Sup all, just trying out a new Jaypaw project. I am currently rereading The Power of Two and a Half,- I mean Power of Three, but there are some bits that I feel even other Jayfeather/paw lovers like myself would cringe at. In this series of chapters, I will take crucial moments in the story and edit them so Jaypaw ends up staying a warrior's apprentice and for those who haven't read the books in a while, I'll try to fill you in on what has happened and what chapters I would leave alone.

Firstly, I don't feel like anything needs changing up to chapter nine. In The Sight, the whole fox thing is alright and even getting Brightheart as a mentor is fine.

The only minor thing I would change is in chapter 8 when Brightheart is made Jaypaw's mentor, the first thing she has him do in the actual book is a bunch of rubbish tasks around the camp. Forget that! I would just cut out the whole part in camp and have her instantly take him around the borders. They can still run into the fox cub, but the fight sequenece Erin Hunter wrote is completely fine.

The only big part that I hated and thought was out of character was when Jaypaw leaves on his own, falls in the gorge and has to be saved by Crowfeather. Granted, I know this is an important part that displays the CrowxLeaf to the apprentice, but its not worth ruining Jaypaw's apprenticeship for.

Time to rewrite chapter 9. ERIN HUNTER OWNS WARRIORS.

The earth was cold beneath his pads suggesting the sky was dim and cloudy. The day was still young but that didn't stop his Clanmates from busily working around the camp. The scents and voices of his Clanmates raveled around him but he wasn't interested in what they had to say. All he wanted to do was be out of the camp and explore the woods like a real apprentice.

There was no sign of Brightheart. She had most likely forgotten about her blind and grumpy apprentice and gone on one of the morning patrols already. Just thinking about her leaving without him made him grit his teeth with fury. I'll show her I'm not useless!

He padded hastily across the clearing towards the tunnel leading out to where the cats made dirt. He would explore the territory on his own! But he had only made it about half way when a voice from behind him stopped him dead in his tracks.

"Jaypaw, where are you going in such a hurry?"

It was his mentor; her curious mew giving away no sign that she suspected he had been trying to escape. "I was just going to make dirt," he lied. She hasn't forgotten about me, but that still doesn't mean I like her.

Brightheart's tail whisked through the air as she turned back around. "That's all fine. Meet me by the camp entrance when you're done. We're going out for some battle training and I already asked if Longtail would join. He's coming with us." She padded off towards the thorn tunnel.

Really? Jaypaw could barely believe his ears, he the useless blind apprentice was going to be battle training on his second day as an apprentice! His heart soared for a moment, but he couldn't help but feel a little uneasy. The other apprentices would be at the training hallow too, and he pictured the situation in his head; three cats, two blind and one with only one eye, walking in on the real warriors and apprentices. His fur grew hot with embarrassment as he imagined what the others would think of him.

He spun around, completely forgetting that Brightheart thought he was making dirt, and padded after her. He didn't want to waste a single heartbeat. This was what he wanted more than anything else in his life- to be a warrior and hunt and fight for his Clan. He would do whatever it took to show his Clanmates that he didn't need their pity or concern.

"You're already done making dirt? That was quick." His mentor greeted him as he approached the camp entrance, her mew light with surprise. He could scent Longtail standing beside her, his pelt warm with excitement and his lean muscled forepaws flexing his claws against the dirt. Jaypaw wasn't surprised that he was eager to leave the camp. The blind elder was still warrior strong and being confined to the elder's den must be very hard for him.

"Brightheart was telling me about your run in with the fox yesterday," Longtail mewed as Jaypaw joined them. "After your close encounter, she felt it became most important that you learn to defend yourself as soon as possible. Other apprentice duties like cleaning up after us elders is important too, but I think we can make a few exceptions for you." The elder stopped for a moment, and Jaypaw could picture him looking fondly at Brightheart. "You are lucky to have her as a mentor; I haven't seen her so determined in all the moons I've known her."

Jaypaw's eyes switched to his mentor. Even without seeing her he could detect the energy radiating from her pelt as though she were preparing to climb a huge mountain. He also caught a flicker of a thought rushing through her mind of huge teeth and thick matted fur, but he couldn't grasp it.

