Here is my 'Not a Bridesmaid' re-write. It's the first chapter, re-written. If you hate it tell me. For those of you who read the four-shot, this will be alot different. With new plot twists. Tell me your opinion in a review or a PM. I don't want to keep this going if no one likes it.
11:41 A.M.
First Christian Church
Albuquerque, New Mexico
May 25, 2016
A pair of green-eyes fell upon a brunette dressed in white. She was pulling the veil on her head and kissing her father's cheek. It was fifteen minutes before the girl's wedding day and she was grinning. No cold feet for her.
Kelsi Neilson looked down at her dress. It was a bright red, matching the colors of the roses lying on the table.
A bridesmaid. This shouldn't be reality.
She should be the one dressed in white.
She should be the one who was marrying the man at the end of the isle.
But no, she was a bridesmaid.
And now, there was nothing she could do about it.
8:00 A.M.
East High School
Albuquerque, New Mexico
August 15, 2008
"Kelsi!" Sharpay yelled to the girl as she stepped into the yellow bus. It was the first day of senior year. The year every student dreamed of. It was finally here.
Kelsi was the girl that everyone wanted to be. She was pretty and popular and was dating the star basketball player. While her parents weren't loaded, she was still well off. She still excelled in the social pyramid.
"Hey! How was summer?" The blonde added, looking up from the Blackberry Bold lying in her French manicured hands.
"Awesome as always! I just can't wait to see my baby!" Kelsi squealed, grabbing the attention of the entire bus.
"You guys are SO cute!" A girl turned toward the two and said, smiling. Then the girls glanced to the left. Their eyes landed on a black jag stop next to the bus. The girl inside seemed to be flawless. While the top was down, her hair was still perfectly curled. The teens stared in awe.
"When I get into college I want to look as cool as her," Kelsi whispered to her friend. The girl in the car was tall and wearing Gucci sunglasses and focusing on the road.
"You are telling me," Sharpay said laughing, brushing her blonde bangs out of her eyes, "Girl, we need a car." Kelsi just glanced at her and smirked,
"Well, hopefully Troy will fix up his truck and we can ride together." Sharpay laughed whole-heartedly. Troy was probably never going to fix up that old thing. He had been 'trying' for the last year and a half but no progress had been made.
It ran and he drove it but it still stopped with a 'chug thunk.' Kelsi, however, refused to ride in the old thing. She was better than that piece of junk. The bus was good enough for her.
When the two finally approached East High School, they braced themselves for the bright New Mexico sun. However, the first thing the girls laid their eyes on was the black jag that they saw on the road. Kelsi watched as the model looking girl walked inside the stingy high school.
She looked like a student teacher. And as she walked down the hallway people stepped out of her way. When she passed the group of basketball jocks, they all whistled at her and she blushed.
However, the boys immediately silenced when another brunette and blonde approached the group of guys,
"Troysikins!!" Troy Bolton smirked and frowned at the same time. God, he hated pet names.
"I missed you! What have you been doing?" Kelsi had her arms around the boy tightly and obnoxiously, making the group of men roll their eyes and walk away.
One boy with an afro pulled the blonde with him, whispering a compliment on her outfit and receiving a kiss on his lips.
"Surfing…the guys and I took a trip to Cali for a basketball championship," He explained, grinning at the memories. She sighed,
"I stayed home all summer and missed you! Not one call, mister." He kissed her, annoyed with her whining.
"I'm sorry, babe." She giggled and grabbed his hand as they walked toward the drama room or, their homeroom. When the couple reached the door, class had already started. Darbus said,
"Troy, Kelsi: please be on time," The teacher was hardly surprised that the female was late but shocked that Troy Bolton was. He was a really good student, even though his reputation may say otherwise, "On the next note, we have a new student today. Miss Gabriella Montez." When Kelsi looked over she was horrified to see the girl that could possibly be classier than she ever was. "Please tell us about yourself. Gabriella cleared her throat and spoke with a blush throughout her cheeks. She really hated being the center of attention,
"Um…my name is Gabriella Montez. I'm seventeen years old. I moved here from L.A. I used to live in Beverly Hills until my mother insisted that we move here. I now live, uh, here-" Sharpay choked on her Evian water, spitting a bit on her boyfriend's desk.
"Montez? Are you Victoria Montez's daughter?" The boy with the afro, Chad Danforth, stood up quickly, knocking over Troy Bolton's books,
"So that means you are Andrew Montez's daughter?" She shook her head,
"Yes, my mom is a designer-" Sharpay cut in,
"Not just a designer, she most amazing fashion designer ever! She is my fashion idol." Then the girl spoke again,
"And my father used to play basketball-" Troy jumped up quickly, knocking over Sharpay's open water bottle, not paying attention where the water spilled
"He used to play for the Lakers! He is an MVP, a legend!"
