Hello, my future readers. This is my first fan fiction and I can't believe I'm actually posting this! I need a little help, I have the second chapter down but I wan't some opinions before I do. I got this idea while scanning the Divergent fan fictions and found one that made their own story off of the books. So thanks to you! (Sorry cant remember the user name)
Disclaimer: I OWN ONLY MY CHARACTERS AND THEIR PERSONALITIES! All credit goes to Veronica Roth the author of the Divergent series. I also do not own any songs I might put in this in the future they belong to the writers and the singers.
Welcome to my story.
I was born during the wars, I don't remember much only the sound of shouting and gunfire, I'm an orphan with, my older brother to take care of me. He didn't fancy the ways of the Erudite as soon as he figured out what they had planned, but he stayed out of fear for my safety. He could have been called a Divergent, but he was too smart for the aptitude test, he knew every way that the Erudite would've worked out the situations, although he thought to do otherwise. Since the wars are over its a time of peace, but there is tension against the Dauntless, I think they still divide themselves sometimes, especially with the Erudite transfers, it's not likely I will go to the Dauntless, ugh bite my tongue i want to so badly! I've imagined myself jumping on the train and running to the wind heck, I've even practiced. I'm eager to learn, its my Erudite side, I don't need the aptitude test to tell me, I'm Divergent, I hate lying, I don't like fights, I get into them anyway, I will only fight if it's necessary, I'm unnaturally witty, and I don't like boasting outside my head of course. I miss Abnegation, it sounds like the most peaceful place, but it was what started the wars in the first place. Most of the factionless left, I know if they were given another chance at the initiation, they could've made it into one faction, I don't see why we have factions anymore most people who were divergent left… including my friend, Hannah, she was forced to leave with her parents. I'm saddened that I no longer have a friend, but I don't show it. I'm considered dull, unfashionable, and a freak. AUGH! I'm such an idiot sometimes!
I leap out of my warm bed and I get dressed in a white shirt with a light blue tie and jacket and a pair of royal blue long shorts just under my knees another thing about me is I hate skimpy clothes, makeup, and skirts. I grab a blue hair tie and place it around my wrist, it's a habit i got from Hannah since she's always needing one, I don't understand how she kept her princess blonde hair from tying into knots at her waist, although against her bright green eyes it looked pretty. I grab a pair of glasses, I don't often wear them, but I'm in too much of a hurry today it's the aptitude test! I'm only 15 but my birthday is on the same day as the Choosing Ceremony, tomorrow. I won't celebrate with my brother this year and I know he won't visit me if I leave, he doesn't like the idea of faction over blood, I'm not a huge fan of it either. I stretch once to loosen up my shorts a little. I run down the stairs and kiss my half asleep brother on the cheek, I grab my sling bag, as I call it because its like a mini mail bag that slings across my body, and a piece of toast before sliding into my white tennis shoes barefoot and zooming out of the house hitting the door against the outside hard enough just for it to fly back and slip into place. I smile and imagine myself running to catch one of the Dauntless trains but I slow down and grab my bag self consciously as I win glares and annoyance from my fellow Erudite both kids and adults. I scuff my shoe while walking, checking my charm watch I sigh, I will be late if I don't hurry, today classes are short and most kids don't bother to go to them today, lunch is the last normal thing we do before the aptitude test, I don't feel hungry so I won't eat I might puke it back up if I had made my lunch today, I shove it in my bag and pick up my pace to a slow jog, and looking inside the school without entering, people are hugging and crying and smiling some even full of hate and evil but hey they chose it. Someone shouts as they see me,
"Hey! She's here! The mistake! The stupid one. Let's leave her alone for today, after all we won't be seeing her anywhere but the factionless."
I look like I might cry as I walk in through the halls and sit down on a bench, but its only an act I play, they call me the stupid one because I act that way I actually have more facts and references to the wars and other history than they can imagine. I just dont like it, I'm a strategist, a climber, a challenge taker, a protector, an actor, and many other things, and I don't have any fears, well I have things like them, but I wouldn't exactly call them fears, it's more of a dislike, I don't fear losing my loved ones, I dislike it and I wouldn't do it even if they tried to kill me, I don't fear killing someone its just that I don't want to. Yeah, yeah, call me cold hearted or whatnot but I'm honestly not. I'd sacrifice myself for a stranger, a friend, a loved one, or even an enemy. I shift my sling bag over to my other shoulder and draw it across my body on the other side, as I get up and walk to the bathroom, I fish inside the brown bag finding a small eyeglass/contact case amongst the metal, yes metal, the bag weighs about 60-70 pounds with or without my stuff, it's actually got a sheathed knife, a few bullets, a grappling hook, and a few other things, in it but it came like that, so I'm not taking them out. I look up to the mirror and take off my glasses, I feel prettier when I have them on because they hide my smoky coal gray mixed with hazel around my pupil eyes, my contacts are gray so it dims the hazel to its disappearance, I put one on my finger tip and widen my eyelids so I can fit it in blinking rapidly, I honestly only need one, but I repeat the process with the other eye as something flies and hits the mirror cracking it and time seems to slow before it shatters, luckily I had gotten my contact in, and could duck down narrowly missing glass chunks which embed in my dark blonde reddish hair, I hear laughter and someone saying loudly,
"She broke the mirror with her ugliness! There should be a faction for the ugly people, she'd fit right in!" They break out laughing and I stand up, collecting my glasses from the glass, and snap the case around them and I walk out, looming slightly,
"The factions are based on personality not appearance any Erudite should know that." I say sharply before throwing one of the glass shards down and walking off getting more glass out of my hair strands, the group looked stunned, I was usually quiet, but hey today might be the last time I see them so, why not stand up, more like stand over, for myself.
I slip down into a seat next to some other Erudite and they shy away from me like I'm a disease although I don't care as I bury myself into a book.
Oh! I just realized I never gave you a full description of myself! My face is mismatched, freckles, smoky gray hazel eyes, my lips are paler along with my skin, my nose is straight and narrow, if I wear glasses they slip, it's about average length luckily, my ears are slightly large so I can hear a lot better, not to mention my eye problem strengthens my other senses, my hair is dark ginger blonde and short reaching down to my chin since I haven't cut it recently. My body is clownish, I'm a bit taller than the average person, so I loom over people sometimes, my chest size isnt to large actually it's a little small, my legs are muscled, and last I measured my calf it was 40 inches around, my arms aren't as muscled up but they are just as strong, my shoulders are broader than I would like, my feet are huge at a size 11 for men.
"Sadie Kandy."
First Chapter completed please read and review with your honest opinions for or against this story but please give me a reason to see why you dislike this if you do! Thanks! ~Unbalancedchapterwriter
Afternote I am SO SORRY to all the people who have read this before I made the mini change! I Feel SO Bad I just realized I never put my characters name in! I feel like such a dope. Thanks to one of my reviews who probably without knowing it themselves gave me the hint. Again I am so so so Sorry!