This is my first story. please give reviews, I need reviews... I want to know what you think of my story so far.
This is the story of how the Mane 6 dicovered Atlantis...
It was a nice summer day when Pinkie Pie decided to plan a beach party for the rest of the Main 6.
"I'll just send a paper invitation, cause you know what happened last time I tried sending a personal invitation." Pinkie said thoughtfully. With that Pinkie bounced off to write the invitations.
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AT BEACH PARTY:
"Wow Pinkie, this is a great beach party!" Twilight said lying down in the soft sand
"Of course it's great, silly! Then why else would I plan the party?" Pinkie said. "Well actually my Pinkie Sense told me to because we would find a mysterious bottle with a interesting map in it…" Pinkie then mumbled to herself.
"Wha…?" Twilight started, then shook herself and said "Never mind, it's probably just Pinkie being Pinkie"
"Twilight, would you be a dear and help me find nice shells for my new designs?" Rarity called out. "It seems like you're the only one available, because Fluttershy is too busy talking with those seagulls, I think lost their egg. And Rainbow Dash and Applejack are playing catch with the beach ball Pinkie brought. Speakng of Pinkie, where did she go?
"HERE I AM!" Pinkie yelled as she popped out of a bush " I'm playing hide and seek with... with ... who was I playing with again? Pinkie asked to herself while rubbing her chin.
"Oh, sure, I'd love to come with you to find seashells, I needed to stretch my legs any way." Twilight responed to Rarity
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FEW MINUTES LATER:
Twilight looked around the beach looking seashells. when she saw some she walked over to take a look, then she picked up the ones that were pretty. When she found a few more pretty shells, she picked them up with her magic and went over to Rarity to show her.
"Thank you darling" said Rarity "but this one just won't do," she said to Twilight, as she spotted a cream colored conch shell Twilight was holding.
"It has a chip on the bottom and a hole in the side!" she said
"Oh, okay I'll help you look for more" Twilight replied and she went off to find more shells. suddenly she spotted something shiny in the sand.
Twilight looked closer, it was a corked bottle with a piece paper stuck inside it! What in Equestria? Twilight thought what is a bottle doing on the beach? Maybe it was somepony who thought it was okay to litter on the could they! somepony could get hurt or and animal might eat it and get hurt or... or... I'll just see what my friends think.
"Hey, look what I found!" Twilight exclaimed "It's a bottle with a rolled up piece of paper in it! I don't really know how it got here. what do you guys think? it's quite mysterious, right?" That reminds me of what Pinkie said earlier...maybe Pinkie was right about finding a mysterious bottle Twilight thought.
Twilight trotted over to her friends and showed them the bottle.
"OPEN IT! OPEN IT! OPEN IT!" Pinkie yelled while jumping up and down "The suspense is KILLING ME!"
So Twilight uncorked the bottle and pulled out the rolled up piece of paper. And saw a map of Equestria with an X on it. But strangly the X was in the middle of the ocean. How interesting, why is the X in the middle of the ocean? what does the X mean? And then she noticed four letters at the top of the page, H E L P.
"This is an interesting map..." Twilight mused " I wonderow this bottle got here, and who sent it? This is such a mysterious bottle we fou-
"TOLD YOU SO! TOLD YOU SO!" Pinkie yelled "My Pinkie Sense told you so! My Pinkie Sense told you so!" Pinkie sang as she bounced around the others " see, we did find a mysterious bottle!"
"Okay..." Rainbow said slowly, staring Pinkie bounce around her. " What's this map mean anyway?" she asked after a while
"I think it means that someone is in trouble ad we need to help them." Applejack said simply.
" But how are we going to help them if we don't even understand this?" Rarity asked
" I'll go back to the library and do some research, in half an hour lets meet at the library." Twilight said to everypony "I'll have to compare it wiht the maps I have, because this map looks like it's hand drawn crudely. It dosen't have any lables at all!"
"You mean do egghead stuff" Rainbow said
" No Rainbow! It's called research!" Twilight said back
"Whatever, I still tink it's egghead stuff" Rainbow said rolling her eyes. After annoying Twilight thoughly she flew off, as did the rest of the Mane 6. (well not all of them flew, some trotted, galloped, transported...etc.)