This is the first chapter of Zombie Claw, please leave a review of what I could improve, or maybe even your OC!
A boy stood on a broken mine-cart. Everywhere around him were rocks, some big enough that you would have to pile a hundred smaller rocks just to look over them.
But the boy was not scared, he had been going to the exact same place for years. It was his private place, a place where he could practise his magic without the risk of hurting anyone but himself.
He tugged on his dusty old shorts, Pulled a black miner's helmet over his messy silver hair and wiped down his blue t-shirt. He was ready, he took a deep breath and yelled "miner's magic:Dynamite!" instantly a horde of small explosions scattered on to a rock in front of him causing pieces of stone to crumble to the floor.
The boy checked every piece carefully , one by one he stacked pieces of stone until he found a huge smooth black piece that stained his fingers, "bingo, coal! And with a size like this, Me and grandpa will get a raise for sure and if we don't then my name won't be Silver Strongmine!"
Silver decided it would be best to stop mining in his spot and to help his grandfather. Though he was far from his grandfather's mining spot, he didn't worry all he did was pick up the coal and put it in his torn, beige backpack then yelled "Miner's magic:Pickaxe!".He dived into the ground and swam through it, like it was water, he went deeper every second, ignoring every shard of sharp rock that went in his light ,blue eyes. Then he stopped and turned up, swimming to the surface until he could see the broken mine- cart that marked his grandfather's mining spot but instead of seeing his grandpa he saw a strange man...
The man yelled to him "come over here ,kiddo!".As Silver walked up to the stranger ,he began to analyze him ,the man had red hair that was put into a Mohawk ,his eyes were covered by a pair of shades ,he had a black goatee that was curled at the end and was wearing a blue vest ,grey jeans and a pair of brown ,leather boots.
The man took off his shades revealing his green eyes and said "Archive:Physical message" ,A glowing ethereal screen showing his grandfather appeared before Silver's eyes ,Silver was so amazed by it he didn't notice when the coal was lifted out of his backpack until it flew at the screen ,Silver had just enough time to yell "what do you think you're doing with that coal" before it was transported through the screen into his grandfather's arms ,Silver noticed it had a tag on it saying "to grandpa from Silver".
The screen zapped into the man's eyes as he put his shades back on. The first thing Silver asked was "how did you know my name?" The man now had a cheeky grin "I use a type of archive that allows me to tap into people's mind and read their thoughts and through one tiny thought and already known data stored in the archive, I can learn everything about them" "how did you send the coal to my grandpa then" "If someone has strong feelings for another, I can send non-living things between them, the fun bit is that it always sends the message you seen but with the names of the people" "why are you here?" "originally I was here to remove a group of cave vulcans that were camping in the bottom of another's mining spot but then I sensed someone with great magic qualities and that person was you" "explain further please" "I am part of a wizard guild and we accept any one with magic in them and you should know that everyone has magic in them so anyone can join but only wizards get invited and you I take are a wizard?" "No I am miner and have been since I was born, where are you going with this?" "Would you like to be a wizard?" "I can't be a wizard, my grandpa is a hard worker but without me, his profits would be cut in half" "and he wouldn't need to feed you so his profits would work out" "true but he would worry too much" " let's ask him to see" "Yeah but he would probably say no"
The man whipped off his shades and yelled "Archive:Brain-mail" The man then said to Silver "Say something, kiddo" "Ok. Grandpa if its ok with you I would like to spend some time being a wizard" Silver heard his Grandfather's voice going "Silver? Where are you?" "In your mining spot speaking to you through magic. And a wizard has asked me if I would like to be a wizard, so can I?" "Oh Silver, it's your life, not mine, whatever choice you make I will be standing by your side, so go on tell your wizard friend that you would like to be a wizard" "thanks Grandpa" The man quickly ended the chat, "he said yes didn't he kiddo?" Silver replied with a grin "He sure did, I am now officially a wizard!" "Great news, now here comes the request, would you like to be a part of zombie claw? "zombie claw? What's that?" "The best ever mage guild!" "I would like to know a few names for me to recognise in the guild before I join." "well my names Spike and the guild master's name is Akio, oh and the training master is Jiro, Don't forget the bartender is Kana" "great when can we head there?" "Now!" Spike laughed and said "Archive:Transport!"
That's the end of chapter 1 stay tuned for chapter 2 to see what friends Silver will make and how the guild looks like. Will it be big, will it small? Let's find out!