Okay, here's the dealy-o people. I really want some feedback on this one. This will be my first full-length multi-chapter story. If I am to really finish this story...I want some back-up. This story will be finished despite whatever happens because I want it finished and there's nothing stopping me. I just want some knowledge about what others think about it. The prologue can be a smaple for now buuuuuuuut-by next week I will have the first chapter up. I already have the prologue plus two chapters done and I am going to be putting up this story raw for now. Until it is finished, I will not make any editations, I might get a beta to fix whatever and then I'll revise it my self to check whatever mistkaes I have. I already have an outline planned out for this story and that outline kinda' scares me! XD, sooooo, I really-REALLY would like feedback people. It's not hard to click the "go" button on the bottom of the page and type in a little something for me. As a future writer, I would like some criticism now. It would be easier to upgrade my skills while I have the time and it would really help if anyone leaves tips. Please, leave nothing harsh, I want something professional if you're planning on REALLY reviewing this prologue/preview of The Fork Stabbings. Please enjoy you read and sorry for making you read this long AN if you did.
-Kisses, Meshi!
The Fork Stabbings
Prologue: Ex's and Oh's
by: Meshi Chu
Naruto couldn't believe he was still sitting in from of his ex's apartment door.
Even worse, he couldn't believe that he was venting it out with said ex's younger brother. The younger brother whom he had held a deadly, passionate hate for. At the moment, the youngest brother is the only one he harbors hate for. It's the whole lot of the Uchiha, except for their uncle, Kakashi. Yes, the old pervert was in almost at thirty and needs a girlfriend, or whatever he prefers, but the man was of a something of a sore-spot in his heart as he reminded Naruto of his deceased uncle. Also, it might have to do that their uncle didn't share that accursed Uchiha-blood.
Despite that, Naruto hated the Uchiha brothers but-but Sasuke didn't seen as bad as he did before.
The hand on his shoulder gave him some-what of a warm comfort and Sasuke's rant on "you are not the only one that hates Itachi" cheered him up…some-what. Naruto studied the younger Uchiha before him. He resembled Itachi, yes, but he has sort-of an acquired softness. As if the younger one had been exposed more to it than Itachi had. Maybe it has to do for the fact that their parent's died when Sasuke was merely a child, or maybe, Kakashi was right and Sasuke takes more after his mother. No one knows.
Naruto stared on at the brunet before him as he remembered in Middle School, when he and Itachi first met and they used to fight for the eldest Uchiha's affection. That reason is most-likely the cause of Naruto's hate for Sasuke. Now that he looks at it, Naruto doesn't have a reason to hate Sasuke anymore, now that he has-had Itachi.
Yeah, okay. Like he would ever call Itachi his again. Fuck the bastard. After Itachi and him beat the shit out of each other, shouted, fought some more, had violent sex, then Itachi decided to break his heart by saying the sex meant nothing and he still doesn't want to be with Naruto, the break-up became official. It was a scene straight out of the soap-operas that give on the local cable channels.
Then, he felt something bubble up in his stomach. Something he hadn't felt in only a matter of hours but felt like years. A laugh. He laughed right in the younger Uchi-Sasuke's face and laughed harder when Sasuke shot him a glare.
The brunet growled out, "What?!"
"You're not too bad, Uchiha." Naruto snorted back.
"Really now?"
Naruto's smile faltered for a bit when Sasuke shot him the signature Uchiha smirk. Just like his fucking brothers. Naruto facial expression (which resembled something of a cross between an angered bear and a wet cat) had Sasuke questioning him again.
"What's wrong with you, are you bipolar or something?"
Naruto choked on his own spit, 'Shit!' He screeched, our horridly. "NO!"
Sasuke chuckled which also was a relief to Naruto's senses for once.
"Calm down, dobe."
Naruto's eyebrow twitched, he suddenly remembered another reason why he hated Sasuke. The bastard was good at name calling. Yes, it is a childish reason, but it was one of them. Naruto sighed, maybe he should just avoid all Uchiha's. They're bad for his health. They all cause the same symptoms: Anger, distress, annoyance, nausea, uncontrollable-gases, etc…
"You…teme…"
Sasuke's smirk reappeared, "Why are you calling me you twice?" (1)
Naruto pouted and huffed in response. His blue eyes aimed anger in Sasuke's direction, which was not very far since the bastard was sitting right next to him. It appeared not to faze the other teen as all his (poorly attempted) efforts did was make Sasuke's smirk grow tenfold.
'Note to self: become immune to Uchiha smirk...soon,' Naruto promised, no swore, that this thought will one day be true. Psh, yeah right.
"Listen Uchiha, thanks for the pep-talk and everything, but right now, you're kinda' screwing it up with your bastard-y like attitude."
Sasuke snorted and Naruto's insides flared up with rage. The Uchiha smoothly walked past Naruto in his Indian-style seating position and reached the front door to his apartment. Where Itachi is currently residing.
Where Itachi is currently residing.
'Where Itachi is currently residing…'
As Naruto spaced out, Sasuke felt amused at the scene unfolding before him. The blonde had a dazed expression on his face and a tiny bit of drool hung out the side of his mouth. That actually irked Sasuke, so he took care of it.
While in his dazed state, Naruto did notice Sasuke kneeling in front of his and reaching towards his face until a thumb swiped away a wad of spit dangling from his chin. Then, the same hand rubbing against his shirt as Sasuke's face contorted in a look of distaste. Naruto stared at the outrageous scene before him, Sasuke doesn't do nice. The brunet looked up and Naruto was startled into another daze. Uchiha Sasuke was smiling.
Naruto felt like he just shit rainbows or something because that smile had an effect on him.
The smile was not like Itachi's creepy smirk-smile hybrid, it was a nice curl of lips that formed plump, pink lip into a small smile.
Of course Naruto knew that very same smile was out of pity for his break-up, he ignored it and let his imagination go to work as angels flew from the ceiling and a chorus of "Hallelujah's" were sung. Naruto let out a smile of his own…which wasn't really a smile at all. It was an offense to fake smiles around the world. He had his lips turned downwards and his teeth had shown through with light, just in the wrong form. It was downright un-Naruto and Sasuke detected this quickly.
Sasuke spoke up " Listed up usuratonkachi, I'm already about to head inside my house, you wasted my time as it is and I think it's time for you to go home as well. How about…I give you my cell number and or meet you at lunch tomorrow?"
Naruto couldn't believe his ears.
"Wait-no, not my number, but I'll see you tomorrow at school."
Naruto sat there as if he had been sitting there for years and it's his first time getting up. He slowly stood on his feet and faced Sasuke with an open mouth.
Sasuke, in reaction to the blonde in front of him, he laughed (again, causing angels and the chorus to start up) and told Naruto to close his mouth unless he wants to catch flys. After that, he entered his apartment, leaving Naruto alone, once again.
To Naruto, it had felt like five years had gone by instead of five minutes while they spoke, interacted, and whatever the hell else they did. Also, it took him a few seconds to register that Sasuke was gone from his sight and had insulted him. Only one thing remained in Naruto's mind, 'Sonuvabitch.'
He stood there for a while, forgetting about the fact that he's supposed to be leaving…
Then it hit 'em.
"Oh."
And he left.
TBC?
(1): Teme roughly means bastard but it is actually a rude way of saying YOU in Japanese.
Also, for anyone whom skipped the upper AN...please read it now. Oh, and if you like, please take a look at my oneshot stories! They're fun filled and a great quick-read! XD!
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