"Longtail, you remember back in the old forest when I was injured?" she mewed, resting her tail on Jaypaw's shoulder and pulling him slightly closer to her. "Bluestar doubted I would ever be a warrior because I had only one good eye and ear."

Longtail grunted in agreement. "I do. Every cat in ThunderClan was shocked when you made a full recovery and still fought for your Clanmates as hard as any cat- especially in the battle against BloodClan. I only wish my apprentice, Swiftpaw had survived as well."

There was a moment of silence between the two older cats. Jaypaw realized Swiftpaw must have also been attacked by the same dogs that ruined Brightheart's face. He had heard the stories of Tigerstar and the terrible plot he had devised to wipe out ThunderClan, but Fireheart and Bluestar had foiled his plan at the cost of Bluestar's last life.

"I mourned Swiftpaw as much as any cat," the she cat agreed. "So I fought twice as hard for the both of us. Cloudtail helped me adjust to seeing with only one eye but even Bluestar doubted me when she gave me my warriors name Lostface. Fortunately, Firestar fixed it as soon as he became leader. "

Lostface? That is a terrible warrior's name! Jaypaw had heard stories about the Clan leader who came before Firestar, all of them good, and he was surprised that such a noble leader would give such a cruel name to an injured warrior. And for the first time that day, he felt a flicker of pity for the she cat. Just like him, she had to prove herself to be just as much a member of the Clan as any cat.

"But enough sitting around chatting like a flock of songbirds, we have a lot to do today!" Brightheart sprung to her paws as limberly as an apprentice herself. "First place is the training hallow, and if we you aren't too tired after that we can explore the WindClan border."

Yes! Jaypaw leaped for joy. This would be his first time out of camp since the run in with the fox, but the next time he ran into one of those beasts, he would have some fighting skills! "I can't wait to get started!" His brother was already out on a border patrol, and maybe they would run into each other along the way.

Jaypaw padded into the sandy hallow behind his mentor, Longtail just a few steps behind. On the short trip there, the older tom had said this was his first time visiting the training clearing since he never had an apprentice after moving to the lake.

"Hey look, it's Jaypaw and Brightheart!"

He could hear the excited mews of Poppypaw and Cinderpaw as he followed his mentor past some honeysuckle that grew in little tufts at his feet and made his way to the center of the clearing. He liked the feeling of the cool sand beneath his paws and couldn't help but flex out his claws and sink them into the grainy soil.

"Morning, Cloudtail, Thornclaw," Brightheart greeted the other mentors, the tiniest flicker of resentment escaping her mew as she greeted Thornclaw. She clearly hadn't forgiven him completely for doubting her abilities the previous day when he reminded her not to cross the ShadowClan border. Jaypaw carried himself a little higher, knowing his mentor would stick up for herself even though she had only one eye. "This is Jaypaw's first time to the training clearing."

"Hey, Jaypaw, we were just learning how to swipe while standing on her hind paws." Poppypaw was in front of him. He could hear the soft crunch of the sand beneath her paws so he could tell exactly where she was. "Cinderpaw and I could teach you how if you'd like."

A chuckle of amusement came from Cloudtail. "I think Brightheart and Longtail can introduce young Jaypaw to the world of fighting at their own pace," he mewed, ushering his apprentice back. Bu Jaypaw could feel overwhelming admiration flowing from the senior warrior's pelt for Brightheart. Clearly he was eager to train an apprentice together beside his mate for the first time.

"Okay! Good luck, Jaypaw!" Poppypaw mewed.

As the other apprentices returned to their training on the other side of the clearing, Brightheart padded up to him. "Jaypaw, Longtail and I were thinking on how we- or I should train you first, and I think we can start off by seeing what you can do and where your strengths are." She stepped back placing herself between him and Longtail who sat at the edge of the clearing, rustling the sand with paws he realized had to be much larger than his own. "I want you to try and get past me and reach Longtail."

Jaypaw's pelt stiffened. "How do you mean 'get past' you?" he questioned nervously. He quickly tried to process his surroundings, measuring the distance between himself and his target by scent and sound alone. Let the embarrassing failures commence!

