MLP: Revamped Equestria girls

chapter 1

This new story was made by both me and Element-Overlord. So remember to give equal credit to both of us. Hope you like it.

Also, when the word 'sans' is used, it means except. So if you see that word, just think of except and it will make sense. I didn't put it, Element-Overlord did, but it still works. So no complaints.

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It was a clear day out as Twilight and her friends walked through the Crystal Empire. They were her for Twilight's first princess summit since her coronation.

"Twilight darling, what's wrong?" asked Rarity who noticed her friend was walking rather slow.

"I'm just nervous. I mean, what if I mess up? What I say the wrong things?" asked Twilight who began to go into one of her worry too much modes.

"Pinkie." called Rainbow.

"I'm on it." called Pinkie who got in Twilight's face. "SNAP OUT OF IT!" screamed Pinkie who picked up Twilight and shook her around. "This is no time to be getting cold feet! You need to get your head in the game! Do you understand!" by this point, Twilight was nothing but a purple blur.

"Um, Pinkie? I think Twilight understands." whispered Fluttershy.

Pinkie stopped her shaking and saw how much Twilight's eyes were spinning. "Oops, sorry." chuckled Pinkie putting Twilight down.

"Twilight, you shouldn't worry so much about that now." Spike said as he walked to them. "After all you have us, your friends, to help you. And remember that Celestia can teach you how to be a princess alongside Luna and Cadence."

"Spikey-wikey, where were you?" Asked Rarity in joy of seeing the small dragon.

"Oh Rarity, I was just avoiding the fans that are after my heart. Heheh." Grinned the dragon in embarrassment remembering how a few minutes ago some fanmares tried to "reward" him, and while he didn't mind, he knew that his mother wouldn't take it lightly, and he narrowly managed to avoid them. "But don't worry m'lady, the only one for me is-"

"THERE HE IS! OUR HERO!" Screamed a crystal pony that was a fan of Spike as she and other mares went to the dragon, who panicked and hid behind Twilight who sighed before using her magic to stop the mares.

"Now girls, Spike is helping us with the princess summit so if you please would calm down and disperse, we need to get going." The tone in the alicorn's voice was that of a princess that made the fans disperse, although some were moaning about how unfair it was.

"Thanks Twi, I owe you a lot!" Grinned Spike in a cute way as Twilight blushed in embarrassment. While she knew that Spike was just thanking her like a friend, she was sometimes caught off guard by how cute he could be. "Twi?"

"Y-you're welcome..."

The group soon made it to the royal housing of the princess an prince. Or to be more specific, Twilight's sister-in-law and brother.

"Sunshine, sunshine, ladybugs awake. Clap your hooves and do a little shake." chanted the two sisters who chuckled at their habit and embraced each other in a hug.

"So, how's the empire been working out for ya?" asked Spike to Shining Armor.

"Been pretty good. What about you? I could hear all those fans of yours from the window." smirked Shining.

"Well like I mentioned earlier. My heart belongs solely to-" Spike was interrupted from the royal horns as Celestia and Luna walked in and smiled at their guests.

"Hey mom, hey aunty." waved Spike to his mom and aunt.

"Hello Spike, and hello to all of you as well." greeted Celestia.

"Greetings Princess Celestia." bowed Twilight with her friends in a show of respect.

"No need for that. Thou are a princess as well." replied Luna.

"Sorry." apologized Twilight who let out a yawn.

"It would seem you all are tired." guessed Celestia as the others stretched and rubbed their eyes to wake up. "Perhaps a night of rest is what you all need." Celestia recommended.

"Sounds good to me." replied Applejack as a royal guard lead them to the room they would be staying at.

While they were walking into their bedrooms, the mane 6 sans Twilight got curious about how Spike could be so casual with the princesses since that was the first time that the baby dragon called Celestia "Mom".

"So Spike," Rainbow began, "How is it that you can be so casual with Princess Celestia to the point of calling her "mom"? I thought that Twilight was your mother since she hatched you and all?" Her question made Twilight get a double take at the mother part while the others were curious until Spike answered with a small blush on his face;

"Well Rainbow, the reason is that while Twilight hatched me, it was Celestia that raised me as her very own child and eventually I saw her as a mother as she saw me as her child. But because of her royal duties I have to call her by her title in public but I can call her mother just as I can call Luna aunty when we're alone or with close people, see?" Spike's answer made sense to the girls, but it seemed that someone else was interested as well.