A scream filled the room, the water had poured in the lap of Kelsi Neilson. The liquid made it look as if she had peed in her pants. The class wasn't sure if they should laugh or not. So, everyone stayed mute.
"We all need to calm down here. Miss Neilson: clean yourself up. Bolton, Evans, and Danforth: sit down. Gabriella, you can sit next to Troy. I'm sure that he will be friendly enough. And sorry, dear, the desk is broken but we can get you a new one tomorrow,"
"It's fine, Ms. Darbus. I don't need special treatment or anything," Her voice was soft and calm, shocked by the madness that she had caused in the classroom.
Troy quickly cleaned off a desk for the new girl, staring at her intently. He had forgotten about his damp girlfriend and wanted to get to know this mysterious, almost famous, teen.
"TROY!" Kelsi shouted, trying to grasp his attention. He was knocked out of his trance and handed her a handkerchief from his bag. He allowed her to wipe herself off, not wanting to stroke her crotch.
Gabriella Montez picked up her bag quietly and sat in the back of the room at the broken desk next to Troy Bolton. Kelsi smirked slightly. Gabriella may be cool now but the school was still on her side. Everyone would choose alway-popular Kelsi over mysterious Gabriella.
"Thank you Miss Montez, now let's get started." Kelsi rolled her green eyes at the fact that everyone was staring at her. Kelsi was slightly jealous, but played it off as annoyance,
"Does anyone know the answer?" No one raised their hand. It's the first day of school and, at East High, answering a question of the first day of school doomed you as a nerd- and status was important in the halls of the school, "Yes, Miss Montez?"
"Doesn't that line come from Much Ado about Nothing by Shakespeare?" Miss Darbus seemed impressed.
"Correct!" Kelsi continued wiping her jeans and whispered "nerd" to everyone around her and the few snickered too. Then her green eyes glanced at her boyfriend to see if he was laughing only to notice something. Troy was smiling at the girl and agreeing that he would show her around. Kelsi frowned at him, shaking her head in disagreement and whispered,
"Why are you staring at her?" He blinked a few times and smiled at Kelsi, brightening his ocean blue eyes.
He didn't have time to answer as the two heard the bell ring twice. He grabbed onto his girlfriend and led her out of the room, searching for the cool new girl.
Then someone bumped into Kelsi. The green-eyed beauty looked over to see Gabriella Montez with a map in her hands, "Excuse you." She smiled slightly and shrugged her shoulders,
"Oh I'm sorry. I was lost and wondering." She walked a few steps, Jimmy Chu heels grabbing everyone attention as they clicked quietly. They noticed as her flawless brown hair flipped as she turned around,
"Are you the one that said that you love my mom's designs?" She nodded toward Sharpay and the blonde shook her head quickly, feeling her heart beat a bit quicker.
"Yeah, I totally love them!" Gabriella half-smiled and blushed a bit. She was trying to fit in without using her parents. However, she felt like this was an exception to her goal.
"Well- I don't normally do this but, uh, my mom is having some designs sent over and some people from Gucci and Saks are coming," She was stuttering hoping she didn't seem a spoiled child, "so I was wondering if you'd like to come. I mean I have no friends here and I am allowed to bring one person. It's weird and we don't really know each other," Chad jumped on her, nearly giving the poor girl a heart attack. He was grasping her like they were the best of friends
"Dude! If you introduce me to your dad, we can be your best friends," She took a step back and realized that she was going to have a really hard time finding true friends,
"Everyone is the same around the country," She muttered under her breath, "You want to be my parents' friends. Listen, I've got to find my classes." She wasn't malicious in her comment rather stating the harsh truth. The girl was shy and trying to be an individual, not just a girl with cool parents. Troy stepped forward, hair falling slightly in his face,
"Hey; can I see your schedule?" She pulled a sheet out of her hand and handed it to him. The sheet was a white carbon-copy with a light Wildcat in the background,
"Ok, you have homeroom with all of us, obviously. Right now is free period, basically it is a period where anyone can do whatever the hell they want. You have AP calculus with Sharpay. You have AP music and theory with Sharpay and me. You have AP English with me; I'm Troy Bolton, by the way. You have gym with Chad. You have art with Kelsi and Sharpay, you have Spanish with Sharpay and you have chemistry with me. And lunch with Sharpay and me. Oh that's cool; we get to eat lunch together. I'll save you a seat." As he trailed off Kelsi spoke quickly trying to get a word in,
"Guys," Gabriella cut her off slowly,
"You know, you can't really notice the stain on your pants. Your jeans are a medium dark wash with thick fabric. It should be dried by the end of second period. If it bothers you, my mother decided that I needed a double locker with a random closet. My clothes might be a bit small for you but-" Kelsi gasped, shocked that the girl insinuated that she was fat,
"Thanks, but no thanks." Gabriella smiled, showing that she was actually trying to be sincere. Kelsi convinced herself that Gabriella was out to get her when it was actually a reverse situation. Kelsi wanted to take the new girl down, and she had only known her for an hour.
