I am in dire need of a beta reader for mainly grammar (as you can clearly tell) as well as some content, so please offer! Also, suggestions and ideas for future chapters are appreciated, as I have the basic plot line but nothing really filling it right now. Ages: Jazz-18 Danny-16 Lillian-14.
Danny Fenton POV
Jazz and I were sitting on the couch in the Fenton Living Room, waiting for the big surprise Mom had. Dad was lounging in his chair, messing with some ghost hunting weapon that looked like a remote controller with laser cannons while mom was standing next to him with her arms crossed, tapping her foot excitedly.
Finally the doorbell ringing broke the silence. "I'll get it!" Mom said, rushing to the door. She came back to the living room, smiling, with two people: the first was a woman that had the exact same body and facial features as mom, complete with purple eyes, except she had a few less wrinkles. Also, her eyes looked not only happy but also nervous, and a bit scared. She was wearing a normal outfit of blue jeans and a button-up purple shirt with slip-on shoes. The second person was a girl who looked a few years younger than myself. Her medium-length black hair was tied back in a ponytail with a red hair scrunch. Her bright blue eyes looked both bored and distant, but friendly. She was wearing a white blouse with red ribbon trim and blue jeans, with white and red sneakers like my own.
"Danny, Jazz, this is my sister Michelle-" she gestured to the lady "-and my niece Lillian, your cousin. They're going to be moving to Amity." She hugged the girl. "It's so nice to meet you," she said to her. "Lillian, these two are my children Jazz and Danny. I'm sure you'll get along."
Jazz got up and walked to Lillian. "Hey Lillian, it's nice to finally meet you." They gave each other a hug.
"Michelle," Maddie said, "why don't we let these kids meet each other and we can catch up on the time we've missed in the kitchen." They began to walk off, when Maddie yelled "Jack!" She motioned her head to the kitchen.
Jack sighed. "Maddie, I'm almost done with the Fenton Finder 2.0!" Just then there was a loud bang and dad was covered with soot. "Just a few more bugs to work out." He got up and followed the two grownups to the kitchen, leaving the three of us alone.
"Hey Lillian," I said, giving her a smile. I looked over at Jazz. "How come I didn't know mom had a sister?"
Jazz rolled her eyes. "You don't pay any attention, do you Danny? Mom told us weeks ago that she was moving here. Sorry about my brother," she said to Lillian.
"Oh, that's okay. I forget things sometimes also." She had a bit of a British accent. It was very cute. In fact, she was kind of cute, if she wasn't my cousin I mean. "Nice to meet you Danny."
There was a long silence until Jazz stepped in. "So Lillian, where did you come from, and why'd you decide to move here?"
"Well, we moved around a lot ever since I was a child, my mum and I. I grew up in England but then moved to Upstate New York at age 7. A few years later we moved to North Carolina, then my mom decided that she wanted to visit her family, but instead of visiting we're moving here. Actually, we're moving across the street from you guys."
"It must have been nice, England," Jazz said with a sigh, "all of those great European guys."
"That was the best part," she said with a laugh.
I started making grossed out faces.
"Hey, why don't I take you on a tour of the house?" The two of them went off down the hallway.
Lillian glanced over her shoulder and giggled. "You coming cousin?"
"Ah, yeah!" I ran and caught up with them.