Well as much as I hate to say it, THIS IS NOT MY PLOT. iIactually read some else's story and I disliked the way they wrote it, they were asking if anyone else wanted to take over the story and I volunteered to send her a draft of how I would write the first chapter. It's been a couple of days since I sent her the draft, and I still haven't gotten a reply so I said WHY NOT GET YOUR OPINION? So i hope this doesn't make any one angry and im sorry for the person who origanally made up this plot, but i just wanted to try. IF u feel offended or mad feel free to voice your opinions, It won't hurt me.

Hope you enjoy.

Here goes nothing.

*all thoughts are in italic.*

I own nothing.

Bpov

Baseball…

I always thought this sport was so boring considering the fact that I can't understand it, but DAMN, after seeing the Cullen's play I don't think I will ever look at it the same.

As I stand watching the game with Esme I can't stop the smile that creeps onto my face when I look toward Edward, HE is so competitive, I think and I turn my head back to see Carlisle up to bat. But since I can't keep my head off Edward for more than a second I turn my eyes to watch him, this is when I hear Alice gasp.

Edward and Alice's eyes met and, certain electricity flowed through them, I was trying to figure out what was going on until I felt Edward by my side.

"Alice?" Esme's voice was tense.

"I didn't see — I couldn't tell," Alice whispered."

What's going on?" I thought as everyone else gathers around.

"What is it Alice?" Carlisle asked with a calm voice.

"They were traveling much quicker than I thought. I can see I had the perspective wrong before," She murmured.

"What changed?" Jasper asked while leaning over her protectively.

"They heard us playing, and it changed their path," As soon as Alice said that I felt seven pairs of golden eyes flash toward me and then back to Alice.

"How soon?" Carlisle asked turning toward Edward.

"Less than five minutes, they're running— they want to play." He scowled

"No, not carrying—" He cut short "besides the last thing we need is for them to catch he scent and start hunting."

OH. MY. GOD! My mind screamed after I realized what they were talking about. Other vampires… DAMN. There are only two others I know and… OH. MY. GOD! I think my heart is going to fall out of my chest.

The conversation continued on how to handle the situation and in less than a minute Carlisle decided that we continue the game regardless if three vicious vampires were possibly going to suck me dry.

"Take your hair down," Edward said in a low even voice.

I obediently slid the rubber band out of my hair and shook it out around me.

"The others are coming now." I stated.

"Yes, stay very still, keep quiet and don't move from my side please." He pulled my long hair forward around my face.

"That won't help," Alice said softly "I can smell he across the field."

Damn.

They continued the game and about one minute later I felt Edward's body tense up.

They emerged one by one from the forest edge, ranging a dozen meters apart. My human eyes weren't strong enough to see their faces yet. But as they started to get clearer as they approached. I see an outline of dirty blond hair and I instantly think of my brother, I blink and when I open my eyes, my heart stops.

It can't be him, I haven't seen him since the night he told me what he was, and that was five years ago.

I gasp and a tear rolls down my face, "James." His name comes as a choked up whisper. His head snaps in my direction, and I notice and I notice something as his eyes burn into mine.

"Bella" I hear him say.

And suddenly I am drowning into a sea of red.

Well this is my draft on how I would do the first chapter.

And I hope you like it. PLEASE reveiw and tell me what you think. And the end sentence "And suddenly Iwas drowning in a sea of red ."

I hope u understood it , IT DOES NOT MEAN THAT SHE GOT BIT.

and if you think you know then tell me what you think it means in the reveiw a nd ill give you a sneak if you get it right.

Thank you and reeviw.

-Michelle