Author's Note:
Hello, this is Rhonda Petrie again! If you haven't noticed already, this is actually one of my old stories. Yep, you heard me right. This is one of my oldest stories, dating as far back as 2006. So this fanfiction is about 4-years-old now. Believe or not, and this surprises even me, I was already writing fanfictions when I was working exclusively on my superhero series. The fact is, I had no idea that this website even existed. Even after I have read an article profiling fanfictions, and I think it was a parenting-related article, if I even remember correctly, I did not even seriously consider the possibility of writing a fanfiction. So I guess somewhere along the way, I was so inspired by the shows I have been watching in my childhood I thought, hell, why not? I'll start writing fanfictions about my favorite shows. And so I did. But I guess what happened was that I got so focused on my superhero series that eventually I abandoned writing fanfiction, until I believe, last year, or maybe even a couple of years ago, when I started reading fanfictions off the web. And as you can see here, this is one of my earlier fanfictions.
Now, let me get something off my chest here. All writers have to start somewhere, right? And even though I do have some skill as a writer, to put it modestly, my writing style, even back then, needed a lot of work, as evidenced by the thorough reading I've been doing for the last two nights. The sentences are at times pretty repetitive, or as you say, redundant, and the overall sentence structure is predominantly based on simple sentences; there are no traces of any complex sentences what-so-whatever, not even a semi colon to separate the two independent sentences! And even a couple of established characters are somewhat out of character at times, or OOC, such as Leroy and also Gantu. Just to warn you right off the bat; after all, I was only around in 8th grade when I started this story.
Now, the synopsis of this story is that it has been several years since the conclusion of "Leroy & Stitch" and Leroy has adjusted to life in the prison cell he is currently in. But then his life changes forever when a police officer-turned-social worker named Captain Chelsea Marie Armada barges into the prison cell and frees Leroy from his cage - but not even before being directly confronted by The Grand Councilwoman. Captain Armada is a specialized social worker who acts in the role of a parole officer and a correctional officer, someone who works towards a criminal's gradual rehabilitation, and who also checks on her clients to make sure they are not in any sort of trouble or doing anything illegal. She is also to escort them into the rehabilitation program and is to monitor and supervise them during their stay. However, she is not allowed to keep her clients with her in her home, and while the adults usually find a place of their own with some assistance, the dependents are left in the care of the individuals that she trusts. After Captain Armada manages to negotiate a deal with the Grand Councilwoman, she goes off without a hitch with Leroy and flies off in a spaceship to New York City.
In the meantime, a new villainess comes into the picture - her name is Karmana, a Zira-like wolf alien who was once Jumba Jookiba's lover back in his college days before being dumped cruelly in favor of his now ex-wife. Now the mad wolf-woman is seething for revenge, to not only get back at Jumba for being so cruel and callous towards her but like Dr. Hamsterveil is also thirsting and hungering for power - and eventual control of The Galactic Empire. To accomplish this she plots to track down Leroy in one of the world's toughest and notorious cities and capture him just so she could corrupt him, and ultimately his loved ones and his fellow rehabilitation comrades and manipulate all of them into becoming her slaves in her new empire.
Upon arriving in New York, Captain Armada immediately hands over Leroy into the custody of her good friend and next door neighbor, Mrs. Kate Kasha, a Jewish woman who is a survivor of the concentration camps rampant throughout Europe, especially in Poland. Mrs. Kasha takes an instant liking to the red experiment and instantly adopts him as her own. Meanwhile, Lilo is grown up and making a good living as a travel agent while dwelling in a house along with Stitch, Angel, and her three new pets, Scruff, Jeanne, Russell, and Goldie. They are then immediately alerted to Leroy's presence in New York and soon fly out all the way from Hawaii to the state of New York. Once they get there, they meet up with Leroy and his new family. But along with that discovery comes a series of adventures that will ultimately test Leroy's true potential to redeem himself of his past crimes.
Now, here are a couple of things I must make clear. One, I do not expect to update this story anytime soon and it's been so long since I even last touched it; however, any tips or suggestions to improve this story will be extremely helpful and be greatly appreciated, just as long as you don't go off screaming at me about how bad this story is. Relax - this story is freaking 4-year-old; my writing style wasn't as mature as it is now.
Before you forget, let me remind you again: I DO NOT APPRECIATE BLATANTLY HARSH REVIEWS BECAUSE, I REPEAT, AND I'LL SAY IT AGAIN, THIS IS AN OLD STORY!!!! THIS IS NOT MY MOST RECENT STORY, SUCH AS "COURAGE MEETS THE ROBINSONS" AND "LADY SEDONA: ORIGINS"! THIS WAS 4 YEARS BEFORE I WROTE "SENTIMENTAL KISS"!
If you do not understand this message, then I don't know what to tell you. To be mature, I'll accept any form of constructive criticism you have, but please be nice - and constructive. That's what constructive criticism is for - to point out to the writer what they're doing wrong and tell them how to improve it. I'm sorry if I sound arrogant and conceited, but I have to speak out for myself.
Now, let me explain my motives behind this story: one, I felt extremely sorry for Leroy the first time I saw the movie and I was saddened by the consequences he had to suffer as a result. Secondly, I felt there was some good in him yet and I thought there could be a chance for him to see the error of his ways and turn things around for himself. And number three, I wanted to portray him in a positive light, hence the OCC thing. Besides, NO ONE said that he was PURE EVIL like 627 and therefore incapable of being rehabilitated!
