My Rewritten version of Chapter 1, as stated before this was a challenge by Triforce Guardian. There are several rules and such but I won't repeat them here, check Triforce's page to see them.

Chapter 1: Washed away

Naruto didn't have time to react before the waves overcame him and Hinata, Naruto held tightly onto the unconscious girl in his arms while he was cursing Zabuza for knocking her out and then throwing her into the river. He could see them in the distance, Kurenai was slightly injured and Kakashi was fighting Zabuza. They hadn't noticed Naruto and Hinata being washed away. Naruto was suddenly hit on the back of his head with a log and knocked unconscious.

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30 minutes later

Naruto awoke to find himself being held up by Hinata floating in the ocean, he can see her eyes she is clearly exhausted from holding him up above the water for some time. Naruto spotted a cave and acting on instinct grabbed on to Hinata and blasts Chakra out of his feet propelling them to the sea side cave. Hinata fainted from the feeling of his embrace but is quickly revived by the ocean water splashing on her face. Naruto and Hinata are standing in a large sea cave, with no way out they decide to walk deeper into the cave. After a few hundred feet they come to find a large metal and glass orb, surrounded by rusted metal and glowing panels.

"Come on Hinata, let's see if we can get inside it" Naruto said urging Hinata on.

"O-okay" Hinata stuttered slightly as she followed Naruto closer as they traversed deeper into the cave.

Not long after they spotted an opening on the side of it facing away from the entrance to the wet and murky cavern they are standing in. Naruto and Hinata got inside and before Hinata could stop or question him Naruto hit the glowing button opposite the opening. Suddenly the opening shut on them and they were trapped and the metal sphere began to descend.

Naruto and Hinata stared in awe as they descended into the depths of the ocean, as they get lower they started to see glowing coral and fish on the sea floor. Then suddenly out of nowhere a giant metal city with glass domes competing with metal towers and glowing signs appears. Naruto for once in his life was speechless at the majestic but aged beauty of the monolithic underwater city. Hinata is also speechless but part of that stems from the realization that she is in a small metal sphere with her crush, the outside view prevented her mind from going places that would cause her to faint.

As they got closer to the city they saw a strange suit of armor outside of it, suddenly the armor started moving. It's a giant pile of metal and glass with a giant drill for a right hand and a strange helmet that completely covers its face in the caricature of a giant human. Nearby the metal giant they noticed a skinny lithe female version, the people in armor waved to them and then they went back to repairing the city walls/dome. Naruto is slightly drooling and Hinata is worried that he is interested in the woman before he said "Man that is some cool armor, where can I get some I want a suit"

Hinata's spirits soared as she realized that he was interested in the armor, but a thought occurred to her and she said "U-umm N-Naruto-kun I-I think that w-we're too y-young to wear t-that armor c-cause of I-its size"

Naruto nodded and replied "Oh good thinking Hinata I didn't think of that, now that I think of it that armor would be a bit too big for me wouldn't it?" Hinata wordlessly nodded in response and then a jarring thud echoed through the sphere and they realized that they have stopped they suddenly started rising and are now within the city.

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Entrance Hallway

The opening reopened and they walked out in to a corridor made of metal, on the walls are some strange glowing orbs providing light in the distance is a door with a strange plane of glass next to it. Naruto and Hinata run towards the door and suddenly the glass plane lights up and they see the image of a pale man with black hair and snake like eyes.

Suddenly they heard a voice and the pictures mouth started to move like he was speaking.

"To whomever finds this, my name is Orochimaru and I am one of the Sannin of Konoha. Some time ago I found references to a metal city that predates the Rikudō Sennin. A city named Rapture, After much searching I found this city where you now stand. I found it full of people with strange powers that were so like Jutsus and yet not. I explored this city and found the lost inhabitants who had gone mad, they were named splicers and through use of these powers called Plasmids they altered their minds and bodies until they couldn't be called Human anymore. I found the source of their abilities to alter their bodies in a slug called the ADAM Slug, only after implanting it into my body did I find out the side effects. Only a girl of fifteen years or younger can safely have an ADAM slug implanted, if they are older the body attempts to reject it and the resulting battle between the body and the slug leaves the person deformed and insane. I managed to remove the slug before that happened but unfortunately I can feel my mind slipping and I am considering things I wouldn't before. So in my final act of sanity I'm going to use Forbidden Jutsu: Mind Wipe to remove all knowledge of Rapture and its secrets from my mind. I beg of you please, kill me if you get the chance for I will have surely gone insane. This is the last will and testament of Orochimaru Akagi, Snake Sannin of Konoha. Good luck and may the Will of Fire burn brightly within you"

Hinata was shivering uncontrollably after the video ends, Naruto looked sad but determined and then he said "I will kill you Orochimaru, so you may find peace in the afterlife – Dattebayo"

Naruto then looked at Hinata and said "But I'm probably not strong enough, I don't know what a Sannin is but they sound powerful"

Hinata nodded knowing that Naruto was out of the class when they covered the Sannin and said "T-they are, t-the three S-Sannin are e-equal to the H-Hokage in f-fact all t-three of them c-could be considered H-Hokage candidates or rather they w-were before O-Orochimaru went I-insane and T-Tsunade left the v-village, the only Sannin left who still works as Shinobi for the village is Jiraiya the Toad sage" Hinata's stutter slowly vanished and her voice grew more confident as she noticed that Naruto was listening to her intently.

