Epsilon : Chapter 1 : CAT 6's

by TsukiNoMeEyeOfTheMoon

This is a short-story that I made as a test as my first story. Please give me feedback. I wish to know what i can improve on.

Epsilon's pilot Zesiie Ferciles woke up at 4 AM to get dressed and do her morning exercises, but when she was heading out of her room, she thought to herself If my co-pilot is deadweight I'll be pissed. Better not be that yang fellow, piece of shit. "STRIKER EPSILON REPORT TO SHATTERDOME IMMEDIATELY" Zesiie didn't hesitate, she quickly ran by heading towards the bridge. There she met her new Co-Pilot... Yang Mori (No relationship whatsoever with Maka Mori) he was pumped to finally get deployed. When the marshal confirmed four CAT 6's where circling around the breach, Zesiie got suited up, and was waiting in the head of her Jaeger for the Co-Pilot... When the Co-Pilot came through he was pumped. "First drift's rough kid, stay in the drift. The drift is silence." Zesiie said to yang. "Right." Yang replied. "Larson, this is Pilot One, Ready for the big drop." Zesiie said. "Wait big dro-" Yang said as the Jaeger's head was transported and attached onto Striker Epsilon. "So, Bill how did it go with Samantha?" Zesiie asked through the radio. "The girl, she loved me, her boyfriend... not so much." Bill said. "You're gonna get your ass kicked dude." Zesiie commented. "I know, but a mans gotta do what a mans gotta do!" Bill said. "Men," Zesiie said. "Yang, you with me?" Zesiie asked, "Yeah, transports are hooked up." Yang said. Moments later Epsilon disengaged transports. "Water-tights sealed, ready to submerge." Zesiie said over the radio. "Marshal, their stopping." Said Bill. "Striker, their stopping... Hold your ground!" Marshal said. "Yes, sir!" Zesiie said making the Jaeger stop. "Larson, their movin- BRACE FOR IMPACT YANG!" Zesiie yelled as she quickly made the Jaeger dodge one of the Kaiju's attack then quickly countered with Sting Blades. "YANG! AIR-MISSLE OPS NOW!" Zesiie yelled as Yang screamed "AIR MISSLE OPS!" the rockets fired but all but two hit. Zesiie quickly finished off the first. Just as the third charged. "YANG! LET ME CONTROL IT!" Zesiie screamed as she controlled the Jaeger and quickly made it punch the CAT 6's face several times. After a good few punches Striker Epsilon ripped its head off and stabbed the second dead. The fourth and final one charged, Zesiie stood her ground ducked and cut it in half as it soared above the head. "Mission Done Sir, Kaiju terminated. Re-activting breach sealer now." Zesiie said as she made the Jaeger press the button. "Heading towards New Zealand Shatterdome sir, To damaged to make the trip to Hong Kong." Zesiie said. "Allright, I'll meet you there." Larson said over the Radio. "Wow, what rank are you Zesiie?" Yang asked. "Marshal." Zesiie replied. Hours later they where hanging out in The Hong Kong Shatterdome drinking soda. 'So yang, how'd you like your first kaiju kicking ass mission?" Zesiie asked. "Good." Yang said as he put his contact lenses in. "You know kid, you're not to shabby. Maybe you aren't deadweight." Zesiie said. "Thanks," Yang said,

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