"Um..Spike?" Fluttershy muttered loud enough to hear, "So...how do you see us as then?" Twilight stopped and looked at Spike questionably, making the young dragon nervous.

"Well...you're my closest friends and almost like my sisters...but I love you more than that." Spike noticed the blushes around the mare's faces. "B-but not like that, I mean, you're all very beautiful but I'm still a baby dragon and...Oh dear mom, I need help..." Spike blushed in embarrassment as the mares looked at him in surprise, or awe.

"W-well, thank you Spikey-Wikey...that was very...umm...mature..." Rarity couldn't help but blush even more upon seeing how cute Spike was.

"Y-yeah, it w-was good and all Spike...aww shucks..." Applejack had to calm herself down while Fluttershy was this near of fainting as Rainbow looked away with an atomic blush and Pinkie giggled loving how cute the situation was.

"S-spike..." Twilight began with her blush, but then one of the guards (that had been secretly enjoying the show) interrupted.

"Princess Twilight, we arrived to your bedrooms."

"O-OK then, see you all tomorrow..." And with that, everyone went to their rooms but there was still a blush from what spike told them.

Later that night, a royal guard was busy inspecting the halls for intruders, but was suddenly knocked out form behind. The figure had a cloak on them to keep them hidden and began to walk down the hall and towards Twilight's room.

He carefully opened the door and saw the princess and dragon sleeping. He spotted her crown on the night stand and cautiously walked around Spike and grabbed the crown. He put it in the bag and soon put a fake one on the night stand. As he turned around to leave, he failed to notice how close he was to Spike and tripped, causing a loud noise that roused Twilight and Spike from their sleep.

"Hey, what are you doing with my crown?" demanded Twilight seeing the real one in his bag. Plus, she would be a fool if she thought the fake was the real one.

"Reclaiming what I deserve." replied the figure who took off running with Twilight and Spike in pursuit. The noises from their room had woken the others up. Seeing their friend chase down a stranger, they ran out of their rooms to help.

"STOP RIGHT THERE, THIEF!" Screamed Twilight as her shout alerted the guards and they quickly moved to catch the intruder, but he managed to jump over them and avoid their catches.

Seeing that Twilight teleported herself and Spike farther until they were in front of the figure as Rainbow and Fluttershy were nearing the figure while AJ got her rope ready, Rarity was about to use her magic to catch the thief and Pinkie got out her party cannon.

"Impressive..." Began speaking the figure in a tone filled with interest before it became dark, "...but meaningless in the end." Finished as he teleported behind Twilight as she and the mane 6 collided with each other, ending in a mess with AJ's rope on Rainbow Dash and Pinkie's cannon had hit Rarity and said unicorn had a surprised Fluttershy in her magic grasp.

The figure looked at the mess he caused with interest before nearing a mirror, but by doing that he never saw Spike nearing and trapping himself around his hoofs, making the figure enter in panic as he tried to shake the dragon off, which he soon did but Spike managed to use his fire to burn the figure's cloak, exposing the thief for everyone to see and surprising many by the figure's form.

The figure appeared to be a stallion with a white coat and brown mane. But what stunned them was his face. Half of his face was metallic that included a glowing red eye on the left side of his face. He glared at them all and beat a hasty retreat into the mirror with the saddle bag.

"He got away." Spike punched the floor in frustration at his escape.

"It's alright. Jumping in after him would have been too dangerous." came another voice. They turned to see Celestia walk in with Luna and Cadence with her.

"What do you mean?" asked Twilight.

"This is the Crystal Mirror. Once every 30 moons, it opens to another world on the other side." replied Luna.

"So, the thief just went into another dimension?" asked Twilight.

"We believe so, but not much is known about this mirror. That is why it would have been too dangerous if you jumped in without a plan." replied Celestia.

Spike rubbed the back of his head as he felt like doing that exact same thing if his mom hadn't shown up.

"So, what do we do?" asked Rainbow.

