Well this is extremely short. Hope its OK. Tell me what you think please. I don't care if you think it's horrible. Just tell me what you honestly think and what I can do to improve it. It's kinda my first time writing like this. To tell you the truth, I think it's a bit strange. Alrighty then! Start story...NOW! xD
Revenge
I had been tracking her for a long time. It's extremely difficult to track a vampire, especially when you're as clumsy as me. But I had some help. I made some "friends" on the way, but only because I needed to. It was the only way I could get what I wanted.
I walk into the bar and spot her automatically.
There she is my savior. She will help me. I know she will. Her hair is as fiery red as it was the day I last seen her. Oh such a beautiful creature.
She is sitting across the room.
It's sad that she has been so focused on hunting lately. So she can get stronger? So she can finally kill me? But She already knows the Cullen family abandoned me. So why? It doesn't matter.
I walk over to get her attention.
I couldn't live like this. Knowing that he could have been with me; then choosing not to? It was just too much to bear. I couldn't take it anymore. That's why I'm doing this now.
I tap her on the shoulder, and then beckon her outside.
I know he still loves me, but I can't stand him! Always doing what he "assumes" is best for me. He doesn't know! He doesn't understand!
She follows me.
He once told me that if I died, he'd die too. But I made him promise not to. And he better keep his promise. When I die, I want him to suffer.
Now we are standing outside the building.
At first I wanted him to live his life to the fullest and never forget that you can be happy no matter who or what you are. But now I know that's not true.
"Bite me." I command.
I guess its true; there really is a fine line between love and hate. I thought I would love him forever. But my love had been tainted and was now morphed into pure hate.
"Kill me." I plead now.
This is how I want it all to end. It's going to be painful for him; because it's all, his fault. And if he goes back on his word, and dies, he will die with regret.
She smiles, like she understands why I'm here; maybe she can see it in my eyes.
I remember wanting to be bitten by Edward, but that is a lost dream now, never to be found again. It's all over.
She reaches for me and grabs me by the shoulders, then gives me an evil grin that makes my whole body tremble. Gently she moves my head to the side, exposing my pale neck. I bet she can smell the sweet blood that runs threw my vanes. My heart beat slows, I relax, and I know what comes next. Revenge.
This is after Edward leaves but Alice never has a vision and Jacob never really got the happy Bella back. And I hope its pretty obvious that the person Bella is looking for, has found and is killed by, is Victoria. And if its not, I'm sorry.
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