This is my first chapter of my first story, so I know it might be bad so can you give me some constructive criticism? That would be a good help for the next chapter. Thanks!
Sam Puckett lay in her car, staring at the sky. Her beat up convertible was parked right in front of a river at least twenty miles from Seattle. The sky was filled with stars. The galaxy was huge but her problems seemed at least twenty times huger. It had all started this afternoon in the doctor's office. Usually, Sam avoided the doctor's office like the plague but she'd had the same old cold for the past month and a half.
Flashback
Sam's POV
I sit, scared to death. A box of tissues sits in my lap for my cold. It seemed pretty unimportant earlier this week. I get colds all the time, considering I live in my car all year round. But when I started coughing up blood earlier, I had decided to go the doctor's office. They'd taken a blood sample and then left me to wait in the waiting room for an hour.
"Ms. Puckett?" The nurse stands there, a permanent smile etched on her face. "Could you come with me?" I take a deep breath and follow her.
"Ms. Puckett, how are you feeling?" The doctor starts but I interrupt him.
"Just tell me. How bad is it?" He takes a deep breath and then…
He tells me.
Third Person POV
Tears welled up in her eyes. Sam had been a tough girl all her life but now she didn't care. It didn't matter any more what she had been.
Now, she had leukemia.