"Simple, now we rest, but in the morning we'll take care of this thief." The tone in Celestia's voice left not room for argument and so the mane 6 and Spike, despite their anxiety, went to rest leaving the princesses alone.

"Dear sister, do you know who that stallion was, don't you?" Luna asked to Celestia who nodded with a serious look making the younger princess get worried. "Who was he then?"

"He was someone I had failed to help when he needed help the most and now I fear that his grudge made him became what we saw..." Finished the sun princess with a sad look on her face.

"Wait, auntie. Don't tell me that he was possibly-" Upon seeing Celestia's look, Cadence looked very shocked. "Oh dear, how are we gonna tell this to the girls? Or even my Shining Armor, after all they had been friends once..."

"We'll wait until tomorrow, then everything will be revealed." Finished Celestia before going for her room followed by Cadence while Luna went to see the night.

Daybreak came faster than anypony expected. Twilight and the others arrived at the Crystal Mirror with the other three princess'. Shining stood by his wife's side as Celestia stepped forward.

"That thief from last name was a rouge pony that me and Luna banished years ago. His name was Danger Beast." began Celestia.

"He was a power hungry pony who use to be second in command before he retired. After that, he wormed his way into my counsel and tried to pass extremely strict laws that would grant him more power. I was against it and voted him out of my counsel. Angered, he turned towards the Crystal Empire and managed to get King Sombra into the position he was in and tried a coup d'eat, before being banished into the ice. I then decided that Danger Beast couldn't be trusted, and I banished him form Equestria." finished Celestia.

"But, what was up with the weird stuff on his face?" asked Rainbow referring to the tech.

"I believe he managed to find another world and is using its resources to live longer in an attempt to rule over this land. I stopped you from going as we don't know that much about the world. That is why I've decided to send in an armed squadron of royal guards to find him."

"But it was my crown that was stolen. I need to make up for my mistake and get it back." replied a determined Twilight.

"I am sorry, but the answer is no." Celestia left no room for argument as they began to leave the room. That's when Spike did something that shocked everypony.

"Then I'll be going..." Spike's declaration impacted everyone, especially his mother.

"W-what!? S-spike...but why?!" Twilight screamed in shock, but no one could blame her since everyone in the room never expected the young dragon to declare that.

"Spike," Began Celestia in a serious tone that made Spike nervous, for she only used that tone when he did a mistake that didn't displease the princess, but instead displeased his mother. "Why would you even say that? After all you're still a baby dragon, and Danger Beast is a full grown stallion that could somehow get stronger. And in your current state it would be very dangerous to even think of going after him!"

"I know that...but..." Spike said before his face went serious, "...but that Danger Freak or whatever he's called stole something that is very precious for my friend, and that's why I must recover it at all cost! God knows what he would do with such power on the alternate world!"

Everyone was taken a back at Spike's answer, but then Twilight found her voice to say her opinion.

"Spike,, I understand how you feel, but even so you shouldn't risk yourself for that. After all that's my crown, and I must recover it myself instead of letting one of my friends risk his own life for it. If I let you go and you end harmed, how could I ever forgive myself..." At this point tears were going out of her eyes as Spike stood silent before hugging her.

"But Twilight...mom...and everyone else...how can I call myself your friend if I let some thief steal something that precious to you?" His sincere answer made them fall silent before they all hugged each other for some time.

"Perhaps, he doesn't need to go alone." suggested Cadence.

"What do you mean?" asked Spike.

"What if all seven of you went together? You'd have strength in numbers, plus you would be able to watch out for one another. I know it's dangerous, but you all have faced dangerous foes like him, and still come out stronger than ever." replied Cadence.

All was silent as they turned towards Celestia to hear her final say on the matter. Chances are she would said no, but she surprised them like her son with her answer.

"Alright. You may go, but you must pack everything that you will need for this trip. And you must be fast. If you don't retrieve it in three days and go through the portal, it will be closed for another thirty moons." replied Celestia.

"Don't worry mom, we'll get the crown back, and definitely kick some flank." promised Spike.

All of them smiled at Spike's determination and headed back to their rooms to get ready for the adventure that would surely change their lives.

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Well, me and my fellow author/friend hope you like this version.