I know at least a couple of people read this story and I re read it not that long ago and I saw how little I wrote and how bad it was. So I re wrote the first chapter and here it is.

Two Thieves

Chapter 1- Introduction

Normal point of view...

Have you ever heard of Wolf's Mage and Dragon Rider? The two thieves that are most known in all Egypt. Most likely, if you haven't, you know how most thieves travel in packs? Well these two did not. Their only ally was the other. They were like family. Maybe not by blood but by heart. They trusted each other completely, and they thought nothing could ever separate them. They were the most famous thieves but know one knew anything about them. They didn't know that they were girls. Nor did they know that they were just at the age of seventeen. Most thieves are men and much older then the age of seventeen. Who would think two young girls would be able to scare the people of Egypt so bad, to look out there windows each night and tell monstrous tales to there kids about them before sent to bed? These two girls with terrible pasts met four years back and became the best of friends and the most feared thieves, and there out to get the people that ruined there lives, High priest Seth and, The soon to be Pharaoh Atemu. They only feared, if you wanted to call it that one. Bakura and his pack of followers, they are also known very well. Maybe just maybe they are even more known then the Dragon Rider and Wolf's Mage…

Chirone's point of View...

'Akiko should be back soon…' I paced in our house. Well a place we have been calling our home. It was a cave in a desert oasis about seven or eight miles away from Cairo. A deep cave with only two ways out, the main way, the one Akiko and I used everyday was covered by a waterfall, and the other opening was a crack in the side that is big enough for a horse to get through. Vines covered it when not used though. Not many people come here and when they do they just drop by for some water and maybe a little rest. We leave them alone unless they're working for that damned pharaoh. I look toward the beginning of cave again 'She was still not back yet'. You see I sent my sister out a couple of hours ago to go get some supplies and our horses. We were going to move to are other hideout tomorrow and she was still not back yet.

Not a half an hour later I heard horses out side of the waterfall and girl jump through the water. She took off a long black clock that covered her whole body. There my sister stood with long blonde hair skin, paler then a normal Egyptian, and in her hands she held… nothing. "Hey Chi, I'm back!" she said sad as she walked to the back of the cave to her precious bright red baby dragon, "Did you get the supplies?" She gave a small smile and her eyes lit up with teasing. "Maybe!" I hated when she was like this, she knew how serious about moving when Bakura was coming around. Not to mention after we moved we were going to Cairo to have a little fun and show that pack of dogs, who the real thieves were. As she answered me she pulled out a couple mice and started feeding them to Riku her pet dragon.

"Akiko! Did you get the horses and other shit or not, we have to get moving and then ready for tomorrow's raid?!?" She looked up when she heard her name. She finished feed her dragon and stood up slowly, brushing off the blood from the rats on her pants. "Yes I did, Calm down why do you think I was gone all that time?" she rolled her eyes and went back to her baby. Ever since we found Riku in one of the pharaoh's back rooms she seems to turn softer, more mother like and caring. I knew thought when we went on raids or anything along the lines or our work. She turned back to her old fighting self. Maybe Riku was good for her he seems to take her mind of her past. I wish I had something like that, something to make me not be as revengeful towards the pharaoh. I shook my head, I felt a headache coming on. "Hey I am going out for food, and a walk it sucks being trapped inside all day."

She turned around and looked at me smiling again, "I told you, you should of came out with me to get the stuff!" Turned to the door, made sure my daggers were in my pocket and jumped through the waterfall. I felt the cool water run down my body, Bakura was coming to Cairo tomorrow. Meaning he was going to try and prove he was the better thief. This would be funny, I was going to show him we were better. But I don't get it I knew if we got to close to him he would either try to kill us or get us to join his pack…. That's why were changing to our other hideout. But why was there this rivalry going on between him and me… I mean we are on the same side. Against the pharaoh, right? And me and my sister have a better reason to go after that son of a bitch, he- I stopped myself thinking about it Every time I think about it I always cried. And rights know I wasn't going to do that, I had dinner to go kill. But I needed to think about moving first

Normal point of view…

Chirone walked through the waterfall and sat down at lake in the oasis. See didn't even realize when she walked through that pool of water coming down on her that she did cry, a few tears fell but were quickly washed away by the water. Her past, so harsh it brought tears to her eyes. She lost her memories, lost her home, family, even her love for life. Now she only cares about three things, Her best friend, the beast that saved her and, her revenge. She may not be able to remember her full past but she remembers some of it the basics the parts that are important. Her parents, and her older brother. She remembers what her parents looked like, almost every detail, from the sandy white hair of her fathers, to her mothers changing eyes, a lot like hers. But her brother she can't remember a single thing besides how they cared so much for each other a couple past things they used to do like play thief and guard, but not what he looks like or even his name. She knows it was the pharaoh's fault. She remembers her parents and brother not being there and the pharaoh just laughing at the destroyed village. She remembers the guards killing her mother right in front of her. Little flashback just drives her on even more to the thirst for revenge.

I will try and get the renewed second chapter up soon, but I am not promising anything.