Hi there… so this is my first Narnia story and I would really like some tips and some comments and corrections. I don't care if you give me some bad reviews because I belive you can always improve your work,ok so let me tell you about the characters.

Peter: age 20

Susan: age 19

Edmund: age 17

Marie Anne: age 16 ½

Lucy: age 15

PS: Can someone help me about the issue in the first chapter. I am not sure how schools were like during WWII in England. If they weren't schools at all because of the war please tell me. I am going to try to look it up. :) THANK YOU FOR CALYN FOR TELLING ME ABOUT THIS ISSUE AND THANK YOU FOR THE OTHER REVIEWERS :D

PSS: NVM I CHANGED IT. I HOPE YOU LIKE IT BETTER AND IT IS MORE CLEAR. -CINDERELLAS