Here is the rewrite! The plot should be the same, with differently written scenes and (hopefully) more chapters. Will I finish this one, I have no idea. But until then, enjoy.

Scyrus' P.O.V

*bang* I turned the silverfish into a pink cloud. I was clearing my reactor of an infestation of silverfish, no matter what I line the walls with, they always find a way in. I cleared the room and re-sealed it, I hung my hazmat suit on a hook and proceeded to walk to my room when I was alerted by a siren.

I entered my room and fired up the computer terminal, it read [UNKNOWN PERSONNEL DETECTED WITHIN MFFS SENSOR RANGE] I sighed and exited my room, going toward the elevator. I rode it up and exited the façade house. The coordinates of the other people were glowing on my map. I rolled it up and began walking toward them.

When I neared them, I leapt into the trees to avoid sighting. There were three armored men, one in gold that I assumed was their leader. They looked to be chasing an unarmed girl with the reddest hair I had ever seen. One of the men fired an arrow into the girl's leg and she fell to the ground, unconscious.

I dropped from the tree and the men turned to me, the one with the bow aimed an arrow at my head. "this is private business, leave" I held up my hands. "why are you assaulting this girl?" the men held their places, but their leader walked towards me. "she is a half-blood, we were hired to hunt this one down."

The word half-blood echoed in my mind, before the men could react, I threw two obsidian knives. The knives ripped through of the iron armor worn by the other two. Their leader backpedaled almost to the point of falling down. I slowly but deliberately walked toward him "answer me this, if someone hunted you down simply because you had blue eyes, how would you feel?"

He dropped his shoulders and laughed "you think they feel? They aren't human, nothing but creatures, not people." That was the last straw, I unsheathed the large red blade that hung at my side and he drew his gold sword. With one swing I completely removed the golden blade. his eyes widened, he turned and began to run. I snapped my fingers and heard the sound of pistons, then I heard screaming and the fire of my auto-turrets… then the screaming stopped.

Natalie's P.O.V

i woke slowly, I was laying on the floor of the forest. I looked to my left, a bloodied arrow lay next to me. I looked at my leg and saw a man blurred by my vision holding a glowing stone to my leg. He looked at me and told me to sleep, I complied.

When I re-awoke, I was laying on a large black and red bed. The man who I assumed saved me was sitting in a chair, writing in a book. He glanced at me and threw me a glass bottle full of golden liquid. "drink up" I drank the glowing golden liquid and instantly felt better. "what was that?"

He smirked "golden apple juice, about twice as powerful as a run of the mill healing potion." He turned his chair around to look directly at me. "got a name?" I nodded "Natalie" he smiled. "nice name, mine's Scyrus" I got out of the bed and looked around.

"do you have a home?" he said as I looked around the dark room. I shook my head and he sighed "any family, parents or a crazy uncle?" I shook my head again, frowning. He sighed again "well, you can't stay here."

I nodded and began to exit the room, frowning. "I meant in here, this is my room, you can have the one down the hall." My eyes lit up and I hugged him out of thanks. He struggled and tried to move out of my grip "no, not the hugging! Anything but the hugging"

I laughed for what felt like the first time in years. I let him go and he led me out of the room. The hall was lined in white stone and stone brick. I looked around in awe. "what is this stone" he glanced at the walls as if he hadn't noticed.

"marble, pretty and very common" he led me down the hall to a walkway and as we walked over it lights came on below us, revealing a swarm of iron machines and other things. I stared in awe but Scyrus kept on walking.

The labyrinth-like halls led me to believe that this was a fortress. We came to a room and he opened the door. I walked inside and saw the beautiful blue room. He began out of the room but turned. "it's midnight, get some sleep. You can find a change of clothes in the chest next to the wall."

He shut the door and I approached the monstrous bed. I lay down on the blanket and rather than wool, it was the softest material I had ever felt, I was out like a light upon toughing the pillow.

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Also! I am planning an audiofic (audiobook version of a fanfic) for The Next Chapter (another story of mine) the reasons I am telling you are both because I want to tell you people, and I want voice actors. I need voices for Violet, Colbert, Henrietta, Charles, and any other character I have failed to mention.

Note: I will voice Scyrus and I will narrate, so no need to volunteer for him. If you want to volunteer, just pm me with the character and I will return it with a line or two for you and my email where you can send the file of you speaking and I will pick from the applicants (assuming there are any…).