Okay guys here you have the re-writen Intro Chapter of Fairitale Princess! Now please be nice with me and tell me what you think, though it is literally the same chapter (with some modifications) I had to put a lot of thinking in this to make it look good, it makes me think my writing got better. So alright people please read and review! But most of all enjoy!
It was late at night and the sea was calm, the only light that was visible was from a single boat that sailed slowly thought the water, the boat was full with people; and everyone was talking about how big this ball was. The king organized it himself, for him, this was the same night he became the most happier man in all the kingdom, this night is the same night from eight years ago, this night was her beloved daughter's birthday.
At the top f the stairs of the boat there stood the king, he was looking at the people who were enjoying themselves, looking down he saw the little figure that was clinging to his clothes like a scared cat was a little girl, she was wearing a puffy dress adorned with flowers, her long light-brown hair was down and a single flower on the left side of her head made her look cute (as the king said).
"Do you want to go down and talk with someone?" The king asked at the little girl who with a shake of her head said that she was too scared to go alone "do you want to go with me?" He asked her and with a simple look from her silver-grey she said yes. Holding her tiny soft and delicate hand in his big and rough one they both walked down the stairs and were quickly surrounded by people, but they weren't interested in the birthday girl but much more in her father. While everyone was talking to her father and the people crowded over him she was pushed and it made her let go of her fathers' hand.
The little princess tried to go into the crowd and hold his father's hand, but as much as she struggled she just found herself farther from him. She decided to stay still and wait for her father to come and get her but he looked really busy, while she waited a delicious smell came to her nose and with out knowing her feet guided her to an enormous table full with food and what more caught her attention was a plate that was almost empty and all that was there was a small stick with four balls and some kind of sauce, slowly she reached her hand and was about to grab it but then another hand took the stick.
Looking at the owner of the hand she was a boy with green eyes and dark red hair, he was holding on his left hand a tray with food and on his right hand he was holding the princess food.
"Hey that's mine!" the little princess said as the red head boy was about to give a bite, he stopped and saw the stick.
"I don't see your name on it" the boy said with a big grin and took a bite of it.
The princess puffed her cheeks and walked to the boy and kicked him on the knee making his tray to fall on the floor as the boy bended to grab his knee. "What the hell was that for!" the boy said.
The princess just walked past him saying "Asshole" as she walked, she left the boy thinking 'Just who is she and were did she learned to talk like that?'
After a while the princess was able to be with her father again and this time she didn't let go of her father's hand, but that changed as someone said" My, my, if it isn't the birthday girl" the princess smiled and saw the person who said that and this time without caring she let go of the hand she was holding and made a run to the man who was not so far from her and jumped to that his arms.
"Uncle!" she said as she landed on the arms of her father's brother "I thought you weren't coming" the little princess said as she was being carried by his uncle's strong arms.
"And miss my niece's birthday party? Of course not" he said and both laughed and hugged each other.
"But uncle, were in a boat far away from the castle, how did you get here?" The man smiled and pointed up, clueless the girl looked at the direction the man was pointing and saw "-a winged horse!" she said exited.
"Yes, I took the best one of the stables and came here as quickly as the horse could, which was very fast… I think I feel sick"
The princess laughed as she was placed again on the floor while her uncle leaned on the edge of the boat. Just as that happened the king came and welcomed his brother.
"I didn't think you were coming" the king said.
"Well brother, this is an event I can't just miss"
The king smiled and patted his brother on the back "Well now that you're here, let's enjoy the night"
The party was amazing as the princess called it, there were presents and the princess liked every one of them which made her wonder "Did you bring me something uncle?"
The man made a guilty face "I-I must have forgotten"
"Uncle"
"I'm sorry it's just that I was in such a hurry that I didn't got the time to get something, but you know what here" he knelt and took off his neck a golden pendant with a green gem and put it on the little girl in front of him "This pendant is the promise I make, that when I have enough free time I'll go shopping with you and I'll buy you anything you want, All right?" The princess smiled and nodded her head, with both her hands she saw in the back of the pendant and saw that something was engraved on the golden metal, but she decided to ignore it.
"Ah! There you are" both the princess and her uncle looked that the king was walking towards them with his arms behind him "I wasn't really going to give you this right now, but anyways here" the king moved his hands and gave to the princess a box, it was small, smaller than a shoe box, but the princess happily grabbed it and opened it.
"Oh! Wow!" she said as a golden figure came flying out of the box the king smiled at his daughter's reaction.
"It's a golem I ordered to be made just for you" the said golem flapped its wings and landed on the princess's head she giggled and grabbed it with her hands "It's so pretty! Thank you so much!
"And that's not all, look" the king grabbed the golden golem and placed him on the palm of his hand he looked at the golem and said "Sing"
The golem immediately floated and opened its mouth that looked as if it wasn't there and then a hologram like light came from the golem's mouth and a melody started playing.
"It's our song!" the little princess said happily, the king smiled at her. "Hey, does it have a name?"
"No. You can give him a name if you want" the king said with a gentle smile.
"I can't think of anything" the princess said as the golden golem flew back to her head.
"Don't worry, you'll think of something soon, meanwhile, come with me, I want you to meet someone" The little princess nodded and grabbed her father's hand.
Both the king and his brother walked to a short man, he looked very scary and the princess hid behind her father's leg, her uncle chuckled and received a hit from her father's elbow.
