~Hello everyone! I am not new to the fanfiction world at all, but I am new to the writing aspect of it. This is my first story and I would appreciate some constructive criticism to help me improve my writing style.~
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The air around the group of kids on the back of Appa was alive with the fire that was being thrown at them from the deck of the fire navy ship they had been trying to out fly for quite a while now. "How come we always get in these kinds of situations?!" Sokka complained loudly over the wind as he struggled to keep from falling out of saddle as Aang had to swerve to avoid a particularly close blast of fire. It hadn't been long since their encounter with Azula and her insane little friends and they had tried to stay out of sight, but there hadn't been that many clouds to use as cover.
"Your whining is not helping, Sokka!" Katara snapped at her brother as she used water from the water skin on her hip to put out a small flame that had gotten onto one of the bedrolls. She grabbed onto the side of the saddle as Appa dropped out of the air and to the ocean below them before leveling back out and gaining altitude, glancing over to check on the youngest of their little group. Toph seemed fine to her other than looking like she was going to pass out or throw up at any second.
Toph currently was trying to focus on blocking everything out and keeping her lunch down, not noticing her death grip on the saddle had loosened up until Appa dropped once again. "TOPH!" Katara cried out with wide eyes as she rushed to grab the younger girl, the fabric of Toph's shirt bushing against the tips of her fingers as she fell over the side. Toph desperately tried to find a hold in Appa's fur just as he swerved, leaving her to fall rapidly down to the water. "Toph fell out of the saddle!" Katara yelled to Aang as she secured her hold back onto the side.
Aang's eyes widened and he turned Appa around and tried to make it back to where Toph was falling. They had almost reached where she was still falling, but Aang had to pull back on the reigns as fire was blasted right in front of them, blocking the earthbender from sight. Once the fire had dissipated, the group were terrified when they couldn't see their friend.
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Toph couldn't help but scream as she fell, keeping her eyes shut tightly. She couldn't hear anything over the wind rushing past her and the initial break of the water as she finally stopped falling. Her breath was knocked out of her with the impact and she thrashed around, feeling something pull her deeper and deeper into the water until she had blacked out from the lack of oxygen.
The young girl hadn't expected to wake up after an experience like that, but her eyes snapped open and she violently cough up the water in her lungs before greedily taking some much needed air into her lungs. After what seemed like an eternity Toph sat up, feeling grass brush against her skin and the ground beneath her which made her pause in thought 'Wasn't I just in water?'. She stood up shakily and was wondering if all of it had just been some sort of messed up dream when a breeze blew over her, causing a shiver to run through her body as she was now aware of her soaking wet clothes.
She refused to think of anything else as exhaustion took over her mind, making his thoughts jumble together. She stomped her feet on the ground and made a tent with solid slabs of earth. She closed it off the the outside world and settled down onto the ground, closing her eyes once again and letting sleep overtake her. Toph didn't once think about how strange it was that she couldn't feel or hear any of her friends nearby.
(I hope you all enjoined the first chapter!)