"Are we like the best friends ever?" Chad Danforth put an arm around her shoulder and laughed, "And not because your dad is cool," She laughed,
"Sure Chad, I am still not letting you meet my dad yet." Chad laughed and shoved her slightly, acting as if they were brother and sister already,
"Keep your doors locked, Montez. I am breaking in." Chad chimed in. She flipped her hair and he finished, "It's not cool that Shar gets to meet your mom and I can't meet your daddy." She laughed
"I've never actually made real friends before. Is this how real friends treat each other?" Kelsi giggled and insulted the rich girl,
"Obviously you've never made friends, look at you." Troy glared at his girlfriend and mouthed 'what's your problem?' and spoke to the new girl.
"No, that's just Chad. Why haven't you made friends?" She shrugged,
"I've never gone to a public school and usually people are threatened by me or only talk to me for who my parents are, so I never made friends." Sharpay spoke with a giggle,
"That is so sad; you can hang with us if you want. Chad isn't that weird when you get to know him." Troy added,
"Yes he is." Chad slapped his friend's head and pretended to be offended. She smiled,
"I like weird. I think. Plus you seem- funny?" Chad boasted,
"I have been awarded class clown since kindergarten." She giggled,
"Ah, a jokester? What about you three? Any dominating traits I need to know about?" Gabriella noticed that unlike all of her other schools, she was actually trying to start relationships and friendships. Her parents had told her that she was stuck here until graduation. So, she figured that she needed friends. So, these people seemed, ok. Even though she had mentioned her parents to them, it wasn't the only thing they were focused on. Sharpay piped up,
"I'm Sharpay. I love shopping and shoes. Yeah, according to Chad, I am the school drama queen. But I am nice, I promise. Unless you are a bitch, then you should sleep with one eye open," Gabriella was slightly scared, "but you seem ok." She let out a breath and grinned.
"I am Troy, the basketball captain. Hottest guy of the year award since-" Chad cut him off quickly,
"Not true," Troy changed his sentence,
"I'm Troy Bolton. I'm the basketball captain and more attractive then Chad Danforth." Then Kelsi stepped forward, threatening the new girl with her proximity to her face. Gabriella was actually a bit afraid of the girl.
"I'm Kelsi, Troy's girlfriend. The only girl he is interested in. More importantly, I am the leader of the pack. The Queen Bee of East High. No one messes with me." She smirked and stepped back quickly,
"I'm Gabriella. Just Gabriella." Sharpay spoke, complimenting their new friend.
"You are so cool." She giggled,
"Actually it's a bit toasty." Everyone, minus the jealous green-eyed queen, laughed and Chad casually hit Gabriella on the shoulder,
"Dude, you are like the little sister I never had." She tilted her head to the side,
"Dude, you are like the big brother from another mother," Chad grinned and his brown eyes brightened,
"So, that means-" Gabriella cut him off, knowing what he was going to say,
"No." Troy spoke,
"Ignore him, he's such a moron," Gabriella flirted, quickly stopping herself knowing that he had a girlfriend to be faithful to.
An extremely bitchy and pissed off girlfriend.
"You can't either. Sharpay is the only one going. My mother said one invite," She added, "But, when you boys prove that you are actually loyally my friend, you can come over."
Of course the girl was joking with them, as if they were old friends. She had never used her parents' famous status as joke. But, in front of these people, she felt extremely comfortable.
"I'll hold you to that, Montez." Chad said, pulling his arm off her shoulder, "Because we are going to be friends for a really long time."
Kelsi groaned. This girl better not stick around. No one could replace Kelsi. She was the most popular. She was Troy Bolton's love interst. No one could take that title, not even Little Miss Montez.
Right?
So that's a new first chapter. It isn't in Kelsi's point of view anymore. She is still sort of dark. For those of you who read 'Bridesmaid' before I have rewritten it, it will have alot of changes. For example: Chad, Sharpay, Troy, Gabriella and Kelsi are the main characters. No one else.
Also, it will be longer. Probably a story with about 8-10 chapters. Hopefully. Don't expect updates everyday but hopefully once a week. Or once every two weeks.
If you hate the re-write, tell me and I will quit. Don't want to waste anyone's time. REVIEW!
-xoxo-
