This is my first fanfiction, so constructive criticism is much appreciated 😉
Chapter 1: Over
"It's over."
Two words. Not very hard to understand, but sometimes too much to take in.
Evie McAllister lay in bed and staring at the ceiling, thinking about the conversation she and her now ex-girlfriend Gail had a few weeks ago. They'd dated for almost six years, and one day, seemingly out of nowhere, the latter broke it off. They were out to lunch one day at Evie's favorite place, when once a break in conversation occurred, Gail opened up.
"This is going to be hard to say," Gail had said to her, taking Evie's hand in hers, "but I've been thinking about it and... I think I'm gonna take off." Evie looked at her with a confused expression. "What...?" Somewhere deep down, she knew what Gail was getting at, but she didn't want to believe it. "Take off? What... what does that mean?" Gail gave her a frustrated look, "Don't make me spell it out, Eve." Evie continued to look confused. "I... I'm breaking up with you." Evie's heart sank. Knowing it was coming didn't make it any less painful to hear out loud. "B-but..." Evie searched for words, but could only squeak out one: "Why?" Gail sighed. "It's just... There are so many things I want to do in my life and frankly, I don't think I'm going to be able to do any of them if I stay tied down to you forever. We went through high school together and we've had a few good years since then, but I think I need to move on." Evie could feel tears welling up as she desperately tried to come up with a reason to get her not to leave.
"B-but... our six-year anniversary is next month."
"I know, Eve, I just-"
"And you're just gonna... Leave? Walk away like it meant nothing?"
"No, it's not that, it's just-"
"You told me you loved me. That you wanted to be with me."
"Don't make it sound that way. I still love you, I just-"
"But we don't have to break up! I can just come with you and-"
"EVIE!"
Gail's sudden shout caused several heads to turn in their direction.
"See, this is why I waited until the last minute to tell you about this. I knew you'd overreact!"
Evie kept trying to talk her out of it, her hopes diminishing with each passing second, until Gail had enough and destroyed what was left with two words:
"It's over."
She squeezed Evie's hand and kissed her one last time and left.
Evie stayed where she was until they kicked her out at closing time. She didn't know what to do. She couldn't make herself cry because she wasn't sure if it was real or not. At around 8:50, her cellphone started ringing. The name on the caller ID was Marcus Wright, her best friend since childhood. She didn't know why, but just seeing that name made the tears start coming back. She stared at the screen for a few seconds before answering and slowly raising the phone to her ear. "Yo, Evie, you guys still coming tonight? I don't want to end up watching the show by myself!" Hearing Marcus's voice was somehow only made it worse. "Yeah," she said, barely hiding the pain in her voice, "I'll be there in a few minutes." Though she hid it well, Marcus could tell something was wrong; he knew her too well to miss it. "Hey, is everything ok? You sound a little off kilter today."
A long pause solidified Marcus's suspicion. "Hey, if you guys have something else going on today, I can just record the show and we'll watch it later. No big deal." Evie was barely holding the tears back at this point. "No, no, it's... it's fine. I'll be there in a few minutes," she said, her voice starting to crack. "Ok," Marcus said, "I'll see you then. Drive safe, Eve." She hung up the phone, slowly stood and trudged back to her car. The feeling that she was forgetting something followed her all the way to Marcus's house.
He was already standing outside when she got there. When she parked the car and looked at the empty seat next to her, tears starting to roll down her cheeks. She got out of the car just as Marcus got to it. He stopped a few feet from her, still not sure exactly what was going on. "Everything ok?" he asked, "Where's Gail?" She finally let go and began to cry. "She... She's gone..." Marcus knew by now what had happened. "Oh... Oh man Evie, I... I'm so sorry," he said. She ran to him and collapsed into his arms, sobbing heavily. "I thought she loved me, Marcus," she sobbed. "I know, I know," he said, holding her tightly. "We'll figure it out, Eve, I promise. Come on, let's get you inside. I'll make you some hot chocolate and we can talk about it."
Notes:
That's the end of chapter 1! I know it was short, but thanks for reading if you made it this far!
A couple things I wanted to make sure were clear:
The main character's name is Evelyn, but most people call her Evie (pronounced E-vee (like the Pokémon Eevee I guess))
Sometimes people refer to her as Eve (as in Adam and Eve). This isn't a typo, but sort of like a nickname of a nickname that some characters who really care about her sometimes use.
Thanks again for reading, hope to see you back next chapter! 😊