His mentor's gaze warmed his pelt and for the first time that day, he detected the smallest glimmer of agitation. "You try to run past me while I'm trying to block you. Simple as that. And we can work out what to do from there."

Jaypaw lowered himself into a crouch, focusing his attention on his mentor. She was twice his size, and had years of warriors training. How was this a fair assessment for him? He swallowed down his worry, trying to convince himself that he knew what he was doing. He would run to her side and at the last moment turn and dart the other way- that was his plan.

"Come at me when you are ready," she mewed.

Jaypaw pricked his ears and inhaled a quick breath. Just remember all those games of catch-the-mouse with Lionkit and Hollykit. He told himself, closing his eyes. He lunged faster than he intended and his hind paws slipped on the sandy ground. Instead of darting forward, he stumbled and fell forward onto his chin. "Fox-dung!" he cursed, spitting sand out of his mouth.

"That wasn't a bad first try," Brightheart suggested, trying to sound helpful, but he heard the note of disappointment in her mew. He had failed his first test as an apprentice warrior.

"It was a mouse-brained idea anyway," he snorted angrily, more frustrated with himself than anything else. He pushed himself to his paws. "Making me try and get past you, that's not fair at all. You are so much bigger and faster than me."

Brightheart's tone dropped in as she reprimanded him. "It's a rather standard method for assessing new apprentices," she growled.

"Well, I'm not a standard apprentice am I?" he snarled back. "I'm blind remember? The cat nobody expected to even become a warrior cat's apprentice!" He knew he was being harsh, and he regretted saying it as soon as the words escaped his lips. Brightheart hadn't asked to be his mentor, and he was painfully aware of the other apprentices on the other side of the clearing looking at them.

His mentor's mew dropped to a low hiss. "I'm sorry that you feel that way, Jaypaw, but Firestar trusted that if any cat would be able to train you to fight and hunt for your Clanmates, it would be me. So go ahead and complain if you want, but that won't make you a warrior."

Jaypaw hung his head, hating how true his mentor's words were. Maybe he should just move in with Longtail and Mousefur. The first ever apprentice to move to the elder's den in all the Clans history- that's what he would forever be remembered as.

"So when you are ready, we can try again."

Brightheart stepped back into her position between him and Longtail, her stern glare on his pelt filing him with guilt. He shook the sand from his pelt and prepared his strategy again. It didn't feel good to be upset and though he had initially detested Firestar's choice in his mentor, he knew Brightheart only wanted what was best for him. He lowered himself into a crouch again.

"Come at me."

He lunged forward, this time making sure he wasn't so quick that his paws slipped and darted towards his mentor. He could feel her presence bearing down on him and skidded, kicking up sand as he prepared to dodge.

"Ow!" his mentor cried in surprise and her attempt to block him missed entirely as she stumbled in the direction he had started off in but he was already slipping past her other side.

"Well done, Jaypaw!" Longtail cheered, as he stopped in front of him. "You did it on your second try, that's really good!"

Jaypaw basked in the praise and pricked his ears to listen to his mentor. She padded over to join them after a few moments, her pelt thick with surprise, and he couldn't help but hold himself a little higher. "Did you intend to chuck a bunch of sand in my face when you stopped?" she asked him gruffly.

"Oh that's what happened?" Jaypaw hadn't even thought about that. "Sorry, it was an accident."

"It was a brilliant accident!" Longtail exclaimed, getting up from his spot beneath the ferns and padding over. "Blinding your opponent so they are forced to fight on the same terms as you could work in a real fight. Sure it's a bit dirty, but in a desperate situation I see nothing wrong with it."

Brightheart grunted in agreement. "I think that was a fine second go at your assessment. You are definitely quick on your paws, quicker than I expected, and since you have a light build, you can make turns on a hair. After I get the sand out of my eye, we can practice some basic paw swipes and dodges. You are showing promise."

Jaypaw puffed out his chest in triumph. He had his doubts coming into the clearing, but if the rest of his training tuned out this well, he would have nothing to fear. Maybe blind cats can be warriors too?

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