This is my first fic so please review!!!!!!!!!!!!! And tell me how I can
improve.
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The journey of Frodo and Sam had been long, but with Gollom it had taken less time to get to Mordor. One night while Frodo was asleep he heard a noise. Before opening his eyes he grabbed his sword, then with the swiftest of ease was on his feet. He only stood about 2 seconds on his feet, because what he saw had made him faint. It was Sam. He was gone and in his place Gollom.
~~~~~FRODO~~~~~
I know what has happened here. I should have listened to Sam. Gollom has killed Sam, my only friend. Now I must kill Gollom.
~~~~~GOLLOM~~~~~
ohhh! Sh*t, he found out before we could kill him, now he will never trust us, he may even kill me. Ahhhh!!!
~~~~~STORY TELLER~~~~
SHUT UP GOLLOM YOU ARE GIVING ME A HEADACHE!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Without any hesitation Frodo sliced off Gollom's head. He knew that Gollom was too fat to defend himself. Frodo sat there wailing for about 2 hours. He felt that he couldn't make this journey without Sam. Frodo had gone through too much pain. He was about to give up and throw the ring away when.
Disclaimer: I don't own any of the characters or cities places thingies, whatever u wanna call them. (I only own the idea of my story. If I didn't how could this be called my story?)
Ok I know u read better stories, so for me to improve please review me.
.
~~~~~~~********~~~~~~~~*********~~~~~~~~*********~~~~~~~~******~~~
The journey of Frodo and Sam had been long, but with Gollom it had taken less time to get to Mordor. One night while Frodo was asleep he heard a noise. Before opening his eyes he grabbed his sword, then with the swiftest of ease was on his feet. He only stood about 2 seconds on his feet, because what he saw had made him faint. It was Sam. He was gone and in his place Gollom.
~~~~~FRODO~~~~~
I know what has happened here. I should have listened to Sam. Gollom has killed Sam, my only friend. Now I must kill Gollom.
~~~~~GOLLOM~~~~~
ohhh! Sh*t, he found out before we could kill him, now he will never trust us, he may even kill me. Ahhhh!!!
~~~~~STORY TELLER~~~~
SHUT UP GOLLOM YOU ARE GIVING ME A HEADACHE!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Without any hesitation Frodo sliced off Gollom's head. He knew that Gollom was too fat to defend himself. Frodo sat there wailing for about 2 hours. He felt that he couldn't make this journey without Sam. Frodo had gone through too much pain. He was about to give up and throw the ring away when.
Disclaimer: I don't own any of the characters or cities places thingies, whatever u wanna call them. (I only own the idea of my story. If I didn't how could this be called my story?)
Ok I know u read better stories, so for me to improve please review me.
.