Our Story

by Drusila MARIANA Splendor Peru

Just a poem I wrote, please review if you can and tell my goods and, yeah, all my bads if is not to much :p

Just a few word

That's all we crossed

But it was enough

To fall in love

You left me alone

You change me for a war

But playing your songs

Your remind kept on

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I think the same

But it wasn't fair

Cause even though

I never could

As hard as I try

To forget you

While I wrote you letters

That got lost, never appear

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Ada and Inman

Are our names

And only in one night

We forgot the past

To conceive a girl

Your living portrait

Who I'll always love

As much as I love you

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I know what u must be thinking. How dare to publish "THAT"? Well, I actually don't know. But I'd be pretty happy if u people sent me a review. It doesn't matter what it says cuz you'll probably tell about a thousand of horrendous things I've done in my intent of poetry.

Please forgive my writing. In know it got to be insulting but if you could help me by telling me my faults I'd really appreciate that.

Thanks for reading.

P.S.: I also know the "poem" doesn't tell the true about the story in the second paragraph, it was a recent change, but what I had wrote before didn't sound good to me.