she would grant her.
The sorting ceremony ended hours earlier, and they were all sent off to their dorms... she was lying on her queen-sized bed, staring out the window, and about to drift asleep when the door to their shared bathroom opened.
"I can see your enjoying the luxury of being Head Girl"
"Arrg! Don't you know how to knock, Potter? Or is simple courtesy unknown to your puny brain?"
He smiled at the irritated response, drifting over to her table, surveying the laptop there
"Cool it, Evans! I just wanted to see what your room is like"
"Now you've seen it, could you leave!" she ordered, but again it was not heard as he sat down on one of the chairs, staring at her...
"What are you doing?!"
"Looking at you" the answer was bold as it was intended to tease
She huffed; she wasn't intimidated that easy, standing up from the bed she started over to him until she stood in front of his seated form
"What do you want, Potter? A late night squabble?"
"Maybe! I was too bored earlier to start one, so here I am. It's too early to sleep, anyway"
"Well not for me! Now could you please go and irritate some other girl!"
"But I don't want other girls, I want you!" with that he wrapped an arm around her waist, pulling her towards him, then sat her on his lap...
"What the hell are you doing?!" she struggled from the firm hold, her face begun to flush red from the contact of his firm body
"Holding you..." he said, his lips neared her ears as he whispered, "You know, you looked so delicious on that bed... made me want to do something else than just look at you"
"Let me go!" she was panicking... she felt strange in his arms, and she didn't want to feel strange...
"Why? I want you just where you are," he returned, she couldn't see the smirk that lit his lips...
"Because I said so!" she ordered once again, struggling even more as he started to plant kisses on her nape...
"No..." he whispered against the sensitive skin on her neck...
She felt his hot breathe blow against the hair on her nape, and it made her insides tingle... her mouth went dry she stopped struggling from the soft caress of his lips that traveled up her jaw...
"Evans..." he moaned near her ear... and that snapped her out of the spell, with all her strength she pulled herself free... got her wand and pointed it towards the boy that sat dazed on the chair...
"Get out of my room now!"
He didn't reply, as he stood staring at her... his fist clenched to control himself from jumping on her then... she was a tempting sight, and even the promise of death couldn't chase him away then... but he'd done enough for one night... he'd seen her respond, even for a short time... and he had a year to get her... he had plenty of time...
He stood up, headed towards the door, turned to her, giving her one of those smiles that broke thousands of hearts... then closed the door behind him...
Lily collapsed on the floor, staring at the closed door...
What do you think? Please tell me! Please review!!! I know its short but it is a start right! Thanks for reading! I'll be waiting for your reviews!