N/A : Hello! I'm Aline and this is my first DA fanfiction, and my first one in english for that matter... so, every review about the story itsef or grammar is openly welcome ^^
Let me know somehow if it is at least readable, because I have billions of ideas for this fic and if it have some acceptance I will gladly att \o
This is about my firt character at DA – Origins that i could export to Awakening, the begining is exactly at the end of Awakening and will tell the Naoku's journey back to Vigil's Keep and after that her meeting with the other characters of Origins, Alistair being the pair of my character.
I hope you have fun ^^
BioWare owns it's all, i'm just having a lot of fun!
Naoku in a frenzy of anger, fear and something of vengeance, still without know her friends' fate, left behind at Vigil's Keep three nights before, that now seemed like three lifes ago, throw her staff at the floor, somepart of her mind screaming in alarm that something scrapped the blue metal or about cracks that could appear in the crystal. The air around her suddenly got warm e the young comander of the Grey Warden felt her own life force turning into plain energy, of her hands left lightning that she hustled against the montruous body in front of her; at the same time she felt the odour that her magic was making at the Mother's skin, she felt her anger grown up and breathed before she gave another pull, even more strong, more lightning arised, shuting the being's deperate scream that, in the last months, sacrificed countless lifes for a empty goal.
Just as the misshapen mass that was her enemy fell without any other moviment, she began to get to the exit. She didn't need to look back to know that her friends were behind her, however, something inexplicable made her turn againg. Mother, that now doesn't seem anything but a huge, sickening, blood moist, flesh ball, made bile come up her throat. How much more she would have to fight to save people from this kind of monster? How many of them could born from Archtect's Awakening?
Her thoughts was stopped by Sigrun, just the one that judged her from her choice os trusting in a monster in hope that never again, a Blight would rise; she gave her her staff, forgotten moments later. Naoku smile was tired, noticed the dwarf, the Magi turned to Nathanael and Oghren tired faces as well. She knew that herself was with the same features, but they couldn't wait. Without a word, all of them driven themselves on the way back through the towers, now empty. Several minutes later, when they left the lair and a soft breeze touched theirs face, Naoku felt better, however not a pound of her burden was lift from her shoulders.
She felt, with her being every fragment that she have been done the right choice saving what was left of Amaranthine, yet, that wasn't enough to cease the worry about her friends, her people. Vigil's Keep couldn't have been better protected in such a short time since the last attack and she could take over her place of comander. However a million possibilities lay before her mind.
Something withdrew her from her thoughts again. Naoku noticed a dim light with the corner of her eye. In the time she have to turn, Archtect has already full materialized. The Magi felt when her friends tensed up, every one of then awaiting any sign of treachery to bury countless arrows in the body, cut by half the creature or finish him off decapitanting his head with double blades. With just a hand's wave, Naoku stopped them.
"I simply wished to thank you again, young Comander." The creature's incredible human voice in front of her startled her. So she remembered the things Mother said before she gave in the fight and without notice, sighed regretfully. Seeing through the thoughtfull way of his young ally, because that was the way he saw her now, a ally, Archtect forced himself to give her a salute, bowed almost all the way down his knees, in a deep and quiet act.
Sigrun gasped, seeing how the being's neck was exposed to her dagger. In two steps she could make the decision in her Comander's place and finish the insane idea of darkspawn that 'grew counscious' and also could attack with knowledge. But her moment's waver, thinking about the way Naoku chose to save the city's people not too much ago, made her miss the opening.
Arquitecth got up and, with his eyes glued to the Magi in front, added "I'm immensely indebted, young Comander. As I have already said, I do not, by any means, search to betray the trust you laid at me in a so dificult time you are passing through. I hope that in the future, my kind and yours can be just believable and understandable as such as ourselves." That said, he departed, in a known has just himself way, desapaired in thin air, lefting behind just leaves that flew to the groud.
Naoku sighed again, still without know if this was of relief or woeful , so she asked everybody to keep walking. They strided, stopping just when in really need, or to hunt something to eat. They travelled all night long. At almost midday in the day after, Naoku noticed she couldn't keep on that and allowed herself and the others some rest. Nathanael soon hunt something and fix them something to eat, after that, everybody sat down to sleep. The Magi volunteer to take the firt shift to watch; she wouldn't get much sleep anyway.
Despite the fire don't be exactly a danger in the day light like it is at night, Naoku quenched out the fire, using a simply ice magic, to prevent the smoke to sign their position. They were at a small wood that seems to be the safest place they were in the last days, so she sat against a tree before a plain emerge. She stared at the horizon, at the direct of her goal.
Vigil's Keep could stand it. She had to believe that if she wanted to going on. She had already made tough decisions in the last two and a half, almost three years, since she joined the Grey Warden and Duncan's death, when she found herself taken in the middle of situations that she could only lead or die, however, anything she had to do was not more dificult that chose between help her friends and save a nearly destroyed city. She trusted Anders and Velanna, and believed that Justice, the spirit prisoner inside Kristoff's body, had the force to help in defence of the place, however, nothing but the feeling that she had somewhat betrayed them filled her thoughts.
As keeped happening since she took over as Comander at Vigil's Keep, Naoku's thoughts was interrupted. Hearding metal agains metal and seeing by peripehral sight the height of her assaulter , deduced that was one of the dwarves and with some effort she didn't closed her eyes in exasperation, guessing it was Sigrun that would say her jugdement about her letting Arquitecth leave again.
But, to her amazement , listened to the caracteristic sound of Oghren cleaning his throat, getting her atention. The young Magi looked at his way and nodded. "Comander." Greeted the warrior. "Oghren." She said "How many times do I have to tell not to call me that?" she didn't looked up at him, but he knew her for time enough to know that she was serious. "'orry Coman... ehr, Naoku, but, like that, my ale ended up yesterday, ya know, soberness sucks." He laughed openly and the Magi let herself smile.
Both stayed at silence for some time. In certain way, enjoying each other presence in friendship. The warrior thinking that was a goog feeling know that the threat was one more time out of the fight, that was when he noticed the shadowy glance Naoku was giving the horinzon again. "ya know Comand..." he grunted aloud, awaking Nathanael, that dozed nearby "Naoku" he started again "I wanted to thank you." The woman waited until Oghren explained himself, not too focused at the convesation, but once noticed he wouldn't go on, turned to him. "Well" the dwarf tickled his head uncomfortable, "if since I left Orzammar, I have to thank someone for being alive, that someone is you." She first felt astonished, but smiled kindly to her friend. Soon enough, the dwarf amazed her one more time, saying, while getting up to left her alone again "What I mean is, everything that you are capable, even what seemed impossible to do, to keep a large number of people safe, you did. If... someone, anyone, tell you or just imply to you, something else, I want you to let me know." Then he left, before she felt able to answer.