I decided that the prologue was too much of the anime itself and I frequently tried to make it have a "fanfic" sort of tone instead of like the anime where all romantic feelings are disregarded and you can tell when in which you could see my amateur attempts of changing the mood, although failing and going back to default. In the next chapters, I slowly add the "fanfic" feeling to it, making me kind of disappointed because now I feel amateur. But I've just turned 13 recently; I'll just use that as an excuse to not know the exact word to describe my ability to write.
Also, I apologize for how I displayed Grimmjow so poorly. Like so, I frequently tried to "become the character," for I wrote this story in different points of view, but continuing on with Grimmjow's thoughts is difficult for me. I don't research about him a lot, so I don't know him personally from what's posted on the net. I've watched Bleach and I know of his short temper, how he gets angered easily and that he vents them all over other people in an extremely violent way, but I can't seem to get the concept of it correctly. I barely got Orihime, but not even close. It's because I can portray Ulquiorra's character well that his point of views are usually longer and more in depth. Seems as though that everyone thinks like him, though. Orihime is just little more optimistic.
I know, I know. I shouldn't written this in Ulquiorra's point of view then, but I wanted to portray it in Orihime's point of view, although I know I wouldn't have done a good job of it, I still tried, and constantly I found myself constantly switching between characters. But again, I'm still just 13. Decision making isn't really my "thing."