THIS STORY IS A BIT CRITICAL, DO NOT READ IF YOU DO NOT ACCEPT CRITISISM VERY WELL. OR ELSE... *GESTURES TO DOOR*
This is just a quick list of things other people have already hit on- just to get them out of the way.
* means my commentary
-"I have big crystal-blue orbs."
*What's wrong with the word "eyes." Did it go out of style and I'm not aware? Or was it removed from the dictionary?
-"hello. my name is hana geraldo and my mother hates me." or "Hello. My Name Is Hana Geraldo And My Mother Hates Me."
*I think we have already learned about capitalization in like, second grade.
-"OMGS! My like BFF Juliet was like so like cool! Like OMFG! She is so hawt! She's so gr8! HOLD ON BRB!"
* •-• STOP USING TEXTING LINGO AND SPEAK REALY FREAKING ENGLISH! (Sheesh)
-"I have beautiful, silky blonde hair and orbs the color of the most blue ocean. I looked at my amazing, hot and affectionate boyfriend Hayden. WHY AM I SO UGLY?! WHY DOES MY LIFE SUCK?!"
*This girl needs a life. (and a self-esteem counselor.)
-"...and then I passed out."
*•-• Why? (Sigh)
-"My name is Wave Aqua Turquoise Ocean Sea Jackson. I wonder who my godly parent is?"
*Just shut the freak up.
-"i was like omg so when I wuz like going over like her like howse and her hawt bwotha was like u so hawt. i was like so wedy to like make out wif hhim. like totes."
*(-.-) *whispers* please. get a life.
-"My Name is Wave Jackson and I love the water as well as reading! My parents are Percy and Annabeth Jackson! Time to go to CHB and meet Auntie Piper, Uncle Jason, Auntie Hazel, Uncle Frank, Uncle Leo, Auntie Calypso, ..."
*SHHHHHHH! I DON'T CARE!
-"My name is Omega. I used to be Percy Jackson. But then my girlfriend Annabeth dumped me for my brother, John Paul Jones Alexander Luke Matthew Smith**. I am now in Chaos' Army with Luke Castellan, Selina & Bekendorf, Zoe, and every other hero that ever died in the Percy Jackson series."
*SERIOUSLYYYYYYYY? 1) Why Omega? Why not change your name to George or JoJo or something? 2) Why would Annabeth dump you like trash for your brother...it's not like you two fell into Tartarus TOGETHER or anything... 3) ** I have seriously seen names like that. 4) Why Chaos? Can't you join the US Maries or something (A/N: More on that later...)... 4) Why are his friends always dead? Can't he meet a new friend name Fred who is just another ordinary dude? GOSH!
Some Quick Ones I Hate Before We Go Any Furtur: (See what I did there- look back at clichés #2 & 3)
-High school stories are never dealt with correctly.
)The author wastes time on Pointless schedule comparisons
)Don't fear! Every single f**king High School conveniently teaches Greek and Architecture!
)There are these clichés...
HAHA kidding. You'll all have to wait for Chapter 3: Worst High School Fanfics Clichés!
WELLLLLL That's All for now!
Comment if you think I missed anything. I will be posting chapters by Characters. Ex. Worst Annabeth Clichés (Which is actually Chapter 2...)
ANYWAYYYYYYSSSSSSS...
BYEEE!
~Elizabeth
(Sorry for the intentional Cliffie)