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As I made my way through the dark halls, a cold but familiar feeling overcame me as if I was being watched. I turned the corner and jolted to a stop as an unfamiliar but handsome face came into view. His face was hard and looked as if it has been through more pain than I could have imagined. "What are you doing out", I wasn't sure how to respond as I too didn't have an answer, where was I and where are my family? I took a step closer and sternly replied "that is a good answer, where am I and where are my fellow abnegation people?" The left side of his lip cocked up into a grin "welcome to the dauntless Tris, my name is four."
Faint memories came rushing to my head; my mother and father, Caleb, abnegation, the choosing ceremony and … my blood dripping into the burnt rocks of the dauntless. It was all coming to me, the looks of betrayal and shock from my fellow abnegation family, running onto the train and jumping off the roof, although I can't remember how I got into this hall, in fact I can't remember anything after jumping into the dauntless headquarters. "Are you coming stiff I really don't have all day? And we really need to get you a new pair of clothes " I followed not knowing where I was going .But something about four made me feel safe.