"Asshole" her uncle said not really knowing that his niece was listening. When they were face to face with the old mad he made a bow like everybody else.
"There is no need to show so much respect to me Sir Bookman, we are friends, so it's not necessary to do that"
"I apologize but it is just how I am your majesty" The old man said "So I believe this is your daughter?" He looked at her and it just made her get more scared and she hid even further into her father's leg.
"Yes, Elena, I want you to meet Lord Bookman and his grandson Lavi" the king pointed at the old man and from behind him a boy came out. Silver-grey eyes widened as Green eyes did the same.
"It's you!" Both said at the same time.
"Did you already meet each other?" The king's brother asked.
"He took my food!" the princess said "She kicked me for no reason!" The boy said at the same time as her too.
"Ow! What was that for panda!" the boy held his head with his hands when the old man hit him on the head "Don't speak to the princess like that" the read head boy only made a angry noise and pouted.
"Lord Bookman, it's alright, let them be, they're just kids" the king said as he patted his daughter's fuming head. "Now both of you, I have to talk to Sir Bookman for a while, I want you both to behave" the king said and made the boy and girl to seat in two chairs next to each other and then he walked to were the man was, the princess saw the boy and the boy saw the princess and both looked away with an angry 'Hmp!'.
After a long time the party was still going and the king and his brother were still talking with the old man. The princess was staring to feel very tired and she noted that the golden golem was already asleep on her shoulder and his fluffed tail was securely holing the girl's.
The boy was feeling sleepy as well but he didn't want to show it (which failed because hi eyes were staring to close and he would yawn one time or another) and he felt surprised when he felt something soft hit his shoulder and then he saw that the princess was asleep. Her face was peaceful and softly breathing, the boy chuckled and he moved his head to the side and laid his head in top of hers and he too fell asleep.
A scream was heard, silver and green eyes opened to see that they were no longer on the chairs but on the wet floor of the boat it was raining and a storm started to form.
"What, what's going on?" the read head boy was still sleepy and he hadn't noticed what was happening but when a fire ball fell in front of them the boy was as awake like he never was before.
"What the- what's going on!" he yelled and the princess unconsciously held onto him and he did the same. The boy stood up and with some trouble he dragged the girl away from the fire.
"Lavi!" he heard his grandfather say as he was fighting some kind of creature with his 'Black Needles' a type of magic that only people of his level could control "Lavi! Quickly get out of here and take the Princess with you to somewhere safe!"
"P-panda!" the boy screamed when his grandfather was hit and thrown back slamming on some tables. The old man weakly stood up and turned to face the boy and girl "Now!" he ordered.
Holding back his tears the boy took the princess' hand and again dragged her to find a safe place to hide in, but just as the two were running another fireball crashed right in front to them and the explosion made pieces of wood and other kind of metal all around them, a piece of wood hit the boy on his right eye and a burning metal piece hit the princess on her left eye, they both yelled, but the princess was able to open and see with the hurt eye, though it was bleeding a little, the boy in the other hand was bleeding and crying from of pain.
Not sure what to do the girl tried to help the boy by but couldn't, she kneeled in front of the boy and started crying for help. The boy and started crying, saying that it hurt and he was going to die, the little princess said that he wasn't going to die but the boy kept crying until he fell unconscious.
"H-Hey! This isn't time to sleep! W-Wake up, please wake up!" the princess shook him and he made no response. The Princess kept crying.
"Elena!" she heard her father's voice and when she turned around she saw her father and uncle on the winged horse from before, quickly as he could the princess' uncle jumped off the horse and ran to the two kids, he knelt and saw the boy.
"Is he alright?" the girl asked voice shaking.
"He is, don't worry, now we have to get away from here fast!" the man grabbed both girl and boy and hurried to where the winged horse and his brother were.
The girl's uncle passed the unconscious boy to the king and then he gave he princess to her father's arms, the horse started to flap it's wings and the king was about to grab his brother's hand when a black sword with a white cross stabbed the kings brother and it instantly killed him. The king screamed as his brother fell on the floor. Still the king quickly ordered the horse to fly away.
As the king was leaving the ship the figure of a big man came and carelessly he pulled the sword out of the body of the king's brother.
"Don't think I'll let you go so easily" the man said with a happy tone and with an inhuman strength he jumped and swung his sword to the horse that barely missed the horse and it almost lost its balance.
The man landed on something that looked like an umbrella "Shoot! I missed" the man said as the horse started to fly away fast "But don't think you'll get far" he said and with a swing of his hand some of the same creatures the boy's grandfather flew towards the king.
"Hang on tight!" The king said as he made the horse fly faster but it was difficult the wings of the horse weren't strong enough to fly in a storm like that one, it was dark and he could barely see anything is his mind he was only thinking to take the kids somewhere safe.
He didn't notice the figures behind him until it was too late; another explosion near him made the horse to loose his balance and the king almost fell off the horse's back. But his face became terrified when he saw that he was only holding only the boy and he heard his daughter's yell as she fell of the horse.
"Elena!" The king yelled and tried to grab the girl's but was unable to, he saw when the girl made contact with the water and he desperately tried to find her on the surface but with all the rain and the waves the ocean it was impossible.
When the creatures from earlier catch up with the king he had to forcibly stop looking for his daughter before the creatures started attacking him again. Holding the unconscious boy on his arms and during the way back all the king did was cry.