Naruto looked down sadly and then suddenly brightened up and said "That means if I beat one of them I'm strong enough to be consider for Hokage, right?"

Hinata nodded and Naruto jumped in the air and shouted happily and said "Yes, I'm one step closer to my dream, I wonder if I can use the powers of this City?"

Hinata's eyes widened though most people wouldn't notice and she hurriedly said "N-Naruto-kun did y-you hear t-the message f-from Orochimaru? T-those powers d-drove the p-people here insane"

Naruto nodded "Yeah, I heard it, but what if I only used a couple at a time and made a limit on how many I use, that should protect me. Besides you're here, you can tell me if I'm going to far okay?"

Hinata nodded and shyly stuttered out "O-okay" Naruto smiled at her which caused her blush to increase before he went to the door and opened it.

They walked through the door into a large room with a massive window on the opposite side to the door, in the middle of the room is a table with a note on it. Naruto and Hinata walked over to the table and read the note laying there.

'If you're reading this you probably got my message and decided to use the powers of the city as your own. It is safe as long as you don't implant a ADAM slug, unless you're a girl under the age of fifteen of course.

I've killed all the splicers so it's safe to venture into the city but remember these basic rules.

1 Don't annoy the 'Big Daddies' those are the massive metal armored men, they protect the 'Little sisters' who have ADAM slugs.

Ad far as I am aware there aren't any 'Little sisters' left so that shouldn't be a problem, they are probably repairing and maintaining the city.

2 Watch out for the 'Big Sisters' they are the 'Little Sisters' that have grown up, be careful but as there should be no more 'Little Sisters' they should be harmless and help the 'Big Daddies' repair and maintain Rapture if you are clever or friendly you may make allies of them.

3 Although I'm certain they are dead 'Splicers' may still be roaming around, same with 'Little Sisters' be careful – Orochimaru'

Naruto stopped in his reading, smiled and said "Well I guess this guy must of been a genius to figure that we would ignore the danger or he knew what Konoha Shinobi are like"

Hinata nodded, smiled and said "P-probably the s-second one" Naruto smirked back at her and then read the next bit.

'Plasmids the special powers of the people here require ADAM to implant into your body, They run on a substance named EVE which performs a function similar to Chakra.

Luckily their use doesn't affect Jutsus and tends to increase the amount of Chakra and the level of Chakra Control one possesses.

One's body can handle a maximum of six simultaneous Plasmids, any more and you have to be selective on what you use otherwise you begin to lose your sanity.

Tonics are similar to Plasmids but aren't active effect but passive abilities that are always active, they can make you faster, stronger, increase the powers of your senses and even affect your Chakra and your ability to control it.

You can have fifteen simultaneous Tonics at once anymore and you start to sicken and eventually die. Now to get ADAM there are two ways.

One, if you are a girl under the age of Fifteen you can implant the ADAM slugs provided at this location to allow you to create a trickle of ADAM, by drinking blood from a dead corpse you can transform the blood into ADAM and boost your supply.

Two you can find a 'Big Sister' and either kill her or befriend her and have her give you ADAM. Note if you are a girl and you choose the first option you can give ADAM to anyone with you this is the safest way, alternatively you can take some of the allies blood, transform it into ADAM and give the ADAM to them – Orochimaru'

Naruto looked up thoughtfully and started thinking about something intently, Hinata quickly scanned the map provided.

'The door to the Left of this Chamber as you entered leads to Rapture at large, the Door to the Right leads to a training ground, a small armory with weaponry inside and a note explaining them, A Implantation lab where you can implant a ADAM slug, a genetics lab where you can create Plasmids and Tonics.

I have left notes on the creation of both there and finally an Apartment block living quarters that can hold 40 people comfortably. I hope you find Rapture to be useful, if you go exploring, there are maps all over the place that have translated themselves into the common language that will allow you to traverse the city easily.

This place is called the 'Terminus Hub' and the Hallway you entered Rapture from is imaginatively named the 'Entrance Hallway' at the end is the Bathysphere in which you traveled to this city. Good luck and be careful – Orochimaru'

As Hinata finished reading she realized that Naruto was reading over her shoulder, she almost freaked before slowly calming down and then she asked "N-Naruto-kun what w-were you t-thinking about j-just then?"

Naruto looked at her intently causing her to blush slightly and said "I was thinking that there is a way for us to get powerful, but it relies on you Hinata"

Hinata's eyes widened and she stammered in shock "W-w-what?"

Naruto gave a sad smile and said "Hinata would you be willing to have an ADAM slug implanted to provide us with a source of ADAM that is safe and reliable?"

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