This is my first story so all constructive criticism is very welcome. No flames please. All reviews are greatly appreciated.
Disclaimer: I do not own Maximum Ride or Percy, JP and RR do! I could never make up such awesome stories anyway.
Summary: The Flock meet another bird kid and then wind up in Camp Half Blood.
Voice, Angel speaking
This is set just after SOF and just before TLO
Chapter 1: We blow up a shopping centre.
Hi, I'm Max. Now first, if you were involved in the slight…disturbance in Washington DC yesterday I am sorry. Believe me, it was not part of my plan of yesterday's events to set off an insey, well small, well ok huge bomb in the middle of the shopping centre there. Basically this is what happened:
We had just escaped yet another lousy attempt at the school capturing us. This wasn't school it was The School, I mean we didn't ditch or anything. The School is an evil, secret, seemingly endlessly funded organisation that 'created' child mutants (for example the Erasers: 95% human, 5% wolf and all idiot). We all (me and my flock) are 98% human 2% avian. Anyway we had just escaped and were flying towards Washington DC my voice had said something about the White house. If you found that bit very weird well I had a voice in my head which gave me information to survive in stupid riddles. Please read the books, I don't have time to go through our whole life stories now.
Just about then Nudge started up, "Maaaaaaaaaaaxxx can we pretty please go shopping? I mean we all really need new clothes and I'm super hungry and I saw a sign there is a sale is a 50% off sale on at Topshop and we can use your max card and my wing are really tired 'cause we have been flying for 9 hours and… Iggy put his hand over her mouth but took it off instantly as he was proberably worried that she would need air, after all she had said all of the above in one breath, but after all this was Nudge (The Nudge channel, all Nudge, all the time) and she wasn't gasping for air like anyone else would be.
I thought about landing; we all were tired and very, very hungry (we needed double the amount of food of regular humans) and we were far away from where they tried to capture us…
"Okay, we can land get some food and rest for a bit but No Shopping."
"Please Max" said Angel. I looked over at her, dam! The dreaded bambi eyes!
So off they go! I know it was really short but I wanted to get a chapter up quickly so I posted this, my next chapter will be longer though. I hoped you all liked it.
Flying yo-yo
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