Please, please review - being new to this site I'm not sure if anything I write is worth reading... criticism is welcome.
Qui-Gon Jinn is
The perfect Jedi shroud in light,
With no temptation from the night,
...The father who looks into his son's eyes, a feature still recognizable despite the fact that the rest of the boy's face is...
He walks in fame and bathes in glory,
Though modestly he shares his story,
...contorted in regret, grief, pain...
And from the goodness doesn't stray,
Confident the Force will stay,
...sharing last words with the man who has been his only son...
But puts his faith in peace and such,
Hoping for a future just,
...saying goodbye...
Enduring pain and facing death,
Selfless man 'till his last breath.
Obi-Wan Kenobi is
The perfect Jedi shroud in light,
With no temptation from the night,
...The father who looks into his son's eyes, a feature still recognizable despite the fact that the rest of the boy's face is...
He walks in fame and bathes in glory,
Though modestly he shares his story,
...contorted in regret, grief, pain...
And from the goodness doesn't stray,
Confident the Force will stay,
...sharing last words with the man who has been his only son...
But puts his faith in peace and such,
Hoping for a future just,
...saying goodbye...
Enduring pain and facing death,
Selfless man 'till his last breath.
Anakin Skywalker is
The perfect Jedi shroud in light,
With no temptation from the night,
...The father who looks upon his son's eyes, a feature still recognizable despite the fact that the rest of the boy's face is...
He walks in fame and bathes in glory,
Though modestly he shares his story,
...contorted in regret, grief, pain...
And from the goodness doesn't stray,
Confident the Force will stay,
...sharing last words with the man who has been his only son...
But puts his faith in peace and such,
Hoping for a future just,
...saying goodbye...
Enduring pain and facing death,
Selfless man 'till his last breath.