This is just commentary on My Immortal. I own nothing except my commentary. This story belongs to Tara Gilesbie.
AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik) 2 my gf (ew not in that way) raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling. (How the heck do you call that spell checking?) U rok! Justin ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! MCR ROX!
Hi my name is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way and I have long ebony black hair (Wow! I have short brown hair!) (that's how I got my name) with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid tears (Since when are tears icy blue?) and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!). I'm not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he's a major fucking hottie. (Well he doesn't want to be related to you) I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white. (How does that make sense?) I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen). I'm a goth (in case you couldn't tell) (Hon, we could all tell by the first freaking sentence) and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. (Hot Topic is a music store. NOT a goth store) For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. (Well I'm wearing a Fluttershy t-shirt and neon green sneakers. BEAT THAT!) I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. (Hmm, I wonder why) I put up my middle finger at them. (You seem like such a LOVELY person)
"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was... (Princess Celestia?) Draco Malfoy! (Damn)
"What's up Draco?" I asked.
"Nothing." he said shyly.
But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away. (What friends?)
AN: IS it good? PLZ tell me fangz! (It sucks)