Oh yeah, and another thing: in the original version of this story, I had put in some celebrities into the plot, as was a typical hallmark of my superhero stories and most of my non-superhero work. However, in order to allow this fanfiction to be admitted into this website, I changed the names, gave them different names, and decided to portray them as fictionalized versions of their real life counterparts. This way it could be a huge advantage for me so not only would I prevent myself from getting sued and getting my account suspended, but I could also loosely base those composite characters on their real life models and allow them to have some sort of personality of their own and kind of make fun of them along the way. I feel it is more appropriate to put up the list of real life people that these characters are based on in my profile.
If this move is inappropriate, I will immediately take this story down and remove it from my account.
And with all that being said, I hope you enjoy this fanfiction and if you have any questions, please come and private message me.
Now let's begin!
Originally written: August 9th, 2006
Edited: February 3-4 2010
Submitted: February 5th, 2010
Lilo & Stitch: Leroy's Redemption
Created by: Rhonda Petrie
Chapter 1 – Leroy Busts Out
One day in the year 2030, a red alien experiment was sitting in a cell in a planet along with Dr. Hamsterveil and the other clones. His name is Leroy. He was watching T.V. and was eating honey peanuts when suddenly he heard a door go down. He then walked to his cell door and then looked at the doorway and was amazed to find a silhouette of a woman standing in there. The woman then entered the cell room.
Her name was Captain Chelsea Marie Armada. She was from New York and had earned a Master's degree and also a Bachelor degree back in college. She was studying to be a police officer but then instead she landed a job as a rehabilitation social worker by a rehabilitation center program called Redemption 3000, sponsored by the FBI. She was born down in the Bronx back in 1962. She had made a stint as a police officer too before becoming a rehabilitation social worker. She then sprinted past some cells and then was standing in front of Leroy's cell. She then took out a silver key and then inserted it into the keyhole and then turned it and then opened it.
"Don't worry, little guy. I'm going to bust you out," said Captain Armada as she took Leroy out of the cell and then closed it and locked it. She then sets him down on the floor and then took out a cloning ray gun. She then cocked it and pointed it at Leroy. Leroy gasped and then growled. He was about to explode. But then before he could attack her she then triggered the cloning ray gun and then shot Leroy with it. Leroy was shaking violently and was trembling. One by one all of his clones were gone. Soon all of them were gone.
Captain Armada resets her gun and then puts it in her pocket. "There! Now all of the clones are inside you again. Now, tell me, what's your name?" asked Captain Armada. "Leroy," answered Leroy. "Well, Leroy, nice to meet you. I'm Captain Chelsea Marie Armada, or Captain Armada if you prefer. But friends just call me Chelsea. I'm taking you to New York and out of this dump," explained Captain Armada. Leroy snorted. Then, Captain Armada grabbed his arm and then dragged Leroy through the floor.
Suddenly the alarm blared. Captain Armada was in big trouble. "Oh dang," said Captain Armada. Then she started to run out of the cell room. She raced through the hallway with guards pursuing her. "Everyone go after that woman!" cried one of the guards. Captain Armada then ran and ran and ran until she was at a dead end. Now she was surrounded. But Captain Armada wasn't going to give up. She then walked towards the guards and then grabbed one and then bashed him from side to side and then bashed him to the floor. The guards then charged after her and then she karate kicked them in many directions. She punched one of the guards in the eye and then she kicked one in the mouth. She kept on doing this until the Grand Councilwoman arrived. "Captain Chelsea Marie Armada," she declared, and then everyone stopped fighting. Captain Armada then stared at her and then bowed in her presence.
"Well, I see that you have Leroy in your possession. Hand him over, unless you have a reason for this disturbance," said the Grand Councilwoman. Captain Armada then cleared her throat and then said, "Your Honor, I'm taking Leroy to New York." "New York? Why is that?" inquired the Grand Councilwoman. "To a rehabilitation center program called Redemption 3000 sponsored by the FBI," answered Captain Armada. This intrigued the Grand Councilwoman. "Surely you're joking?" she asked. "Oh no, Your Honor. That's where Leroy's going to be assigned. In that program," answered Captain Armada.
"Well. Are there any other people in that program?" asked the Grand Councilwoman. "Oh yes. Lena Rosenberg, Michael Viagra, Henry Rosenberg…" started Captain Armada. "Are Lena and Henry related?" asked the Grand Councilwoman. She noticed that the two had the same last names. "Oh yes. Husband and wife. Well, besides them, there are Charmaine Feathers, Mary Kate Leningrad, Benny Crawford, Mercy Hillary, Jeanette Paris, Klaus von Bugler, Madrid Henri, and even Caroline Withers," answered Captain Armada.
"Hmm," said the Grand Councilwoman and then a T.V. screen came in front of her and then there were pictures of the people that Captain Armada mentioned. Then, the T.V. screen disappeared and then the Grand Councilwoman turned to Captain Armada again. "So, what are you exactly?" she asked. "A rehabilitation social worker," said Captain Armada. "If you're a rehabilitation social worker, then how come you're called Captain Armada?" asked the Grand Councilwoman.
"Because I still work part time as a police officer and I'm the captain. That's why," answered Captain Armada. "Hmm. You're free to go, but if anything major goes wrong in the city, I'm summoning him back here. You understand me?" asked the Grand Councilwoman. Captain Armada then nodded and then ran off. She then came to a deck and then approached a spaceship. She then went inside it and then the door closed. She then buckled up, and with Leroy sleeping on her chest, inserted the key in the keyhole and started the spaceship.
The T.V. screen then came down in front of her face. "Select a planet you want to go to," a voice said. Captain Armada then pressed the Earth button. "Planet Earth," said the voice again, and then Captain Armada then pushed down the lever after pulling it up. The spaceship then sprinted and then she headed off to New York. Leroy was going to New York for the very first time.