Hi there..
This is my first time in fan fiction.
I apologize because this is a short version of what I originally wrote, so it might lack some details and actions.
This is for my project so I would like some review.
Please make some suggestion and check for some errors.
Hope you enjoy it.
Percy
A boy woke up on a hospital bed, dazed and confused he roomed his eyes in his surroundings. The room was big and smells like medicines and fresh bandages, definitely a hospital. What is he doing in a hospital? All bunks were empty but some looks like it had been used by seriously injured people, few drops of red liquid stained some mattresses. Light slips through the windows, square holes on the walls, reflecting the shined stone floor.
It was morning. All the walls and the ceiling were made up of white marble stone carefully carved and polished. Large columns supported the ceiling and separated every bed bunks.
He tried to get up. A pain ached on his back like a nail piercing in his spinal cord. A hand caught his shoulders, steadying him as he tried to raise his upper body. A voice came from a girl on his side, "Where is he? Where is Ja…". Then he fainted again, leaving the echoing voice of the girl inside his head.
A nightmare came him; he was standing in a desert. Everywhere he looks he saw mountains of sands. Cut off from any water, he felt like dying, like a fish that has been removed from the water. He collapses on his feet, coughing sand. He felt like he had eaten an hourglass, the sand was forcing its way out of his body. The pain on his back grew more intense. The sand moved in front of him, raising up and forming a figure he recognize as a lady in hood. The figure spoke, her voice was deep and dry, "You killed him, my son, you banished him! Now you must pay, taste my curse Perseus ..". He could not look up to see the face of the lady; he was still on the ground vomiting sand. The figure places its hand on his back, just where the pain located, excruciating tendrils of electricity spread though his body like poison. "Kill them…kill them all…..betray those who you love". He screamed. Begging for the lady to stop. The lady placed pressure on his back, shocking him again with electricity. He saw in his mind horrible pictures, his hand was soaked in blood and all around him fire burned everything.
He regains consciousness after that terrible dream. His face was full of sweat. The pain on his back subsided somehow. A girl is by his side waiting for him to wake up. She looked more confuse than worried.
She stood up looking at his face when she saw him opened his eyes. He could not see her face. His eyes sight could still not focus on his environment. The girl has a brown hair tied to a pony tail; a memory came flashing back on him. He put his hand on the girl's cheeks and he mothered the word "I love you". Why did he say that? It was like he saw that girl before. The girl, who was shocked by what the boy did and said, slapped him so hard he would have return to his sleep."Auhh! What did you say?" said the girl. The force wake up the boy. His vision refocused and he saw a girl, blushing terribly. The girl was about 17 years old, she had some freckles on her face that matched her brown hair but her eyes tells another story, she had this stormy gray eyes that looked at him with such intelligence. She was wearing white t-shirt inside her silver plated breast plate. "I didn't mean to…I thought you were.." He tried to remember but the memory faded. "Watch what you're saying new guy" she said.
He bowed his face in embarrassment, "Who are you? What is this place?". "My name is Reyna, this is the legion camp's medical facility. And who are you?" The boy tried to think, "Percy" ,yeah that sounded right. "My name is Percy". "Percy…any last name?" Percy tried but he can't remember. A thought came to him, why can't he remember anything? "I don't know. I…can't…. I can't remember anything. Why can't I remember anything?" he said in a shaky voice.
Reyna helped him up. Percy felt like he had been thrown in the roof of a hundred story building. He had bandage all over his body and he smelled like he bath in acid. They proceed to the end of the room where a big gold door lies engraved in it was a symbol, two snakes encircling a staff. Reyna opened the door like it was a feather and assisted Percy out.
The outside view made Percy opened his mouth in amazement and horror . There were buildings and monuments made up of polished marbles like the one on the old gladiator movies. The architecture was ancient like the buildings were taken out from centuries ago but they all looked like they were just carved out of the stones. One building looked like a perfect copy of the coliseum others looked like altar and palace. A pile of assorted buildings were grouped together to form a roman numeral one. The buildings has common features, they all looked like they had been burned to crisp. Some were only burned a little but the others are not so lucky, big boulders were lying on the roof and nearly destroyed the temples, other buildings looked like they were soaked in acid.
He continued to search his environment. A mass of water was on the south of the clearing and all around was dotted with trees and hills. He saw flying horses soared to the sky ridden by men who about his age, holding bows and javelins, an archery range and a football court all full of teenagers in armor but they are not playing, they looked like getting ready for battle.
"What happen here?", Percy asked. Reyna's face grew dark, "Where under siege for a week now. Polybotes shows no mercy to us. We cannot do anything except to defend and with Jason gone." A tear dropped from her face and she sunk to the ground. So does Percy because Reyna's support was the only one carrying him.
He was about to comfort her because she looked like she needed one. When I was interrupted by a voice.
"So you have woken up?" said a woman's voice on his back that made him stumble to Reyna. He look to his back and saw a giant wolf with brown fur. It has big brown eyes but it was not like any the eyes of a wild wolf it show kindness and respect to Percy. The wolf look like hunters got to her, bandages were wrapped on her feet and a fresh scar was on her face."Lupa.." Reyna stood and bowed to the wolf, trying to hide her teary eyes, leaving Percy on the ground.
Okay, she is bowing to a giant wolf; Percy thought that was new to him unlike the flying horses and those ancient buildings. "Welcome to the legion child" Percy stood up, "Um… thank you ma'am" Percy was unsure to call the wolf ma'am.
The wolf was obviously superior to Reyna, but he was annoyed by the fact that it is looking at him like a meal. "Now then let me introduce myself, I am Lupa, guide to the Roman demigod camp, First legion." She says proud and mighty, though she looked less because of her bandages. Percy introduce himself to the wolf not knowing what he would say but Reyna saved him and explained to the would about his memory problem. The wolf just nodded," Welcome Percy, now Reyna please be ready for the next wave, I will not be joining you and please introduce Percy to our camp. ","Wait Lupa, what do you mean you will not be joining us, we will be killed without you."Reyna pleaded. But Lupa just turned and said "Just believe in yourself I did not train you for nothing."
Percy was confused, well more confuse. He did not know what is going on and all he know was they are in big trouble.